The Discarded
200 word story22 total reviews
Comment from daeneam
I'm so late for voting... I apologized. I have attended a very important activity that's why I was away from my computer. I'll be catching up next time and try to be prompt. Cheers to the winners and to the contenders as well as the organizer! c", Mae
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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I'm so late for voting... I apologized. I have attended a very important activity that's why I was away from my computer. I'll be catching up next time and try to be prompt. Cheers to the winners and to the contenders as well as the organizer! c", Mae
Comment Written 12-May-2014
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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Thanks for the cheers and the pom-poms.
Comment from DALLAS01
How clever to tie this into the current atrocity in that country. Do you by any chance watch Charlie Rose? He did an interview with a nun over there (Sister Rosemary) she runs a school, its purpose is to show these physical, and emotionally wounded young girls ,a way back through love. The story is so much more complicated than what is being aired. They are taught a trade so that they might support themselves and their illigitimate children they have borne.
They were trained to be soldiers, and instructed to kill, even their friends and relatives. Fear for their own lives, drove many to carry out those orders. The rehabilitation is a long slow process as they loathe who they were forced to become.
She has written a book but I did not catch the name: Maybe healing though love not sure.
Great job on the prompt. Had my curiosity peaked from the get go.
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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How clever to tie this into the current atrocity in that country. Do you by any chance watch Charlie Rose? He did an interview with a nun over there (Sister Rosemary) she runs a school, its purpose is to show these physical, and emotionally wounded young girls ,a way back through love. The story is so much more complicated than what is being aired. They are taught a trade so that they might support themselves and their illigitimate children they have borne.
They were trained to be soldiers, and instructed to kill, even their friends and relatives. Fear for their own lives, drove many to carry out those orders. The rehabilitation is a long slow process as they loathe who they were forced to become.
She has written a book but I did not catch the name: Maybe healing though love not sure.
Great job on the prompt. Had my curiosity peaked from the get go.
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Don't think we get that show. I've never heard of it. NS citizens should become aware of honour killings. Even is she is raped and is not at fault, many cultures stone her to death for her impurities.
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
tHIS SHORT ACCOUNT MERITS SIX STARS FOR EXPOSING SEX TRAFFICKING.
yOUR MISSION IN nIGERIA TO REPORT ON THE HUNDREDS OF KDNAPPED GIRLS SHOWS THAT FEMALES THERE HAVE LITTLE OR NO VALUE.
pROSTITUTION IN SO-CALLED CIVILIZED NATIONS IS A LESS EXCUSED TRAGEDY.
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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tHIS SHORT ACCOUNT MERITS SIX STARS FOR EXPOSING SEX TRAFFICKING.
yOUR MISSION IN nIGERIA TO REPORT ON THE HUNDREDS OF KDNAPPED GIRLS SHOWS THAT FEMALES THERE HAVE LITTLE OR NO VALUE.
pROSTITUTION IN SO-CALLED CIVILIZED NATIONS IS A LESS EXCUSED TRAGEDY.
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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thanks for your generous stars and review.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Wow, this took my breathe away and you did a fabulous job with this. This is a hard subject to write/talk about but you did a phenomenal job with this. Great, great job friend
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Wow, this took my breathe away and you did a fabulous job with this. This is a hard subject to write/talk about but you did a phenomenal job with this. Great, great job friend
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thank you for your response and very generous star power.
Comment from jmdg1954
I just was writing a review for this story and my iPhone petered out on me.
Did you receive one? Short version...I thought this story was extremely well written and could be the basis of multiple postings for a story.
John
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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I just was writing a review for this story and my iPhone petered out on me.
Did you receive one? Short version...I thought this story was extremely well written and could be the basis of multiple postings for a story.
John
Comment Written 10-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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I didn't get any other message, but thanks for the second response.do appreciate the read and always your thoughts on my POV.
Comment from GWHARGIS
What a horrifying scenario. I love the bold statement she gives as one of the discarded. Nice imagery and mystery in this. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-May-2014
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What a horrifying scenario. I love the bold statement she gives as one of the discarded. Nice imagery and mystery in this. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-May-2014
reply by the author on 10-May-2014
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done, but thanks for the visit.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Ingrid,
the best way to bring these atrocities to the world is by writing about it in every way possible... for one, I am sickened by the lethargic response, not only of the Nigerian government and leaders, but the Islamic community and the rest of the so called super powers... it's not like the perpetrators came in with one little car a nabbed one or two girls... and no one knows where they are... yeah, what a crock... when America wants to find a single face in amongst thousands, it does, so surely 250-300 should be a walk in the park wouldn't one think? For one I think it's time to wipe the scourge that perpetrate such atrocities right off the planet... the Terrorist group has signed off as being responsible... now let's all keep it alive and take the responsibility to keep the pressure up, by lobbying our governments to stamp on these creatures and squash them like the vermin they are.
As you can see, I think your story was not only well written, it evoked some pent up anger at the slack response to such a serious matter of life and death... all the very best in this contest... definitely a worthy contender for the crown... truly powerful imagery... you rock LADY!
With our thoughts we create,
the will to stamp out evil,
James xx
******Stars!!!!!!
reply by the author on 10-May-2014
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Hi Ingrid,
the best way to bring these atrocities to the world is by writing about it in every way possible... for one, I am sickened by the lethargic response, not only of the Nigerian government and leaders, but the Islamic community and the rest of the so called super powers... it's not like the perpetrators came in with one little car a nabbed one or two girls... and no one knows where they are... yeah, what a crock... when America wants to find a single face in amongst thousands, it does, so surely 250-300 should be a walk in the park wouldn't one think? For one I think it's time to wipe the scourge that perpetrate such atrocities right off the planet... the Terrorist group has signed off as being responsible... now let's all keep it alive and take the responsibility to keep the pressure up, by lobbying our governments to stamp on these creatures and squash them like the vermin they are.
As you can see, I think your story was not only well written, it evoked some pent up anger at the slack response to such a serious matter of life and death... all the very best in this contest... definitely a worthy contender for the crown... truly powerful imagery... you rock LADY!
With our thoughts we create,
the will to stamp out evil,
James xx
******Stars!!!!!!
Comment Written 10-May-2014
reply by the author on 10-May-2014
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Here's my challenge to you...and I want you to accept it. Don't think of it as a suggestion. As a matter of fact, think of it as a royal mandate from the 'queen of Canada.' I shall forward details by PM. ingrd
Comment from dreamin'
"We're not worth food." There is so much power in those four simple words.
What a timely piece with all that's happening right over those missing girls.
Ingrid, Good luck with the contest.
Debbie
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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"We're not worth food." There is so much power in those four simple words.
What a timely piece with all that's happening right over those missing girls.
Ingrid, Good luck with the contest.
Debbie
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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Darling, women are stoned to death when their families find them impure. they kill the daughter who were raped--blame it all on them. Now, I fought for women's rights and can see my signature all over NA, but a new generation of women have to fight this battle.
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You're absolutely right. And, regardless of how slow it might seem, I honestly do think it's happening. At least here in Oregon, where human trafficking has reached an all time high. Sick people with sick ideas need to just go away. In whatever manner that takes.
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You're absolutely right. And, regardless of how slow it might seem, I honestly do think it's happening. At least here in Oregon, where human trafficking has reached an all time high. Sick people with sick ideas need to just go away. In whatever manner that takes.
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I forgot to thank you for taking up the fight here. Most of us tend to forget how damn lucky we are.
Comment from RodG
I had to respond to this story ripped from recent headlines. I find myself wanting to know more about Drija and hoping somehow the journalist can save her. You have done a superb job of setting the scene and literally framing her behind the curtain doorway. If only you had more words to work with! I hope you can expand this someday for a later prompt. Rod
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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I had to respond to this story ripped from recent headlines. I find myself wanting to know more about Drija and hoping somehow the journalist can save her. You have done a superb job of setting the scene and literally framing her behind the curtain doorway. If only you had more words to work with! I hope you can expand this someday for a later prompt. Rod
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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I got a snapshot impression immediately when I began to write, but it ended with the reveal. Yet, what happens to these girls in third world countries is horrifying to any civilized person.
Comment from Nosha17
Very well written, aptly suiting the art work and very topical. You have made good use of language in the narrative and descriptions. It read very well. Good luck in the contest. faye
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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Very well written, aptly suiting the art work and very topical. You have made good use of language in the narrative and descriptions. It read very well. Good luck in the contest. faye
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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Thanks so much.