Comment from Muffins

Excellent

Every aspect of the ups and downs of a vacation is listed here. It brought back memories that made me whine and some that made me laugh. I've experience at least 80% of the events in this wonderful poem.

I read it out loud. The rhythm moves up and down like waves in the ocean. The tone is light, refreshing like a relaxing drink you sip by the pool! Fun read.

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2014

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

I really am liking these bllitz poems. this one was a rushed vacation that we both went on. Great imagery and the stuttered lines flwed into and out of each other. Great job. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014

Thanks. Glad you liked the imagery in this blitz poem. They are fun to write, and read. Appreciate your comments ... ;o)

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

puking in a public shower.... hope no ones' around to see you LOL!

excellent blitz poem! thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest :-)

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014

thanks for sponsoring the contest - this time you left the theme open, which is good - i did somehow return to the beach, probably remembering your beach-themed blitz -
shower the public with ... , most beaches have places to shower off ... ;o)

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

Great blitz poem that you have written. I like that blitz poems read fast. I like the flow of your poem from line to line. Great job with this. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014

Thanks. Glad you liked the flow in this blitz poem. They are fun to write, and read out loud. Appreciate your comments .. ;o)

Comment from rmj09

Excellent

This poem met all the rules of a blitz poem. The difficulty of this poem says a lot about the writer, very accomplished willing to do some hard work.
Just the accomplishment of this type of poem shows someone who can write.
Best of luck with the contest

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014

Thanks! Blitz poems are challenging - lots of rules and it's hard to maintain a theme since they tend to wander all over the place.
Appreciate your comments. Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from gypsycaravan

Excellent

Some of these "blitz" poems make no sense to me--poets just filling up space with unrelated words that they must use in a certain order. Yours told a story to me of a vacation at the beach reminding me of all things encountered at a beach and you even added humor. Good job.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014

Thanks. Glad you liked the story and found some humor. This form is challenging as it's hard to stick to theme or make sense within 50 lines. Do appreciate your comments. Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi Starkat,

A fun read about good ole summertime, with a great photo. There is just nothing bad that can be said about the wonderful season.


Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax ('-')

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014

Thanks, Jax - still smilin', but it sure is hot outside. Glad you found this blitz to be a fun read. Appreciate your comments.
Cheers ... ;o) starkat

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I will trust you to have followed all those rules
good internal/proximate rhyme in down to the ground
good alliteration in beach with bikinis
great detail throughout
I love the surreal progression of the stream of consciousness thought
Brooke

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014

Thanks for the wonderful, detailed review, Brooke. Glad you enjoyed this stream of consciousness thought, somewhat surreal at times. I've double and triple checked that the rules were followed as I'd hate to be disqualified after voting starts. Whoever is on the Compliance Committee will have their work cut out for them as they make sure all the entries have complied. I expect they will hand-count all 50 lines.
Do appreciate all your comments ... ;o) Art

reply by adewpearl on 07-Aug-2014

Yeah, I'm not so much into line counting LOL
God bless them if that's their job :-)

Comment from kittykatnoel

Excellent

A very hilarious poem. I like the line "small like a flea". I was able to picture the whole turn of events quite vividly. Thank you for sharing your writing.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014

Thanks! Glad you could picture the events unfold and found some humor in this blitz poem. Maybe I should put it in the 'humor' category. Appreciate your comments ... ;o)

Comment from Eigle Rull

Excellent

I've always wanted to try one of these types. But have not had the nerve yet. It appears kind of hard to do.

I very much enjoyed reading this one. It seems to have all of the necessary details to it. I love the picture and the ending is very cute. Nice job, my friend.

Always with respect,

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014

Thanks. These blitz poems are challenging, but can be fun to write. You should give it a go, sometime. Glad you enjoyed this blitz and the picture. Appreciate your comments. Cheers ... ;o)