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My Last Kiss

Delirium, Cicadas, and my Angel of Mercy

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Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Such a beautiful and heart-touching story in a poem... love the way you've linked emotions to the surrounding nature (as the sound of cicadas definitely have a unique tie for many!) - well done! ;) Would only suggest, perhaps using a word in place of the number of "suddenly" occurrences...for some reason, they 'stand out'... ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2020

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
    Thank you, U.M. Your warm words encourage me in my writing and in my relating to cicadas.

    Ah, overuse of "suddenly." I will take care of that.

    Peace and joy in writing,
    Aaron

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello my friend

Great entry for the Free-style poem: human suffering writing prompt contest.

The story of the angel of Mercy and the cicadas is very intriguing. Well done.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2020

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
    Dear Gypsy Blue,

    Thanks for your encouraging words. Anything you'd like to see changed? If so, how so?

    Peace and joy in writing,
    Aaron
reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 15-Jul-2020
    I was confused the first time I read your poem. You through me off when the dying man called the cicadas his brothers. But after reading the author notes I get it. I'm from Spain and we also have angels of Mercy to cross to the other side. It's an awesome story...very unique and well written. I wouldn't change anything.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
    Dear Gypsy Blue,

    OK I received one vote. Does not concern me that I am writing just for you. Most folks don't know what to do with Angels and many are annoyed by cicadas.

    You say, "I'm from Spain and we also have angels of Mercy to cross to the other side."

    Ooooo, I'm interested. Can you tell me more about this or send me to a site that gives me the details?

    Peace,
    Aaron
reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 16-Jul-2020
    I was told by my family and school that an angel guided me through life and when I die to get to the other side. We even have a special prayer.
    We call the angel, Angel de la guardia.

    Prayer
    Angel of my guard, sweet company, do not forsake me, neither by night nor by day, Do not leave me alone, I would lose myself, Until you put me, in peace and joy, with all the saints, Jesus and Mary, I give you my heart and soul that are more yours than mine. Amen.

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
    Alas, I suspect Angel de la guardia is what we call "my guardian angel." When I was a young boy, my dear mother explained to me that God loved me. "How so?" I would ask. "God has given you, my dear son, an angel whose mission is to guide and protect you." I must admit that it was comforting to know that God took a personal interest in my welfare. Before going to sleep at night, my mother would turn the lights out and take me in her arms and together we would recite the standard prayer to our guardian angels: "Angel of God, my guardian near. . . ."

    Peace and joy,
    Aaron
reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 16-Jul-2020
    Peace and joy to you too. :)