Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your syllable count spot on

your few words in three lines portrays the light of the fire flies

good visual

cheers smoothiecool

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Thanks for reviewing.

reply by Smoothiecool on 27-Aug-2014

welcome..SC

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

I adore fairies and magical creatures. This picture stirs fantasy. The words used to rhyme this 1-6-1 poem work perfectly. Nothing forced.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Thanks for reviewing. I too love them.

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

I like the line abandoned in fire flies-night. Great use of description in your poem. The syllable count is as required. The rhyme that you have is great. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Thanks you for the kind review.

Comment from victor 66

Excellent

I do like the concept of "saying a great deal in a very few words". And what child as well the child in us all, does not find something warm and reminiscent in these magical little creatures? A very nice 1-6-1. Good luck.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

thank you for the kind review.

reply by victor 66 on 28-Aug-2014

You are most welcome.

Comment from Gaye Hemsley

Excellent

Very nice 1 6 1 even without the lovely picture your words show the scene. You did everything the entry required. Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from CHIGYSISKI

Excellent

A GOOD ENTRY FOR THIS CONTEST.GREAT IMAGINATION TO HAVE THOUGHT OF THIS POEM FOR THE PROMPT.I THINK THE SMALLER THE NUMBER OF SYLLABLES THE MORE DIFFICULT IT IS TO WRITE A SUITABLE POEM.WELL DONE

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Really great artwork. Wonderfully rhymed, in that it's not forced at all. Hard thing to do in just a 1-6-1. Good luck with the contest. Les

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Thanks, I loved the art work too.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

gorgeous presentation of your poem
I love the rhyme and how effectively you capture this fanciful/whimsical scene in so few words
I just love the delightful idea of a fairy dressed in fireflies and how that produces a night light :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Thanks, Brooke.

Comment from Zinnia48

Excellent

I really liked this a lot. However, let me take a quick detour and say that I almost didn't find the poem because of the lack of contrast. If you could lighten it up a bit.....Your words deserve to be seen/read. The image you paint is visceral. thank you. caroline

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Thank you for reviewing. I've changed it a couple times. Can't seem to get the right combination.

reply by Zinnia48 on 26-Aug-2014

Yep--I have had the same problem with the color feature (and have had the same feedback). However the poem itself is terrific! caroline

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I love this ...a mobile night light...the best kind...that delight
Well done.l....good answer to the prompt.....and I loved the artwork
God bless..................................

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Thanks for reviewing.