Do You?
real short poem14 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent 1/6/1 syllable count for this contest, and the end line rhymes are strong
I prefer when you don't type in all caps
excellent use of enjambment
effective use of question to challenge the reader to find her own answer
Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Your poem is in excellent 1/6/1 syllable count for this contest, and the end line rhymes are strong
I prefer when you don't type in all caps
excellent use of enjambment
effective use of question to challenge the reader to find her own answer
Brooke
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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thxs for your review Brooke
lulube
Comment from Karen B.
Strong message in these few words and meets all the requirements for the 1-6-1 form. Nicely done! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Strong message in these few words and meets all the requirements for the 1-6-1 form. Nicely done! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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thxs so much for your read and review
Comment from Dean Kuch
I have to admit when I'm wrong, my wife makes me. Of course, I am rarely ever right, at least when it pertains to our own personal arguments, so I've learned to admit I'm wrong quite often. In fact, I've gotten really good at it.
Nice one, and good luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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I have to admit when I'm wrong, my wife makes me. Of course, I am rarely ever right, at least when it pertains to our own personal arguments, so I've learned to admit I'm wrong quite often. In fact, I've gotten really good at it.
Nice one, and good luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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lol she will know that too, that you are just being good at it and it's not from the heart. Maybe too many character's in your head confuse your own sense of honesty. lol or you've assumed another's heart, which would be empty of course. lol
Try it from your heart next time and see if the night ends up better.
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Oh, I'm honest to a fault, and truthful to a fault as well. That's what gets me into so much trouble! When she asks me, "Hey, Dean, do these shorts make my butt look too big?", well, I open my big truthful mouth and the shouting begins, LOL...
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Well, you could have always been truthful but comforting as well. What I mean is, a truthful answer, ya, just a bit though, anyway I happen to like your butt just the way it is.
lulube
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
I like how this 1-6-1 is designed to transition seamlessly from one line to the next and is unified around a single thought. This is a unique take on this type of format. I found it refreshingly honest in delivery. There is a lot of truth in these few simple syllables. The impact of this piece is strong, intense and precise in the word choice the writer uses and even more powerful in the resonating question asked through the three lines in this poem. It flows well due to the consistency of the rhythmic pattern of end rhymes and the background enhances the complimentary colors found in the photo. The photo accompanying this poem seems to enhance the enigmatic quality of the poem since it appears unfocused, and contains dark silhouettes of objects that are hard to decipher much like the tone and feeling of the question asked of the reader in this piece. Well designed and constructed!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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I like how this 1-6-1 is designed to transition seamlessly from one line to the next and is unified around a single thought. This is a unique take on this type of format. I found it refreshingly honest in delivery. There is a lot of truth in these few simple syllables. The impact of this piece is strong, intense and precise in the word choice the writer uses and even more powerful in the resonating question asked through the three lines in this poem. It flows well due to the consistency of the rhythmic pattern of end rhymes and the background enhances the complimentary colors found in the photo. The photo accompanying this poem seems to enhance the enigmatic quality of the poem since it appears unfocused, and contains dark silhouettes of objects that are hard to decipher much like the tone and feeling of the question asked of the reader in this piece. Well designed and constructed!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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You certainly are a rainbow, what a magnificent review and only on 3 lines!!! I'd go on and on but I do not want to give myself away at this time, but Bravo for this review
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You are quite welcome for the review! :-)
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I'm glad you enjoyed the review and thank you for the kind words! Have a lovely day! :-)
Comment from l.raven
Oh yes!!!!if it's my fault I will stand up and say so...but you are right many won't...very well written...and the picture perfect...
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Oh yes!!!!if it's my fault I will stand up and say so...but you are right many won't...very well written...and the picture perfect...
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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thxs for your review and comments happy you will stand
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you are so welcome you...luff
Comment from Capricorn30
A good question many of us in all likelihood do not ask;
A well-crafted, thought-provoking poem.
Not always easy to admit being wrong.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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A good question many of us in all likelihood do not ask;
A well-crafted, thought-provoking poem.
Not always easy to admit being wrong.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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thxs for your read and great comments in your review
Comment from sgalletti
Well, I'm reviewing all of these little ditties of 1-6-1 that need to rhyme so I can vote. Best of luck in the contest. Yes, I do admit when I'm wrong. Personally, I would have liked to see this all in lower case letters rather than caps. Sue
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Well, I'm reviewing all of these little ditties of 1-6-1 that need to rhyme so I can vote. Best of luck in the contest. Yes, I do admit when I'm wrong. Personally, I would have liked to see this all in lower case letters rather than caps. Sue
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Interesting that you'd prefer the smaller letters. I figured bold question, bold letters. lol
Comment from Bill Schott
I think in a poem this brief, the punctuation, if used, has got to be correct. You have a comma splice where you should use either a semicolon or a period. If I'm wrong, I'd admit it.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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I think in a poem this brief, the punctuation, if used, has got to be correct. You have a comma splice where you should use either a semicolon or a period. If I'm wrong, I'd admit it.
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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lol Honestly, I don't know for sure about the comma being used in an incorrect manner, that is where I would pause. But I'll take your word for it and I will change it.
Hope you're ever so right that I am wrong. lol
Comment from lancellot
Nicely done. With only a few words you hit a hard truth that many know and fewer will ever admit to. Pride, guilt and vanity are all included. And the answer is: Yes.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Nicely done. With only a few words you hit a hard truth that many know and fewer will ever admit to. Pride, guilt and vanity are all included. And the answer is: Yes.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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lol, somehow I feel that we poets will all be answering yes to this question. Must be our compassion and deep emotions that will stand up. thxs for your great review
Comment from lakeport
Do you, indeed it seem not many want to admit when they are wrong, a very nice expressed 1/6/1 poem.Good luck at the contest.God bless you, Lakeport.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Do you, indeed it seem not many want to admit when they are wrong, a very nice expressed 1/6/1 poem.Good luck at the contest.God bless you, Lakeport.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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thxs for your wonderful review and yes I do stand up, but don't have to often, lol
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your welcome.Lakepoert.