Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
You have several strong metaphors in this poem. The question at the end is a universal question. You will definitely draw the reader in as they identify with the same sentiments as those expressed in this poem. The setting is metaphorical about the reader's life as things ebb and flow.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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You have several strong metaphors in this poem. The question at the end is a universal question. You will definitely draw the reader in as they identify with the same sentiments as those expressed in this poem. The setting is metaphorical about the reader's life as things ebb and flow.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Liz, thank you! I always value your comments and thoughtfulness.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is an excellent poem, Jim. I like your internal musings being the theme of this verse. We all find ourselves pondering life questions when we go wading... at least I do. I loved it!
Melissa
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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This is an excellent poem, Jim. I like your internal musings being the theme of this verse. We all find ourselves pondering life questions when we go wading... at least I do. I loved it!
Melissa
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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My dear friend, thank you! Enjoy the remainder of the weeeknd to its fullest and highest quality. Jim
Comment from Jacob David Collins
I don't think I'm quite ready to say goodbye to summer yet, it feels as though it has gone by in a flash. I say this, though I think autumn and winter are my favourite seasons. A well written piece. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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I don't think I'm quite ready to say goodbye to summer yet, it feels as though it has gone by in a flash. I say this, though I think autumn and winter are my favourite seasons. A well written piece. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Jacob, I a m in lockstep with you on the passing of summer, way too soon especially with no college football on the horizon, I think I will cocoon for six months, LOL
Comment from Patty Palmer
I thought this sounded like a six star poem! You captured the feeling that I get at the end of the summer and it's time to say goodbye to the lake and all that goes with it. Every year when vacation is over and we've packed our suitcases and load up the car, everyone knows that I have to have my time to go to the water (Lake Erie is behind the cottage) and say goodbye until next year! I love your poem and the picture you put with it. I swear you wrote it from my mind as well as yours! Thank you for sharing this piece. You made my day!
Patty
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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I thought this sounded like a six star poem! You captured the feeling that I get at the end of the summer and it's time to say goodbye to the lake and all that goes with it. Every year when vacation is over and we've packed our suitcases and load up the car, everyone knows that I have to have my time to go to the water (Lake Erie is behind the cottage) and say goodbye until next year! I love your poem and the picture you put with it. I swear you wrote it from my mind as well as yours! Thank you for sharing this piece. You made my day!
Patty
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Patty, what a truly wonderful gift 💝. I love that you connected deeply with this poem. The wonder that comes with special places we get to spend enjoying the world around us does offer a healing and appreciation for all the good times in life.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is lovely, descriptive, and thought-provoking. It--to me--implies a thought I've had numerous times since March; it is stated in your last line. The pandemic has wormed its way into our daily concept of life.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Your poem is lovely, descriptive, and thought-provoking. It--to me--implies a thought I've had numerous times since March; it is stated in your last line. The pandemic has wormed its way into our daily concept of life.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Janice, yes this COVID wormhole has gotten to each and everyone of us. We can only pray that we have fewer months ahead than from which we have struggled through.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello JLR, this is a lovely ekphrastic poem - your words are lovely. Good use of metaphor in 'warm water licking my thighs digging into my thoughts of, Why? Well written with unanswered questions. Very good. Warm regards, Dorothy x
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Hello JLR, this is a lovely ekphrastic poem - your words are lovely. Good use of metaphor in 'warm water licking my thighs digging into my thoughts of, Why? Well written with unanswered questions. Very good. Warm regards, Dorothy x
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Dorothy, thank you for commenting on my poem, may your weekend be filed with abundant joy!
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
The poem has some really excellent poetic language, in particular - "warm water licking my thighs" and "digging into my thoughts." When I read the line "pushing along with gliding steps" I felt my body identifying with the feeling of doing just that.
Well done!
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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The poem has some really excellent poetic language, in particular - "warm water licking my thighs" and "digging into my thoughts." When I read the line "pushing along with gliding steps" I felt my body identifying with the feeling of doing just that.
Well done!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Susan, I do thank you for your validating comments.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Near Summer's End", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. With craft and well-honed skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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"Near Summer's End", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. With craft and well-honed skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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thank you!
you're welcome!
Comment from crzypnter
This is a wonderfully penned poem with great imagery. I enjoyed reading this as you moved it along with plenty of verbs to help. lol picture to poem perfect. Thanks for sharing. God bless
August
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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This is a wonderfully penned poem with great imagery. I enjoyed reading this as you moved it along with plenty of verbs to help. lol picture to poem perfect. Thanks for sharing. God bless
August
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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August thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a poignant write about what the future holds in the current climate as we move into another season and ponder how tough life could be as the days become shorter, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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This is a poignant write about what the future holds in the current climate as we move into another season and ponder how tough life could be as the days become shorter, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Dolly, thank you! May your weekend unfold into hours of extreme joy and celebrations of living life to the very fulles.