Love: My Father's Gift To Me
More than a mere trinket19 total reviews
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Lisa May,
I can see why this entry won the votes. It was a beautiful love poem and you pulled from something that people who had a father they loved - they could understand this bond. Even though my dad and I were not this close, I had love for my father in the same ways that you do. So I read this and it brought tears to my eyes thinking that you are a lucky one who had a dad that gave you something special and tangible to remember him and the bond you shared. Deep down inside I envy that. I wished that could have been what I had with my father. It was very precious to me that you shared it and even better that you won! Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Lisa May,
I can see why this entry won the votes. It was a beautiful love poem and you pulled from something that people who had a father they loved - they could understand this bond. Even though my dad and I were not this close, I had love for my father in the same ways that you do. So I read this and it brought tears to my eyes thinking that you are a lucky one who had a dad that gave you something special and tangible to remember him and the bond you shared. Deep down inside I envy that. I wished that could have been what I had with my father. It was very precious to me that you shared it and even better that you won! Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Hi Fonda, I very much appreciate your review. Yes, I was indeed lucky to get adopted out from a crazy background into a loving home. I moved my Dad over from Australia to live with me here in NZ in his later years and he brought lots of stuff with him, so I have plenty of reminders of his presence around my home, which keeps his memory close to me.
I hope you are having a lovely day/night where you are. LM
Comment from Ulla
Hi Lisa May. This is a lovely poem about love, and in this case, about a father's love to his daughter. I'm so glad I came across it, and you're having my vote. Good luck. Kind regards. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Hi Lisa May. This is a lovely poem about love, and in this case, about a father's love to his daughter. I'm so glad I came across it, and you're having my vote. Good luck. Kind regards. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thanks for the support Ulla. Really nice review. xx
Comment from JudyE
This is a really lovely tribute to your father. Father/daughter relationships are very, very special. I particularly like the stanza beginning 'around my neck' with the 'molten moon' and 'droplet of pearl'. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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This is a really lovely tribute to your father. Father/daughter relationships are very, very special. I particularly like the stanza beginning 'around my neck' with the 'molten moon' and 'droplet of pearl'. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Hi Judy, you have the knack of picking out the phrases I like best myself. We must be in sync.
Comment from lyenochka
Love this poem! You show us the strong and steadfast love of your father even when he suffered loss. (Yes, Death's a thief!) and somehow both of you survived and he continued to show his love for you and you for him. (even putting up with his cat!)
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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Love this poem! You show us the strong and steadfast love of your father even when he suffered loss. (Yes, Death's a thief!) and somehow both of you survived and he continued to show his love for you and you for him. (even putting up with his cat!)
Comment Written 20-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. (Hah! That darn Timmy-Long-Tail, he'll get his revenge sometime I fear.)
Comment from LyndaS
This is a solid entry into the Love prompt. There is something so special about a treasured gift from Daddy. This is a beautiful tribute to a father. These are my favorite lines; all fragments made an honest whole (great concise thought) -- a molten moon, droplet of pearl (very smooth and descriptive). I love this picture as well. Nice job, Lisa! Lynda
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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This is a solid entry into the Love prompt. There is something so special about a treasured gift from Daddy. This is a beautiful tribute to a father. These are my favorite lines; all fragments made an honest whole (great concise thought) -- a molten moon, droplet of pearl (very smooth and descriptive). I love this picture as well. Nice job, Lisa! Lynda
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Hi Lynda, thanks for this thoughtful review. You always know which are the best bits!
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I have had absolutely no relationship with my father ever. This was all a lie. LOL
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Have you ever had some sort of male association in a family aspect?
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Not really. A few step-fathers from hell. My mother was no good chooser of men either.
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I wish my Dad had adopted you too then!
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So do I!!
Comment from Kerry Foley
Hello there, my friend, this is such a pretty poem. It's perfect for the love contest. It's nice to have keepsakes we hold dear to our hearts. Nicely done. Good luck & Happy Easter! ~Kerry
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Hello there, my friend, this is such a pretty poem. It's perfect for the love contest. It's nice to have keepsakes we hold dear to our hearts. Nicely done. Good luck & Happy Easter! ~Kerry
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Hi Kerry, thanks for your understanding review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
It's nice that your father left behind a memento for you to remember him by, although the memories you both shared together are more than likely far more meaningful.
I feel so much sorrow for those having afflictions like dementia and Alzheimer's Disease because it's one thing to take a material thing away from someone that means a lot to them. But, it's something else altogether to be robbed of something priceless--our memories.
Well penned, LisaMay.
~Dean
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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It's nice that your father left behind a memento for you to remember him by, although the memories you both shared together are more than likely far more meaningful.
I feel so much sorrow for those having afflictions like dementia and Alzheimer's Disease because it's one thing to take a material thing away from someone that means a lot to them. But, it's something else altogether to be robbed of something priceless--our memories.
Well penned, LisaMay.
~Dean
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Dad seemed happy enough, he always treated everything with equanimity, but I was robbed of my Dad and did not feel calm about that at all.
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I'm sorry for your loss.
I should consider myself lucky.
~Dean
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Thanks Dean. There are all sorts of ways to feel lucky. I called myself a lucky girl in the poem.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a parent's love that we will carry with us for the rest of our lives. It doesn't matter how simple their actions are when it is given honestly it means more than all the riches of the world.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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A very well-written poem about a parent's love that we will carry with us for the rest of our lives. It doesn't matter how simple their actions are when it is given honestly it means more than all the riches of the world.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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I agree Sandra. My father was an extremely honest man. Not overly-demonstrative through words but through actions.
Comment from LG Wolfe
You are your father's daughter. Through your poems I've learned how much you "filter goods from all life's noise" - and you see "beauty with delight in sunny days or darkest night."
I'm sure he knew his positive influence on you.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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You are your father's daughter. Through your poems I've learned how much you "filter goods from all life's noise" - and you see "beauty with delight in sunny days or darkest night."
I'm sure he knew his positive influence on you.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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I am adopted, so it is nurture rather than nature that has shaped me, and the nurturing that my dad provided is who I am, as you have pinpointed.
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That's so wonderful.
Comment from Bicpen
Excellent ... it shows depth and quality and uses good poetic devices. The rhymes are good and keeps the poem alive without mundane use of repetition. It delivers well and glows with the sheen of a daughter who has learned about beauty. The eloquence is underneath which is good because the layers surrounding and covering feed of it, in other words language devices punctuation imagery etc. Good read.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Excellent ... it shows depth and quality and uses good poetic devices. The rhymes are good and keeps the poem alive without mundane use of repetition. It delivers well and glows with the sheen of a daughter who has learned about beauty. The eloquence is underneath which is good because the layers surrounding and covering feed of it, in other words language devices punctuation imagery etc. Good read.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your thoughtful and thorough review (a REAL review).
I appreciate your comments; you have touched on the points I was conscious of crafting and polishing.