Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The soul of a soldier"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Tresneat
Great poem on the understanding of the prices to paid of being a soldier. A little confused with the way the punctuation is used.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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Great poem on the understanding of the prices to paid of being a soldier. A little confused with the way the punctuation is used.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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thank you this is free writing
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Oh okay, still getting used to the structures of poetry. thank you for getting back to me.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
First of all I could never be a soldier. It takes courage and strength and bravery that I just don't have. But then again there may be that soldier that would look at me and say the same thing about some of the things that I've went through and overcame. I think we are all soldier in our lives though. We all, at some point, have to fight for something we believe in or want to change. And I think in the end we all wonder if our kids will make the same mistakes as us or if they will learn from us by what we've done.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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First of all I could never be a soldier. It takes courage and strength and bravery that I just don't have. But then again there may be that soldier that would look at me and say the same thing about some of the things that I've went through and overcame. I think we are all soldier in our lives though. We all, at some point, have to fight for something we believe in or want to change. And I think in the end we all wonder if our kids will make the same mistakes as us or if they will learn from us by what we've done.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thank you for the review and comments
Comment from dragonpoet
This prose poem is heartfelt and imaginative in telling the story from the dead soldier's point of view.
Will they only rest in peace when the peace they fought for becomes lasting and we learn or lessons from history
I don't think resolute form of the word for that stanza.
Should there be a 'we' between will and live in the second to last stanza?
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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This prose poem is heartfelt and imaginative in telling the story from the dead soldier's point of view.
Will they only rest in peace when the peace they fought for becomes lasting and we learn or lessons from history
I don't think resolute form of the word for that stanza.
Should there be a 'we' between will and live in the second to last stanza?
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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thank you for your welcome review dragon i will keep writing Gary
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You're welcome, Gary
Joan
Comment from pugrpoems
There is some sentences without punctuation, and run-on sentences. I like the message. It is inspiring, and a very good read. Great job!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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There is some sentences without punctuation, and run-on sentences. I like the message. It is inspiring, and a very good read. Great job!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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thanks for the comments
Comment from cherry_rose
A beautiful tribute to our veterans. I had chill bumps on my arms as I read your words. The words truly came from the heart and I thank you for putting them down for all to read. cherry_
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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A beautiful tribute to our veterans. I had chill bumps on my arms as I read your words. The words truly came from the heart and I thank you for putting them down for all to read. cherry_
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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thank you for reading cherry and for the 6 stars Gary
Comment from Gideon Roth
Hello, Deepwater. This is an excellent poem and so well written. It is a very appropriate submission for this Memorial Day time of year. You should do very well with this submission. I honor all those who have served their nation and paid the ultimate price in doing so. Keep up the great writing...Gideon
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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Hello, Deepwater. This is an excellent poem and so well written. It is a very appropriate submission for this Memorial Day time of year. You should do very well with this submission. I honor all those who have served their nation and paid the ultimate price in doing so. Keep up the great writing...Gideon
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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thank you Gideon
Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is very well written free poem, with a smooth flow of words. How true and reflective all these wonderfully written words seem to be. The writing itself was moving and well done.
Have a nice day!
:)
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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This is very well written free poem, with a smooth flow of words. How true and reflective all these wonderfully written words seem to be. The writing itself was moving and well done.
Have a nice day!
:)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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thank you Auroraboreal
Comment from Rick Koestler
will live on in the hearts and actions of men who remember the injustice from their past
or will fall victim to events we ignored.
As a Viet Nam Vet, I salute you, sir, for hitting the mark so few see, or even know exists these days.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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will live on in the hearts and actions of men who remember the injustice from their past
or will fall victim to events we ignored.
As a Viet Nam Vet, I salute you, sir, for hitting the mark so few see, or even know exists these days.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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thanks Rick for the comments Gary
Comment from Mystery Lady
Your writing is very good and very touching. The
fallen soilders have paid a big price for our
freedom. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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Your writing is very good and very touching. The
fallen soilders have paid a big price for our
freedom. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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thank you Lady
Comment from Awatef
This is an interesting to read poem. I enjoyed reading it. There are no flaws according to my best judgment of your great work.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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This is an interesting to read poem. I enjoyed reading it. There are no flaws according to my best judgment of your great work.
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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thanks again Awatef