Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

Hey, Craig.

I don't know much about the blank verse form, but I can say I enjoyed reading the gentle, eased pace of building a visual scene of a storm, and how it effects more intimate creatures and possessions of the pov... like nearby animals, buildings and home, to make for a more personal end-thought that extends to others. Down to earth, contemplative.

for each and ev'ry one precedes a lown.
(such as life... in a quiet paradise. I think the hectic is more prevalent than the calm in my life, making this poem a relaxing read. Even the storm's presentation has a relaxing ring about it. Perhaps the nature of a blank-verse word beat and phrasing? I like that the word of the day is a quiet, calm state, and the words paint that state even when looking at a brief stormy picture in passing, secured in the final lines to secure that sense of The storm comes, and it's not uphending, even as things get ruffled, the coming lown is sensed.)

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018

Thanks so much for the thoughtful review, Turtle. Calm will return one day. Life with little ones, especially when there are other responsibilities to be met, is seldom relaxing, though there are rewards to make up for it :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

My small dog panics and hides. One cat refuses to believe in a storm until the rain has dampened her. Excellent free verse description of a summer pop-up storm here at 35 degrees N....

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018

Thanks very much, most appreciated. The other dog we had until recently couldn't have been less concerned about storms. Bella is now old and deaf, and the storms don't bother her so much because she can't hear them.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

This is a terrific blank verse sonnet, Craig. I see you were on the receiving end of a nasty standard reviewer. I check that every single time I post because for some reason it seems to always default to allowing standard reviews. It's a pain but not worth someone coming along and stealing a couple of hours worth of reviewing just to drop their poison.

That said, a fine poem and about a fine subject too. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018

Well, I'm feeling "special", Gloria, because as of right now, that person has reviewed exactly one piece, and posted nothing. Suspicious? Not in the slightest! Some people must lead very sad lives. Anyway, thanks for not leaving an inane comment, and pissing all over it with a three-star rating :)

Appreciation always, Craig

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I like your free verse sonnet, Craig. It describes, perhaps, a recent storm event? It's a puzzling word and I couldn't have guessed its meaning by reading, other than a misspelling of "lawn." Lol.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018

Thanks so much, Helen. We had a fair bit of rain earlier in the week, but no massive storm. It was most welcome. Cheers, Craig

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Craig. This is a well described poem with good scene setting and word choices. I particularly like stanzas one and two which personify the piece. Great job. Marilyn

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018

Thanks very much, Marilyn. Greatly appreciated, Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written blank verse sonnet about the storms that come with great display with dartk clouds, thunder, lightning, and strong winds that is over quicker than it started, sounds a lot like South African summer storms.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018

Thanks very much, Sandra. I appreciate the support :) Craig

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a great blank verse with rhyming couplet, Craig. I enjoyed reading it. The meter is great and the topic is well-expressed. Your words are descriptive and do create this impending storm for readers. Does the lown precede the storm or come after or both? Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018

Ah, well, according to the old saying, I guess it precedes it, but logically, I think it's got to be both ;-) Many thanks, Jan .

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

I read all of your posts because they never bore me, and I am easily bored. Each poem is different. Most are cleverly attractive, and I love that. I like to see your wit. This poem highlights your skill as a writer. It's a beautiful, blank verse sonnet. Your word choices, including lown, evoke calming emotions.
When you saw "lawn," a word that means calm, I bet that you immediately thought of a sonnet, because its structure is rather calming.
I am impressed as usual. Unfortunately, I am out of six stars for this deserving poem.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018

I actually started with the end rhyming couplet, that's what popped into my head first. Then I went back to where I'm supposed to start (the beginning!)

I seldom write in blank verse, rhyming comes more naturally to me, but I had this half written and thought "hey, that doesn't rhyme"; but rather than try to make it do so, I just kept on going, trying to concentrate on the meter and word choices (to which I've made some changes since you reviewed it - hopefully for the better).

Many thanks for the lovely comments, Debbie.

Craig

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Love this, my favorite so far of your outstanding collections. What a hauntingly beautiful photo of lightening. We get those kind of skies here in Florida where I live. It's quite the show. I enjoyed this very much!
All my best,
Sal

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018

I love nature's light shows, and the thunder as well; although the dog doesn't share my enthusiasm. I also love the sound of rain on our tin roof. Many thanks for the lovely comments, Sally. Craig

Comment from Nancy A. Heaps

Average

This poem was short and sweet. The descriptions enabled me to 'see' the scene as I read the lines. I would have liked to know more. For instance, what happened after the storm; did a new day dawn or did the storm leave havoc behind.

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 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018

Sad.