The Bard of Bel Air
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Time For a Vacation"A homeless man sees more than people realize.
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Comment from l.raven
yes I have a suggestion...slow down...I don't know how I forget to review this...I never have before...must have read it and got up to do something and forgot...Bard is free!!!get your motor running...LOL...now I must move on...next...LUFF Ya Linda xxoo
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yes I have a suggestion...slow down...I don't know how I forget to review this...I never have before...must have read it and got up to do something and forgot...Bard is free!!!get your motor running...LOL...now I must move on...next...LUFF Ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 02-May-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, spacing here:
As the chopper lifted off, Harpster's terror became academic. It was time to "tell your dreams to me,****
fantasy will set you free". (Yeah, Steppenwolf!)
Great irony in the humor throughout.
Interesting thought: To be the assailant unable to escape one's own foulness left permanent scars on the heart.
What a wild and wooly adventure. Reminds me a little of the line in Conair by Cage, "Any other day that might seem unusual" - the flying Corvair. LOL. Solid dialogue. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, spacing here:
As the chopper lifted off, Harpster's terror became academic. It was time to "tell your dreams to me,****
fantasy will set you free". (Yeah, Steppenwolf!)
Great irony in the humor throughout.
Interesting thought: To be the assailant unable to escape one's own foulness left permanent scars on the heart.
What a wild and wooly adventure. Reminds me a little of the line in Conair by Cage, "Any other day that might seem unusual" - the flying Corvair. LOL. Solid dialogue. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from Sankey
This is very good my friend. You are doing better and better. Hope I can use some of this in mine if it every gets going.
Some comments and a spag or two...before hop(p)ing on the Metro link
Is this a spag or?? "The is Red Rover from Dover
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This is very good my friend. You are doing better and better. Hope I can use some of this in mine if it every gets going.
Some comments and a spag or two...before hop(p)ing on the Metro link
Is this a spag or?? "The is Red Rover from Dover
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from country ranch writer
AT LEAST SHE KNOW HIS WAY OF TALKING AND IS ABLE TO UNDERSTAND THIS AND KEEP UP WITH WHAT IS GOING ON SO THEY CANSSTOP IT
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AT LEAST SHE KNOW HIS WAY OF TALKING AND IS ABLE TO UNDERSTAND THIS AND KEEP UP WITH WHAT IS GOING ON SO THEY CANSSTOP IT
Comment Written 01-May-2014
Comment from ravenblack
That poem is damn good, an amoeba climbing to the heights but still just as small- really smaller by thinking looking down makes it any bigger. Kind-of puts things in perspective. Please, don't crank up the action making this more of an espionage thriller than a traditional detective story. The best sequences are those between the bard and Tenyaya.
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That poem is damn good, an amoeba climbing to the heights but still just as small- really smaller by thinking looking down makes it any bigger. Kind-of puts things in perspective. Please, don't crank up the action making this more of an espionage thriller than a traditional detective story. The best sequences are those between the bard and Tenyaya.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
Comment from seaglass
This is a great flip. I know Bard was way capable. Great surprise here and will keep readers coming back for more in the strange rich people's crazy alternate universe.
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This is a great flip. I know Bard was way capable. Great surprise here and will keep readers coming back for more in the strange rich people's crazy alternate universe.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
That is what i love about your writing you can go from humor to drama in the drop of a hat and make it work. Love the escape and Winston's reaction. Classic. NG
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That is what i love about your writing you can go from humor to drama in the drop of a hat and make it work. Love the escape and Winston's reaction. Classic. NG
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
Comment from Nosha17
This was an interesting chapter, lots of action. Could the detectives set a trap for the Chief and his accomplices to walk into? Maybe, on the pretext that someone knows they are in on the crime and is out to blackmail them. I am sure you will come up with better ideas yourself. Great write as always. Faye
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This was an interesting chapter, lots of action. Could the detectives set a trap for the Chief and his accomplices to walk into? Maybe, on the pretext that someone knows they are in on the crime and is out to blackmail them. I am sure you will come up with better ideas yourself. Great write as always. Faye
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
This read "professional" to me. I think I could go to any bookstore and find this, and it would be a hit. Its action-packed, humorous, reminiscent for us Boomers, and just mysterious and obtuse enough to keep everybody interested. Very nice job. Keep up this story like this and we'll find ourselves at your book-signings,
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This read "professional" to me. I think I could go to any bookstore and find this, and it would be a hit. Its action-packed, humorous, reminiscent for us Boomers, and just mysterious and obtuse enough to keep everybody interested. Very nice job. Keep up this story like this and we'll find ourselves at your book-signings,
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. The Bard got away with his friend.. The lady detectives know they have escaped. Winston will be sending his men after them. It is a matter of who gets there first. Great work.
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I love the story. The Bard got away with his friend.. The lady detectives know they have escaped. Winston will be sending his men after them. It is a matter of who gets there first. Great work.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014