Where There's Love
share your love story29 total reviews
Comment from Kathleen Washnis
This was really excellent! I like the correlation between your spirit literally flying out of your body and where there is love your spirit can fly whether dead or alive! Great picture too with the bird flying in the sky as well. It rhymes well and tells of a sweet love story. I like how the wife had no clue that her husband's spirit left his body as she rests upon his shoulder.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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This was really excellent! I like the correlation between your spirit literally flying out of your body and where there is love your spirit can fly whether dead or alive! Great picture too with the bird flying in the sky as well. It rhymes well and tells of a sweet love story. I like how the wife had no clue that her husband's spirit left his body as she rests upon his shoulder.
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Thank you Kathleen, for your excellent review and very kind words.
Comment from victor 66
From what I understand, out of body experience are not all that uncommon. I believe that some doctors doing critical operations have put notes on top of the lights and in other places that where only the patient could have seen them from above. I think you're out of body experience would be much more pleasant than the ones taking place in an operating room. Best wishes.
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From what I understand, out of body experience are not all that uncommon. I believe that some doctors doing critical operations have put notes on top of the lights and in other places that where only the patient could have seen them from above. I think you're out of body experience would be much more pleasant than the ones taking place in an operating room. Best wishes.
Comment Written 06-May-2019
Comment from OneKnouff
Well, who can explain these things? Life is full of interesting events. I enjoyed your contribution here and hope it represents you well. I wish the best for this piece.
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Well, who can explain these things? Life is full of interesting events. I enjoyed your contribution here and hope it represents you well. I wish the best for this piece.
Comment Written 06-May-2019
Comment from Rmocruz
This is a great love story in a poem.
A clever theme solidly rhymed.
I find this to be a promising writing prompt entry.
Best wishes in the love story contest!
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This is a great love story in a poem.
A clever theme solidly rhymed.
I find this to be a promising writing prompt entry.
Best wishes in the love story contest!
Comment Written 06-May-2019
Comment from Suzie Q
Well said! This was a great read with good rhyme and flow. I especially liked " My wife was laying close by my side, unaware of my presence above, her head was on my shoulder and her face was filled with love" Beautiful. Well done
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Well said! This was a great read with good rhyme and flow. I especially liked " My wife was laying close by my side, unaware of my presence above, her head was on my shoulder and her face was filled with love" Beautiful. Well done
Comment Written 04-May-2019
Comment from heavenempress
Hi, nice piece of poetry and you have an excellent story to tell in poetic form. Excellent presentation and nice image. All the best. Your poetry was clear and easy to follow. You captured my eyes to read to the very end. All the best. Don't forget to break it in two.
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Hi, nice piece of poetry and you have an excellent story to tell in poetic form. Excellent presentation and nice image. All the best. Your poetry was clear and easy to follow. You captured my eyes to read to the very end. All the best. Don't forget to break it in two.
Comment Written 03-May-2019
Comment from A Little Bird
Congratulations on this beautiful piece of work. I myself often have vivid dreams that are the inspiration behind a lot of my writing. Good luck with the competition!
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Congratulations on this beautiful piece of work. I myself often have vivid dreams that are the inspiration behind a lot of my writing. Good luck with the competition!
Comment Written 03-May-2019
Comment from JudyE
This is an engaging poem and a lovely tribute to 'love' and to your wife. I don't have any suggestions to make and good luck in the contest. I hope you do well.
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This is an engaging poem and a lovely tribute to 'love' and to your wife. I don't have any suggestions to make and good luck in the contest. I hope you do well.
Comment Written 03-May-2019
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a beautiful poem about love. I like the fact that it tells a story and a very original story at that.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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This is a beautiful poem about love. I like the fact that it tells a story and a very original story at that.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-May-2019
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This sounds like a really beautiful out of body experience. Just laying there with the love of your life only to find yourself looking at her from the ceiling. I like this and how well you've brought it forth. Great job and well done!
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This sounds like a really beautiful out of body experience. Just laying there with the love of your life only to find yourself looking at her from the ceiling. I like this and how well you've brought it forth. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 01-May-2019