Poor Joe
An Onegin Stanza for Potlatch Poetry23 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
You do a great job of telling the story of Poor Joe. He is innocent, falsely accused. The judge likes to maintain his reputation for being touch on criminals. You have a great commentary about the prosecutor, who's mostly interested in successfully prosecuting his case. Your details about Joe's time in prison are touching. All he has are his memories of Christmas and other such occasions. When he dies, maybe he'll get some peace. This is a touching story, especially when we think of other "Joes" out there who might be wrongfully imprisoned. DNA testing has help clear up many such cases. Beautifully presented. judi
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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You do a great job of telling the story of Poor Joe. He is innocent, falsely accused. The judge likes to maintain his reputation for being touch on criminals. You have a great commentary about the prosecutor, who's mostly interested in successfully prosecuting his case. Your details about Joe's time in prison are touching. All he has are his memories of Christmas and other such occasions. When he dies, maybe he'll get some peace. This is a touching story, especially when we think of other "Joes" out there who might be wrongfully imprisoned. DNA testing has help clear up many such cases. Beautifully presented. judi
Comment Written 12-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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Thank you for this exceptionally great review, Judi. I feel ten feet tall. lol. Sadly, there are people wrongly imprisoned. Scary thought.
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You're very welcome. Have a great weekend. judi
Comment from Brett Matthew West
The difficult rhyme and meter of this form met well. Strong emotions displayed. Good story told. Ending would bring relief. Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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The difficult rhyme and meter of this form met well. Strong emotions displayed. Good story told. Ending would bring relief. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! Virtual six, Yvonne. Sorry to come to your onegin stanza so late. I loved how perfectly your poem meets all the difficult rhyme and meter AND you told a moving story about a man unjustly serving a sentence and how he survived by remembering the good things in life.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Wow! Virtual six, Yvonne. Sorry to come to your onegin stanza so late. I loved how perfectly your poem meets all the difficult rhyme and meter AND you told a moving story about a man unjustly serving a sentence and how he survived by remembering the good things in life.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review. Coming from you, it means more than any ole six.
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Onegin poem about Joe who was convicted for a crime he did not commit but after years he was finally released and rest now in peace with his Maker.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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A very well-written Onegin poem about Joe who was convicted for a crime he did not commit but after years he was finally released and rest now in peace with his Maker.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Thanks for reviewing, Sandra. I appreciate it.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow.... now that was a very sad and depressing offering... a WHOLE LOTTA different from the cute turtle!! ;) :) Never heard of this form, Yvonne, but you've certainly wielded the heavy emotions with it ... great job! Yvette
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Wow.... now that was a very sad and depressing offering... a WHOLE LOTTA different from the cute turtle!! ;) :) Never heard of this form, Yvonne, but you've certainly wielded the heavy emotions with it ... great job! Yvette
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Yvette. I went from one extreme to the other.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvonne, this is a fine poem and again a form i've never heard of. The story within the poem is great and really makes you wonder whether he was guilty. I liked it a lot. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Hi Yvonne, this is a fine poem and again a form i've never heard of. The story within the poem is great and really makes you wonder whether he was guilty. I liked it a lot. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Well, he wasn't, but could never clear his name. But he was free in a different way. Thanks, Ulla.
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So sad, but very true. :)))
Comment from Maria Millsaps
This was a nice poem refecting the torments of standing in a trial. I appreciate the background information you provided. This helps me to orientate my thoughts.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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This was a nice poem refecting the torments of standing in a trial. I appreciate the background information you provided. This helps me to orientate my thoughts.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne. I really like the story. One of the things in life I've always thought was so awful would be the false imprisonment of one for something he did not do. The best example I can think of is Christ was crucified for sins he never committed. Good poem. Robert
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Hello Yvonne. I really like the story. One of the things in life I've always thought was so awful would be the false imprisonment of one for something he did not do. The best example I can think of is Christ was crucified for sins he never committed. Good poem. Robert
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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It would be awful! You're right about Christ. He took on our sins. Thanks for reviewing.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Nottoway
A thoughtfully done poem on what has to be a terribly taxing drain on the human spirit.
One who is condemned and has an unknown number years to reflect upon what may have been only achieves a relief from the mind's relentless turmoil upon their death.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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A thoughtfully done poem on what has to be a terribly taxing drain on the human spirit.
One who is condemned and has an unknown number years to reflect upon what may have been only achieves a relief from the mind's relentless turmoil upon their death.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Thank you for such an awesome review.
Comment from Pantygynt
An excellent little story poem in two Onegin stanzas. After you recent experiences in class you should be good at these.. I am impressed by the feminine rhymes, particularly those in your second stanza made up of two words. the was no feeling of forced stress here. Everything flowed well.
It is good to see forms taught in my classes being used outside the class assignments. Kind of makes it all worth while.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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An excellent little story poem in two Onegin stanzas. After you recent experiences in class you should be good at these.. I am impressed by the feminine rhymes, particularly those in your second stanza made up of two words. the was no feeling of forced stress here. Everything flowed well.
It is good to see forms taught in my classes being used outside the class assignments. Kind of makes it all worth while.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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If I made you feel good, then I'm very happy. Thank you for this great review, especially about not being forced stress.