Writings From the Heart
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Comment from DonandVicki
I loved your poem about life's introspection. "As I look down the farthest side of my life..." Beautiful and such a reflective, enlightening sentence. Don
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I loved your poem about life's introspection. "As I look down the farthest side of my life..." Beautiful and such a reflective, enlightening sentence. Don
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thank you
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This poem sets out some lofty aims to have had in the past and to have for the future--all subject to one's own choice. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
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This poem sets out some lofty aims to have had in the past and to have for the future--all subject to one's own choice. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
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Comment from Spiritual Echo
I am seriously jealous of the peace of mind that you convey in this beautiful post.
Please tell me that you are really ancient and all this wisdom hit you in the mid sixties allowing you a decade or two or serendipity living.
You see I'm 61 and haven't foun the button on the elevator console that will take me there and I fear the damn cab is heading south.
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I am seriously jealous of the peace of mind that you convey in this beautiful post.
Please tell me that you are really ancient and all this wisdom hit you in the mid sixties allowing you a decade or two or serendipity living.
You see I'm 61 and haven't foun the button on the elevator console that will take me there and I fear the damn cab is heading south.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
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thank you , under 60
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Yuck...over 60... no hope.
Comment from Nomar Chagrin
Nice poem both philosophical and inspirational. I sense it emphasized the idea of living your own life aqnd not being afraid to chase your dreams. Good way to depict this theme.
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Nice poem both philosophical and inspirational. I sense it emphasized the idea of living your own life aqnd not being afraid to chase your dreams. Good way to depict this theme.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
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Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Poet,
This is a clever take on the life he almost lived contest. You have chosen good verbiage that is expressive and compelling. I think we should enjoy are own company as that is where we find ourselves and be content. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
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Hi Poet,
This is a clever take on the life he almost lived contest. You have chosen good verbiage that is expressive and compelling. I think we should enjoy are own company as that is where we find ourselves and be content. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, i enjoyed reading this story about the person who chose the life they wanted to live, to be friends to others. i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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this is very well written, mystery writer, i enjoyed reading this story about the person who chose the life they wanted to live, to be friends to others. i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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Comment from WilliamDeen
You poem tells of a life well lived. You sound content and happy.
Too many people live the life their parents want them to live or the life they think is expected of them. Billy
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You poem tells of a life well lived. You sound content and happy.
Too many people live the life their parents want them to live or the life they think is expected of them. Billy
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Comment from CassPoe
I really enjoyed the message in this poem. It's hard in a way to learn to live with ourselves, so I can understand the contentment at the end of this poem when the speaker states that life was fulfilling because he/she lived it the way he/she wanted. So it's a great line to end with :)
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I really enjoyed the message in this poem. It's hard in a way to learn to live with ourselves, so I can understand the contentment at the end of this poem when the speaker states that life was fulfilling because he/she lived it the way he/she wanted. So it's a great line to end with :)
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Comment from Ekim777
Your words arouse interest; you obviously set yourself idealized goals but what do you mean by the life you almost lived? Most of us find our lives are a waiting game and near misses. It seems your life was an illusive mission and maybe a series of escapes.
Anyway, thank God you didn't fall into the temptation to rhyme every line though some lines were a bit clumsy, easily rectifiable. It seems that your pride lies in your sense of freedom, that's exciting and you've survived on your own terms but were you not mostly caught in your own patterns, your own past sometimes. Your own character is your fate.
When we were young we broke away, broke rules and tasted sweet freedom but maybe in retrospect that freedom was the relief gained by reaction; the response to what we were taught to be. You want to prove me wrong buddy. Why don't you interest us in the things you have done?
Certain things you say need correcting. Okay, you have dared to experience love, lust and some negative things too but then the next night you're stuck with your own loneliness that can be telling too. You mention the intimacy of relationships. I buy that but how long does it last. Are you always honest in your relationships. In my book some relationships are a big con. Prove me wrong. Tell us about some of your experience in relationships otherwise words are cheap. Tell us about how and when you were at peace with yourself. That is what is interesting, not statements about what it is all about.
THis is not about you buddy. This about your poem, nothing too personal. Hint; when your write, try to arouse our sympathy. All the best; - Ekim
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Your words arouse interest; you obviously set yourself idealized goals but what do you mean by the life you almost lived? Most of us find our lives are a waiting game and near misses. It seems your life was an illusive mission and maybe a series of escapes.
Anyway, thank God you didn't fall into the temptation to rhyme every line though some lines were a bit clumsy, easily rectifiable. It seems that your pride lies in your sense of freedom, that's exciting and you've survived on your own terms but were you not mostly caught in your own patterns, your own past sometimes. Your own character is your fate.
When we were young we broke away, broke rules and tasted sweet freedom but maybe in retrospect that freedom was the relief gained by reaction; the response to what we were taught to be. You want to prove me wrong buddy. Why don't you interest us in the things you have done?
Certain things you say need correcting. Okay, you have dared to experience love, lust and some negative things too but then the next night you're stuck with your own loneliness that can be telling too. You mention the intimacy of relationships. I buy that but how long does it last. Are you always honest in your relationships. In my book some relationships are a big con. Prove me wrong. Tell us about some of your experience in relationships otherwise words are cheap. Tell us about how and when you were at peace with yourself. That is what is interesting, not statements about what it is all about.
THis is not about you buddy. This about your poem, nothing too personal. Hint; when your write, try to arouse our sympathy. All the best; - Ekim
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
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thanks Ekim, you need to read some of my books out on the market sometime
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am going through this with my son right now. He just graduated from HS and is going off to college, but has no idea what he's gong to from there. I enjoyed reading you lovely poem and good luck with the contest.
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I am going through this with my son right now. He just graduated from HS and is going off to college, but has no idea what he's gong to from there. I enjoyed reading you lovely poem and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
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thank you Barbara