Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Yeah, we as human beings always seem to get into a lot of trouble when we try to pilot our own ship. Without the proper guidance, we're doomed to make some very grievous errors in judgement. Best to sit back, let God pilot the ship, as we remain his faithful and trustworthy co-pilot.

Well done and wonderfully presented.

Best of luck to you in the contest!

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014

Exactly. Thanks for reviewing.

reply by Dean Kuch on 29-Jul-2014

Sure thing, DALLAS. Anytime, my friend.

Comment from jandeck

Excellent

We are so lucky to have God to surrender to and take up our burdens. There are still those who don't know or believe, though. Great form and message!

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

thanks for reviewing.

Comment from rrabinow

Good

I enjoyed reading your poem. One thing that I noticed is that in a few lines you only have one word, and in some you have three words, and the prompt wanted the lines in pairs, meaning two words per line. Other than that I love your poem. Great picture as well. Best of luck.

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 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

My understanding is that it had to be a total of 7 lines and 14 words the thought divided into two parts which I did. Don't think it said anything about pairs? Perhaps I am wrong.,

reply by rrabinow on 28-Jul-2014

That was just what I thought when I read the promt. I could be wrong as well though.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is a wonderful entry for the septolet contest and great spiritual poem. Great use of your 14 words. Good luck to you
Teresa

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks for the great review.

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

What a powerful poem this is. Bleeding tears was such surprising language and brought much emotion to the message. Our ego always wants to be in charge which is why prayer and meditation is necessary to connect with God. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

thanks for the great review.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent septolet, mystery writer, the battle is won when God is put in charge. we just have to hand control over to Him. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

thanks for the great review.

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This is a good choice for the Septolet. We've all been to the place where we can fight and struggle no more. the seven lines create a picture of prayer, even without the artwork

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks for the kind review.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

"Backed
into corner
battle begins
bleeding tears-

On bended knees
surrender
God in charge"

giving yourself and your life in the hands of god can be an powering experience! your soul survives:)
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

thank you for reviewing.

Comment from Pyrrho

Excellent

Your poem satisfies the prompt, I am sure, and is powerful.

Not being religious, I cannot help but wonder how anyone ever dreamed up a god that requires so much attention and abject grovelling. Such would be a detestable human, why is it desirable in a god?

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

I personally have a higher Power. Sometimes it's nature or the universe. At others, it is good orderly direction from someone with great values, and the day of the prompt I felt comfortable calling it God. As long a I realize there is something out there greater than me, it takes a load off my shoulders. Thanks for reviewing. :.)

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

Great presentation - He is in control, so true, because we are not, by a long shot.

Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

thanks for reviewing. :.)