Ease My Pain
For my friend, Gaye150 total reviews
Comment from crbjustice
I am under pressure from your superior ratings, but I want to be honest in my evaluation of your expertise. I love the content, imagery, flow, and emotion. My only critique would be in the punctuation which can prevent a brilliant work from moving past initial review when submitted for publishing.
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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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I am under pressure from your superior ratings, but I want to be honest in my evaluation of your expertise. I love the content, imagery, flow, and emotion. My only critique would be in the punctuation which can prevent a brilliant work from moving past initial review when submitted for publishing.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you very much. Yes, it needs some work. :-) I will take a look at it.
Jan
Comment from marcii
I think a lot of people would have thought and acted the way you did. You are asking her now for forgiveness and I don't know whether I would do the same for I have a tendency to hold on to my hurts.
A real emotional thing to talk about though I hope its helped you in some small way, doing so.
Marcii
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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I think a lot of people would have thought and acted the way you did. You are asking her now for forgiveness and I don't know whether I would do the same for I have a tendency to hold on to my hurts.
A real emotional thing to talk about though I hope its helped you in some small way, doing so.
Marcii
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you very much.
Jan
Comment from minopavlic
It is sad Jan that we often don't learn this painful lesson of forgiving ourselves sooner. I too have went through a kalaidescope of unforgiveness and in the end have learnt this:
I faced my most paralizing fears, the worst being the cold but calculated abandonment of my parents, although their actions in themselves incomprehensible, irreversible, and up untill a year ago remained inexcusable. How do you deal with thirty years of misery and torment. One night I woke up at two in the morning, got on the computer and wrote some words,I hope they hold the same significance in your life, as they have in mine, don't wait 30 years to figure this out. I wrote;
It is truly within that majestic mystery of
forgiveness, that we in turn free ourselves from the noose of resentments, repressed anger, and the smoldering coals of hatred, that as a result of our own stubborness, has over the years, and in some cases, decades been the most controlling and manipulating factor limiting our growth toward complete inner peace,
simply put, as we are all human beings it's in this capacity we forgive them their shortcomings, as we all have them, in essense restoring their original dignity within our lives, whether they recognize this fact or not.
no_obstacle
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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It is sad Jan that we often don't learn this painful lesson of forgiving ourselves sooner. I too have went through a kalaidescope of unforgiveness and in the end have learnt this:
I faced my most paralizing fears, the worst being the cold but calculated abandonment of my parents, although their actions in themselves incomprehensible, irreversible, and up untill a year ago remained inexcusable. How do you deal with thirty years of misery and torment. One night I woke up at two in the morning, got on the computer and wrote some words,I hope they hold the same significance in your life, as they have in mine, don't wait 30 years to figure this out. I wrote;
It is truly within that majestic mystery of
forgiveness, that we in turn free ourselves from the noose of resentments, repressed anger, and the smoldering coals of hatred, that as a result of our own stubborness, has over the years, and in some cases, decades been the most controlling and manipulating factor limiting our growth toward complete inner peace,
simply put, as we are all human beings it's in this capacity we forgive them their shortcomings, as we all have them, in essense restoring their original dignity within our lives, whether they recognize this fact or not.
no_obstacle
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you very much.
Jan
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
A heartbreaking tale. Cancer is a silent parasite that take the best of us. I found your story to be well narrated--from beginning to end. Well written presentation.
Isaiah Ramesses
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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A heartbreaking tale. Cancer is a silent parasite that take the best of us. I found your story to be well narrated--from beginning to end. Well written presentation.
Isaiah Ramesses
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you very much.
Jan
Comment from E.P. Thomas
Janilou,
This is absolutely a stunning, not to mention thought provoking, piece. The way you progressed from your first meeting to now was very effectively and smoothly written. I felt ever emotion you covered. There is nothing more difficult than suffering a betrayal by a loved one or close friend. It's true, no amount of time can ever heal some wounds. They just go too deep sometimes. I admire you for finding forgiveness in your heart. I'm afraid I wdn't find it in mine. I wish I had a six to give you.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Janilou,
This is absolutely a stunning, not to mention thought provoking, piece. The way you progressed from your first meeting to now was very effectively and smoothly written. I felt ever emotion you covered. There is nothing more difficult than suffering a betrayal by a loved one or close friend. It's true, no amount of time can ever heal some wounds. They just go too deep sometimes. I admire you for finding forgiveness in your heart. I'm afraid I wdn't find it in mine. I wish I had a six to give you.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you very much. Your kind words are better than six stars anyday.
Jan
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Excellent work.
Comment from RenieReader
Oh, Jani. This is the worst kind of pain when we realize we are the ones in the wrong. It's so difficult to mend the fences of love and caring once they've been dismantled. I pray the Lord Jesus Christ will be with you to guide you and help with the mending.
Hugs and the best of luck,
Renie
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Oh, Jani. This is the worst kind of pain when we realize we are the ones in the wrong. It's so difficult to mend the fences of love and caring once they've been dismantled. I pray the Lord Jesus Christ will be with you to guide you and help with the mending.
Hugs and the best of luck,
Renie
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thanks, Renie. I am so honored receiving six stars from you.
Jan
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It was MY pleasure. Hope things are going well for you.
Renie
Comment from prophetess
Wow, what can one say. I felt every emotion, The anger, the betrayal, the shock, the grief, the sadness, and yes even the stubborness, not wanting to let go of it all because of pride. To give in many times leaves us feeling vulnerable and foolish. I'm so glad you have let it all go. It's a shame it takes a tragedy to shake us into reality, but many times that's what it takes. I hope your friend has read this and the two of you have reconciled. You obviously need eachother. There's a street saying where i come from, "Hoes before Bros" although crude, it is so true. Women need women and we should never let a man come between true lifelong friendship. Good luck with your friendship and your life.
Prophetess
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Wow, what can one say. I felt every emotion, The anger, the betrayal, the shock, the grief, the sadness, and yes even the stubborness, not wanting to let go of it all because of pride. To give in many times leaves us feeling vulnerable and foolish. I'm so glad you have let it all go. It's a shame it takes a tragedy to shake us into reality, but many times that's what it takes. I hope your friend has read this and the two of you have reconciled. You obviously need eachother. There's a street saying where i come from, "Hoes before Bros" although crude, it is so true. Women need women and we should never let a man come between true lifelong friendship. Good luck with your friendship and your life.
Prophetess
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you very much. I do appreciate your kind words.
Jan
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You're welcome.
Comment from RoxanneCrouse
This is a very interesting and sad story. This entire work is done in a telling fashion. I would like to see you write it from a showing perspective. That would allow the reader to live it and experience it more.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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This is a very interesting and sad story. This entire work is done in a telling fashion. I would like to see you write it from a showing perspective. That would allow the reader to live it and experience it more.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much.
Jan
Comment from menachem
Very touching, and very true. The thing is, how are you SUPPOSED to get past betrayal? It's nice to want to forgive and forget, but it's hardly ever that simple. And, in a way, (maybe even more than that), you never did get past it. It just took "Second fiddle". We are not God, we can't just forget and move on. Your case may be different, because you don't know, but all I'm saying, is don't blame yourself. A least, not entirely.
I hope you find peace.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Very touching, and very true. The thing is, how are you SUPPOSED to get past betrayal? It's nice to want to forgive and forget, but it's hardly ever that simple. And, in a way, (maybe even more than that), you never did get past it. It just took "Second fiddle". We are not God, we can't just forget and move on. Your case may be different, because you don't know, but all I'm saying, is don't blame yourself. A least, not entirely.
I hope you find peace.
Good luck!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your comments.
Jan
Comment from fairydancer
This can be so true and you have written it well:
'They say time heals all wounds, but it isn't true. Time buries wounds, until a word spoken, a whiff of memory, tears open the wound, and the pain surfaces as though time itself dissolved into yesterday. One never really forgets.'
This is a very emotional account of friendship under hardship.
Very well written ending too, especially:
'How many happy days of friendship might we have shared if I hadn't been so stubborn? It will always be one of my deep regrets, as we walk down this path of uncertainty we call the rest of our life.'
Thank you for sharing this pain with us - Cally :)
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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This can be so true and you have written it well:
'They say time heals all wounds, but it isn't true. Time buries wounds, until a word spoken, a whiff of memory, tears open the wound, and the pain surfaces as though time itself dissolved into yesterday. One never really forgets.'
This is a very emotional account of friendship under hardship.
Very well written ending too, especially:
'How many happy days of friendship might we have shared if I hadn't been so stubborn? It will always be one of my deep regrets, as we walk down this path of uncertainty we call the rest of our life.'
Thank you for sharing this pain with us - Cally :)
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you very much.
Jan