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NaPoWriMo 2017

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Comment from honeytree
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Loved the art work for this poem
Unfortunately we all have to die one day
It can be a sudden death or a slow death
It is horrible to have to die.
He will be remembered for greatness.

Honey tree

 Comment Written 01-May-2017


reply by the author on 02-May-2017
    Hi Annie,

    Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem about Rupert Brooke. I appreciate your comments.

    Kim
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
    Hi Annie,

    Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem about Rupert Brooke. I appreciate your comments.

    Kim
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Kim I'm so sorry to read that you lost your battle with the fire. My heart goes out to you all that have been effected.
Well done with your Acrostic on Rupert Brooke cut down not by war but by disease.
thoughts are with you,
valda

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Valda,

    Thank you for the thoughtful comments on this piece. My house is fine, I just wish we could have saved the house or at least some belongings for my neighbors. They are in great spirits, all things considered.

    Kim
Comment from Rlegel99
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Poem about a soldier. The artwork works well with this piece. Your word choice conveys a respect for the summer eject that is passed to the reader. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Rlegel:

    Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate the comments.

    Kim
Comment from BeasPeas
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Such a sad thing for him to be bitten by a mosquito which bite became infected and he died. Such a simple ailment, but without antibiotics such things get out of hand. Thank you for sharing the story of this poet in your well done acrostic. Marilyn

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Marilyn:

    It is tragic that he died so young and in that manner. But, he died in an idyllic place. Had he made it to Gallipoli with his shipmates he isn't likely to have survived that either and the circumstances of his death would have been unbearable to think about. Perhaps, it was a kinder fate he suffered? Thank you for the thoughtful comments.

    Kim
reply by BeasPeas on 30-Apr-2017
    I agree with you, Kim. A horrible situation in either case, but the lesser of two evils. Marilyn
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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You have certainly had a challenging week, my friend. I hope life quiets down a bit for you. I am hoping for some warm, sunny days to get outside and work on my garden. Great poem as always~Debbie

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Debbie,

    Thank you for the thoughtful comments. I'm hoping for some quiet days, too. :) I appreciate your response and hope you get to do some gardening soon!

    Kim
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Kim,
I enj9yed your acrostic very much. You add so many details with your precisely chosen words. Your lies are more than just a list to fit the requirements of the acrostic. Your lines are poetry in every sense. There is good flow, great imagery, informative details, & a great message. It does seem like he predicted his own death. What a sad thing to happen to him, but war is even sadder. The art is perfect, too.

Your notes were great to read. I lean so much from your poem then the notes add so much more knowledge about who or what inspired the poem.

Good job & thanks for sharing & caring. Jan

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Jan,

    I'm really happy that you enjoyed this piece. He seemed to be a remarkable young man and his poetry is excellent. I'm glad I discovered his work. I think he was shown a kinder fate than that of his shipmates who landed at Gallipoli, even if he did die young. Thank you for the wonderful review.

    Kim
Comment from Sasha
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This is an excellent tribute to a little known young poet. His death at such a young age is tragic but he was spared the carnage of Gallipoli. Marvelous work with this and thanks for the extensive notes that tell us so much about this young man.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Valerie!

    Carnage! That is the word I was searching for and I totally agree with you. Thank you for this wonderful review.

    Kim
Comment from Pantygynt
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You really shouldn't have scratched those insect bites, Rupert. Still better that than Gallipoli I suppose. This is a fine addition to your hall of fame, another well-written acrostic with some good rhymes in there too.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Pantygynt:

    I hadn't encountered Rupert Brooke's work prior to my reading this week. In fact, I had just finished the reading when my neighbor knocked on my door about the fire. I enjoyed the few selections of RB's poetry that I could find. I'm thinking you were probably already familiar with The Soldier? Thank you for the excellent review.

    Kim
Comment from Apostle Janos
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I really enjoyed this poem because I haven't learned this part of history about how he fought in Greece and about the Gallipoli Campaign, I even went to Skyros two years ago. If I was to improve on something, it would be the line "to symbolize what war has distinguished.", but I get it is tough to rhyme.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Apostle Yannaras:

    This week is the first I'd read of Rupert Brooke and I really enjoyed his poetry. His history was fascinating and I felt like a tribute piece was in order. The 'war has distinguished' line wasn't so much for the rhyme element but the fact that wars take our young men before their time. I believe there is great meaning in that, especially in reference to this poem. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your comments.

    Kim
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
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One of my favorite poets ( awfully fond of The Hill, The One Before The Last and Failure) and little heralded. I did note your posting in the Forum and thought, Hooray, another. As you can imagine, I really enjoyed your acrostic and absolutely forgive your lift of a line, imitation being the sincerest form of flattery. - Wendy

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Wendy:

    I meant the use of the quote to set the stage for the poem, as one would in a Sapphonic Triad. I'm guessing that is what you meant by lifting a line? It is late, maybe I'm just delirious at this point lol Thanks for taking the time to read and review. This week is the first I discovered Rupert Brooke. It is a pity he died so young. His poetry was excellent.

    Kim