Comment from laren

Excellent

This is a lovely poem which tell us about winter sports in the Olympic Games. I really enjoyed watching them. You are right. Sometimes it seems that they fly.
Congratulations!
Laren

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010

Thank you Laren for sharing your thoughts in these awesome men and women.

reply by laren on 25-Feb-2010

Thank you for sharing,
Laren

Comment from fastdigits

Excellent

A rictameter on a very topical
subject, the winter olympics,
in which your choice of photo
sets the tone for your artfully
written poem that captures those
extraordinary men who fly through
the air.
Well done and good luck

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010

Thank you fastidits for writing a comment in this work.

Comment from bkrighter

Excellent

While not my favorite poetic form, I think you did a good job with this rictameter. I particularly like your last three lines. I think the skiers would take issue with the six feet of line 5, though. I know that it would mess up your syllable count, but the aerials have the skiers in the range of 30 feet above ground at their peak. Good luck. Steve

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010

I see, good point Steve. 30 feet above ground is awesome but not very poetic in here. Sigh! Oh well. Thank you for reviewing my work.

Comment from RADIO

Excellent

Love the way you put this as
poets of gravity, white grace.
It is most amazing as I wonder how
many falls did they have to take to
get to this point of ability , to have
the confidence to fly as they do. I've
skied but I can't imagine this.
Radio

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010

I am with you in admiration for these young athletes! Thank you for reading and commenting.

Comment from Fleedleflump

Excellent

'Poets of gravity' - what a fantastic phrase, which lifts this poem to a level of excellence. Wonderfully expressed, with some wonderful phrasology.

Mike

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010

Thank you Mike for lcommenting in this work inspired by those magnificent athletes.

Comment from Sharesy

Excellent

What a beautiful poem, for a sport that is poetry itself, in motion. Figure skating holds the same awe for me, although the skiers take much greater risks. The picture is perfect for the subject matter.

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010

Thank you sharesy for commenting this work inspired by those magnificent athletes

Comment from Rdfrdmom2

Excellent

what a beautiful tribute to those
brave men and women who are competing
for the Olympic medals even as you
compete in the Rictameter contest.
Good luck to all competitors. love, jan

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010

Thank you Jan for your great wishes for the Olympic athletes and for me in this competition as well!

Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea

Excellent

They ARE AMAZING, aren't they? Did you know I used to be a gymnast? Not a skier, by an stretch, but I could tell my body what to do and it would simply do it.

Those were the days. Now I have to rely on such things as poetry, gardening and singing, etc. to play and shall never reach the lofty heights spoken of in this wonderful poem.

Good luck in the booth~
Pea

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010

I think body movements are so precious, to the soul and body as well. Ggymnast are great! I like how they twirl in those ropes! Have you tried yoga?

reply by Kentucky Sweet Pea on 25-Feb-2010

no. i really would like to. i garden, write, sing, make crafts and am now into painting. who knows, though what's next? :)

reply by Kentucky Sweet Pea on 25-Feb-2010

i just said the same thing twice. i'm not hitting on a lot today but hey, i ain't like this all the time, sometimes i'm worse. lol!

Comment from starkat

Excellent

Hello... This is a lovely rictameter about the Olympic skiers...especially liked Poets of gravity. You are missing a 4 syllable line after that {White grace is 2 syllables)... so, a possible suggestion might be...
Poets of gravity(6)
Defy all odds(4)
Skiers(2)

other ideas for a 4 syllable line might be ...
Graceful white doves (4)
White grace floating(4)
White grace becomes(4)
...
Anyway, will upgrade rating when you turn 'White grace' into 4 syllables..

Enjoyed your rictamaetr. Good luck in this contest!
Cheers... ;)

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010

Thank you starkat! In my excitement I missed my count of syllables. How "white grace airborne" sounds to you? I so appreciate reading my work to the last detail.

reply by starkat on 25-Feb-2010

sounds great! very poetic...
upgraded rating. Good luck in contest!...;0)

Comment from WayneHilton

Excellent

Dear Author,

Thank you for correcting the poem. I've adjusted the rating accordingly.
Best of luck with your writing.

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010

Thank you for commenting. The syllables are supposed to be 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2.

reply by WayneHilton on 25-Feb-2010

I see you fixed it. If there's a way to upgrade the rating let me know and I'll gladly do so.

reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010

What I have done in the past: I read it and comment it how the first time and write the new rating.
Much appreciated.