The Bard of Bel Air
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Lawyers, Headlines, Ungrateful Kids!"A homeless man sees more than people realize.
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Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is rich on several levels. The narcissistic world of Blackwell is way scary and it may be something that is happening right now with elitist billionaires wanting to spread the love. I know you are an equal opportunity writer, so make sure you let a Democrat fall under your stabbing pen. LOL. Interesting subplots going on. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this is rich on several levels. The narcissistic world of Blackwell is way scary and it may be something that is happening right now with elitist billionaires wanting to spread the love. I know you are an equal opportunity writer, so make sure you let a Democrat fall under your stabbing pen. LOL. Interesting subplots going on. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from Sankey
Another interesting chapter friend. Been talking to someone else in FS about doing what y9u do ...letting the readers/ reviewers suggest stuff haha. I liked the Bieber bit haha also Hehe tin can and string ha I remember that as a kid.
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Another interesting chapter friend. Been talking to someone else in FS about doing what y9u do ...letting the readers/ reviewers suggest stuff haha. I liked the Bieber bit haha also Hehe tin can and string ha I remember that as a kid.
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from l.raven
OMG you goof...I had to laugh with this one...200 gallons of Blackwell what???LOL...I'm pulling my hair out...LOL...ok I need Bard back...let me move on ...I'm behind....how do you keep up with all the reviews and replies Michael ????luff Linda xxoo
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OMG you goof...I had to laugh with this one...200 gallons of Blackwell what???LOL...I'm pulling my hair out...LOL...ok I need Bard back...let me move on ...I'm behind....how do you keep up with all the reviews and replies Michael ????luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Your tabloid headlines are disturbingly accurate, a depiction of the times. 200 gallons of sperm - is there a Kong in the Blackwell family? And for the record, Braniac is a D.C. character, a Superman villain. Another good chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Your tabloid headlines are disturbingly accurate, a depiction of the times. 200 gallons of sperm - is there a Kong in the Blackwell family? And for the record, Braniac is a D.C. character, a Superman villain. Another good chapter.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Damn! I know that. I should go fix that. I'm a D.C. guy anyway. Green Lantern is my childhood hero. I was thinking of the girls being X-Men chicks. Loving your reviews and listening closely. I'll get caught up someday. Trying to keep up with reviews at least. Glad you are liking this. Keeping out of trouble so far!! mikey
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I'm Batman all the way. G.L.is cool too. If you are at all inclined, pick up some of the Green Lantern graphic novels by Geoff Johns. The Sinestro War is really good.
Comment from seaglass
Wow, 'The Inquirer' is at work on this one. Lots of wrong going on and it will take a lot of digging and police work to bring it all down. Keepin' us on the edge...
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Wow, 'The Inquirer' is at work on this one. Lots of wrong going on and it will take a lot of digging and police work to bring it all down. Keepin' us on the edge...
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
This keeps expanding yet it keeps getting tighter somehow. This chapter was a blast!!!! Always time for humor. Laughing to tears. The story remains exciting in spite of the madness!!!! NG
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This keeps expanding yet it keeps getting tighter somehow. This chapter was a blast!!!! Always time for humor. Laughing to tears. The story remains exciting in spite of the madness!!!! NG
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
Comment from Nosha17
It is an intricate story which makes if more effective and interesting. It will be interesting to see how it will all come together, you are a master writer. The characters are so likeable and the narrative flows so well. Great write as always. Faye
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It is an intricate story which makes if more effective and interesting. It will be interesting to see how it will all come together, you are a master writer. The characters are so likeable and the narrative flows so well. Great write as always. Faye
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
I loved the news articles ("Are You Harpster's Kid? Odds are Good?" and "Sonja Bieber of Cricketscreams, Wyoming,") so humorous, makes this fun to read. I did think this chapter, while engrossing, was a bit confusing to the reader overall. If you hadn't been following this story closely, I think you would have lost readers. Maybe you could try, somehow, to tell Harpster's war story without "telling" it so much? I'm not sure how this would be possible, maybe weaving it through the narrative overall. I do see that this is crucial to the story. I was just a bit confused at the end of the narrative segment.
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I loved the news articles ("Are You Harpster's Kid? Odds are Good?" and "Sonja Bieber of Cricketscreams, Wyoming,") so humorous, makes this fun to read. I did think this chapter, while engrossing, was a bit confusing to the reader overall. If you hadn't been following this story closely, I think you would have lost readers. Maybe you could try, somehow, to tell Harpster's war story without "telling" it so much? I'm not sure how this would be possible, maybe weaving it through the narrative overall. I do see that this is crucial to the story. I was just a bit confused at the end of the narrative segment.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I am not a celebrity buff. I could care less about the glitz and glitter of Hollywood. The news media is very low on my attention scale as well. This is a good example of the hype and lies that come out of Hollywood daily. You write a great story Mikey. Nancy
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I am not a celebrity buff. I could care less about the glitz and glitter of Hollywood. The news media is very low on my attention scale as well. This is a good example of the hype and lies that come out of Hollywood daily. You write a great story Mikey. Nancy
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. The lady detectives are getting help. They are still weeding out false claims to the Blackwell estate. We are finding out more about Winston. He has been hiding behind one brave thing he did in the war. Great work.
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I love the story. The lady detectives are getting help. They are still weeding out false claims to the Blackwell estate. We are finding out more about Winston. He has been hiding behind one brave thing he did in the war. Great work.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014