Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Over the Top 1914 Eastern Front"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from prophetess
A haunting poem about WW1 deepwater. This was a tragic time and somehow, we didn't learn much from it. A lovely poem as a reminder of what liberty day is all about.
Prophetess
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2010
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A haunting poem about WW1 deepwater. This was a tragic time and somehow, we didn't learn much from it. A lovely poem as a reminder of what liberty day is all about.
Prophetess
Comment Written 05-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2010
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thank you prop for the review and comments Gary
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You're welcome Gary
Comment from Dan103085
Another great battle poem, deepwater. This war was full of carnage and in a few short lines you managed to capture its intensity. Your flow and imagery were well done and on point. Good job.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2010
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Another great battle poem, deepwater. This war was full of carnage and in a few short lines you managed to capture its intensity. Your flow and imagery were well done and on point. Good job.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2010
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thank you dan for this review and the comment Gary
Comment from idnami
That is a powerful and moving message. You have painted a vivid picture of bravery in the face of death. Especially knowing as we do the events in WWI we can feel the terrible sense of doomed courage. Wonderful.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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That is a powerful and moving message. You have painted a vivid picture of bravery in the face of death. Especially knowing as we do the events in WWI we can feel the terrible sense of doomed courage. Wonderful.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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thank you for reading idnami
Comment from NadiaScrieva
I liked this, but I would suggest that you put quotes around the ending phrase... "Now fix bayonets," if that is the battle cry.
All the best,
Nadia
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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I liked this, but I would suggest that you put quotes around the ending phrase... "Now fix bayonets," if that is the battle cry.
All the best,
Nadia
Comment Written 05-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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thank you for the review Nadis
Comment from L.lora
For one who touts the blessings
of poor spelling and grammar this
is a phenomenal poem. Your lines
flow smoothly while delivering
poignant thoughts that move your
reader easily through your poem
leaving us with much to ponder.
Where would we be if weren't for
those who are willing to make a
stand regardless of what personal
scarifice they will have to make.
I am in awe of your gift here. This
exceptional. no nits or spags...:)Lora
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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For one who touts the blessings
of poor spelling and grammar this
is a phenomenal poem. Your lines
flow smoothly while delivering
poignant thoughts that move your
reader easily through your poem
leaving us with much to ponder.
Where would we be if weren't for
those who are willing to make a
stand regardless of what personal
scarifice they will have to make.
I am in awe of your gift here. This
exceptional. no nits or spags...:)Lora
Comment Written 05-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your most welcome review L lora and your comments
Regards Gary
Comment from Mike K2
Sometimes, the war letters written for home, have the best humanity about them, explaining themselves in relation to the situation.
I enjoyed this well written poem, and one gets a sense of the battlefront very well. Especially above all else, one must continue to fight.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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Sometimes, the war letters written for home, have the best humanity about them, explaining themselves in relation to the situation.
I enjoyed this well written poem, and one gets a sense of the battlefront very well. Especially above all else, one must continue to fight.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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thank you for the review Mike
Comment from zoocq
I so enjoy your patriotism reflected in your work and the fact that you make the pount for patriotism...which I feel is sorely lacking today. Thank you!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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I so enjoy your patriotism reflected in your work and the fact that you make the pount for patriotism...which I feel is sorely lacking today. Thank you!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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thank you zoo for your welcome review
Comment from R. K. Alan
A very powerful story told in so few words. The rhythm and cadence fits the story well. The two opening lines made stop and re-read not just once or twice but thrice...
"Our dead will mock the searing heat
My wounds will blister black"
All wars seem pointless but the First World War seemed even more so as it was just a stalled chaotic nightmare that no one wanted stop and say... what's the point - we all lost.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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A very powerful story told in so few words. The rhythm and cadence fits the story well. The two opening lines made stop and re-read not just once or twice but thrice...
"Our dead will mock the searing heat
My wounds will blister black"
All wars seem pointless but the First World War seemed even more so as it was just a stalled chaotic nightmare that no one wanted stop and say... what's the point - we all lost.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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thank you Krylon for this review
Comment from noland
Well done. Powerful message. I would change the line 'What evil times has carnage chosen' to 'What evil times this carnage chose.' Fits the rhythm better. You decide. Great read. Write on!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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Well done. Powerful message. I would change the line 'What evil times has carnage chosen' to 'What evil times this carnage chose.' Fits the rhythm better. You decide. Great read. Write on!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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thank you noland for this review
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You're welcome.
Comment from Ann Smith
It seems, when it comes to war, the places and faces change but the message is still the same. The images and voices within the poem are so strong. The last line especially screams out, 'now fix bayonets went the battle cry.' ann
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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It seems, when it comes to war, the places and faces change but the message is still the same. The images and voices within the poem are so strong. The last line especially screams out, 'now fix bayonets went the battle cry.' ann
Comment Written 05-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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thank you for the review Ann
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You are welcome.