Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "love upon desert sands"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Kaila Mari
A page taken straight out of "Arabian Nights". This is indeed a very sensuous, near erotic romance poetry. Good alliteration in tender/thrills and again good alliteration and assonance in "lingers on my lips". The entire love scene played out in your words upon the sand. The artwork was not really needed but did enhance the imagery.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
A page taken straight out of "Arabian Nights". This is indeed a very sensuous, near erotic romance poetry. Good alliteration in tender/thrills and again good alliteration and assonance in "lingers on my lips". The entire love scene played out in your words upon the sand. The artwork was not really needed but did enhance the imagery.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thanks Kaila
Comment from Dom G Robles
This poem is pretty. The lines moved freely. I liked the shape of the poem and the picture that accompanied it. They blend together. Figures of speech are many, strong and vivid.
My sincere congratulations.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
This poem is pretty. The lines moved freely. I liked the shape of the poem and the picture that accompanied it. They blend together. Figures of speech are many, strong and vivid.
My sincere congratulations.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you Dom
Comment from Darkhorse555
really loved the picture love the ending just drew magical as one under the stars truly very beautifully drawn picture excellent piece of writing
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
really loved the picture love the ending just drew magical as one under the stars truly very beautifully drawn picture excellent piece of writing
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from bard owl
What a supremely senuous love poem! Your imagery is simply divine and the flow of your words silky smoothe. There is even a bit of rhyme in the last three lines. Excellent romantic work. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
What a supremely senuous love poem! Your imagery is simply divine and the flow of your words silky smoothe. There is even a bit of rhyme in the last three lines. Excellent romantic work. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you Linda
Comment from rrabinow
Wonderfully written poem. I like your use of descriptive words as they helped to create a great image in my mind as I read your poem. Great picture to go along with your poem as well.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
Wonderfully written poem. I like your use of descriptive words as they helped to create a great image in my mind as I read your poem. Great picture to go along with your poem as well.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from krys123
Deepwater;
A very moving and excellently composed piece of romantic poetry that was so enriched with a sensual feeling and emotions. Your words seemed to dance on their bodies through their fingertips as they slowly touched the curvature of her spine.
That imagery was so enlightening descriptively the true emotions set forth in your words and your lines. You ingeniously created expressions that were wondrously written to form images in the readers mind: "Fragrance lingers on my lips/Kisses like wildfires,...". And this alone sets a beautiful image in the readers mind.
Your writing is very fluid also in a very rhythmic type away and flows smoothly throughout your writing.
Your imagination is truly gifted and very inventive ingeniously creative and this goes without saying throughout your writing.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the sun always shine on your shoulders.
Alex
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
Deepwater;
A very moving and excellently composed piece of romantic poetry that was so enriched with a sensual feeling and emotions. Your words seemed to dance on their bodies through their fingertips as they slowly touched the curvature of her spine.
That imagery was so enlightening descriptively the true emotions set forth in your words and your lines. You ingeniously created expressions that were wondrously written to form images in the readers mind: "Fragrance lingers on my lips/Kisses like wildfires,...". And this alone sets a beautiful image in the readers mind.
Your writing is very fluid also in a very rhythmic type away and flows smoothly throughout your writing.
Your imagination is truly gifted and very inventive ingeniously creative and this goes without saying throughout your writing.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the sun always shine on your shoulders.
Alex
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you for this review Alex
Gary
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You are so sincerely welcome Gary.
Alex
Comment from Ronni
Totally ravishing, raptured, resplendently sensual,
discreetly erotic capture of 'love upon desert sands'
with both visceral 'heat' and intimate 'heat' ascending
through the senses and perfect visual to enhance the
desert atmosphere! Tone and flow is mezmerizing and
hypnotic from beginning to end.
Thanks for sharing...
Best wishes...Ronni
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
Totally ravishing, raptured, resplendently sensual,
discreetly erotic capture of 'love upon desert sands'
with both visceral 'heat' and intimate 'heat' ascending
through the senses and perfect visual to enhance the
desert atmosphere! Tone and flow is mezmerizing and
hypnotic from beginning to end.
Thanks for sharing...
Best wishes...Ronni
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thanks Ronni
Comment from granny goes viral
Beautiful, romantic, slyly sexy. The visual is so fitting.
So many interesting visions painted by your words. But the clearest one is love. Good job.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
Beautiful, romantic, slyly sexy. The visual is so fitting.
So many interesting visions painted by your words. But the clearest one is love. Good job.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you for this
Comment from lynglyng
I was so interested in this poem. I could feel like it was me being romanced in the desert sand. Very sensual and full of emotion. I loved it I guess that if why I am one of your fans. Thank you for sharing, blessings, LyngLyng
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
I was so interested in this poem. I could feel like it was me being romanced in the desert sand. Very sensual and full of emotion. I loved it I guess that if why I am one of your fans. Thank you for sharing, blessings, LyngLyng
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you my best fan for this
Gary
Comment from madhatter1977
This is good, I love the picture and the words match it to perfection. I could sense the passion in the words of lovers and the co-mingling of bodies and souls. The ice in the desert must have been refreshing, LOL and this is refreshing as well. A great read, Hatter
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
This is good, I love the picture and the words match it to perfection. I could sense the passion in the words of lovers and the co-mingling of bodies and souls. The ice in the desert must have been refreshing, LOL and this is refreshing as well. A great read, Hatter
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you Hatter