Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest
you tell the stories in so few words of your girl and best friend betrayed you so after contracting AIDS you got your revenge
your image is portrayed well
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2014

Comment from chicken scratch love

Excellent

I suppose you've nailed "the ultimate revenge" to our pallette. This is mighty creepy, yet VERY effective when considering the prompt. Well done! Thanks for the share and good luck!

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2014

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the picture. That is what you should have done. The offending couple got their come-upance. Too bad the man in the story suffered too. At least he has the knowledge the two offenders are going with him. Great work. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2014

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Wow ok that sure has a powerful punch...great writing and strong submission - good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2014

Comment from Erik McGinley

Excellent

Lol. This is the second poem I read like this. Maybe you wrote the one about the girl with STD.

Life is so like this. Fuck me over and I'll drag you down with me.

I wonder how few are the people that don't understand the logic in it?

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2014

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Revenge most foul. There is no-one quite so vindictive as the cuckolded husband - except perhaps the cuckolded wife!
Your pair of 5-7-5s are in perfect counterpoint with one another.

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014

Great. I'm pleased that the meaning is clear. Cool new formatting I think. Love the large picture and display. Thanks for the great review!!