Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

terrific photo :-)
nice use of mono-rhyming
good alliteration in with warm winds
good internal rhyme in fly high
good assonance in games played and in deep/knee
nice tone of nostalgia and good details that capture the essence of summer at the shore :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014

thank you Brooke

Comment from G.B. Smith

Excellent

Hey there Pal. I love the way you crafted your poem and the name selection was spot on. Summers for kids hold bright memories and I am sure there is a kid in each of us that felt this poem. Have a fantastic week
Bear

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014

thank you for this Bear

Comment from giovannimariatommaso

Excellent

Excellent interplay on the word sea throughout the poem. A nice little narrative; great picture, a happy day. I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014

thank you for the review

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

Lovely piece of summer fun. Ice cream is on the top of his list and I'm sure many other children. But being at the beach, so much imaginations can be built there as you have described. Very nice.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014

thank you Drew

Comment from Gracie619

Excellent

Every word in this piece was used magically to take the reader right to that beach. For someone who was hoping to get there this summer, but isn't, this was very enjoyable piece. Great work!

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014

thank you for this review

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I had the same summers and lovely ice cream.
White sheets flapped over me in a game ...we couldn't help giggling
Well done
God bless...................

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014

thank you

Comment from maggieadams

Exceptional

I loved this rhyming, rhythmic poem and the images you created are time-honored and universal. I remember going up to my knees in the ocean with my mother. I remember the sand castles with my dad...oh, thank you.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014

thank you Maggie

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

I remember staying on the beach all day with my parents. Eating sandwiches froma cooler, then having the torturous ordeal of waiting that dreaded half hour before I could go back in the water. Great poem. Made me remember the good old days.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014

thank you GW

Comment from kristo81

Excellent

Well done. An excellent & emotive reflection of a wonderful childhood enjoyed on beautiful sandy beeches. The war was over, the barbed wire removed and ice cream dripping down your chin

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014

thank you for the review

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Oh, this was so lovely - I easily visualized the day's scenes, and felt nostalgic as I read the wonderful internal and end rhyme. Drifting off into slumber at the end of a perfect day...sigh...memories so precious!

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014

thank you Dawn

reply by Dawn Munro on 17-Aug-2014

You're very welcome.