A Murder Most Fowl
It's best to be happy with who--or what--we are...138 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Dean this is such a good story in a poem. Your meter is so good and brilliant author notes made this all a good read. Don't know how you thought of it. So appropriate to have a Dream Catcher picture. A lovely poem and good advice to boot - It's best to be happy with who - or what - we are. I did know about a 'murder of crows' - I wonder if that is why people thought of them as an ill omen? Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Dean this is such a good story in a poem. Your meter is so good and brilliant author notes made this all a good read. Don't know how you thought of it. So appropriate to have a Dream Catcher picture. A lovely poem and good advice to boot - It's best to be happy with who - or what - we are. I did know about a 'murder of crows' - I wonder if that is why people thought of them as an ill omen? Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much for such a complimentary review and rating of this poem, Dorothy. I am very pleased that you liked it an really appreciate you sharing your feelings with me about it.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I don't know about the Indian stuff in here, but I loved the warning of the bird. His wise warning was unheeded and I took it as her own subconscious. I loved the old way of writing. I could picture a woman running up a cliff to join her lover in death as she jumped off the cliff. Great visuals.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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I don't know about the Indian stuff in here, but I loved the warning of the bird. His wise warning was unheeded and I took it as her own subconscious. I loved the old way of writing. I could picture a woman running up a cliff to join her lover in death as she jumped off the cliff. Great visuals.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thanks for such a wonderful review and interpretation of this, GWHARGIS. I'm very glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from kiwijenny
Crow ........I like this ..they are intelligent and can be taught to speak...my husband knew a man who had two talking crows...
I love the imagery of this ...you could say I am raven about it...
:o)
Well penned
God bless
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Crow ........I like this ..they are intelligent and can be taught to speak...my husband knew a man who had two talking crows...
I love the imagery of this ...you could say I am raven about it...
:o)
Well penned
God bless
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Hah ha, "raven" about it, that was go-o-o-d, kiwijenny. In all seriousness, I really do appreciate the kind review. I am very glad you liked it.
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:o)
Comment from Onixxiya
The rhythm, particularly in the 1st, 4th and 5th stanzas is absolutely perfect. A couple of lines lost me "a magnificent precipice yawned..." - I couldn't read it in time, but i imagine that is my own issue as opposed to yours.
I love your phrasing - to speak with "candid claw" and "the rocks below no pitties know" - wonderful.
Thoroughly enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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The rhythm, particularly in the 1st, 4th and 5th stanzas is absolutely perfect. A couple of lines lost me "a magnificent precipice yawned..." - I couldn't read it in time, but i imagine that is my own issue as opposed to yours.
I love your phrasing - to speak with "candid claw" and "the rocks below no pitties know" - wonderful.
Thoroughly enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, Onixxiya, I'm very grateful for the review, and I'm happy that you enjoyed reading it.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Dean - Your post almost sing themselves off the page as I read. A talent I don't have and so always impresses me when I find it in another's work.
Loved the tale of Native history in your notes as well. This work not only teaches it reminds me of nature's power and understanding with the Natives.
I enjoyed this very much. As always your skill at expressive writing is amazing.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Dear Dean - Your post almost sing themselves off the page as I read. A talent I don't have and so always impresses me when I find it in another's work.
Loved the tale of Native history in your notes as well. This work not only teaches it reminds me of nature's power and understanding with the Natives.
I enjoyed this very much. As always your skill at expressive writing is amazing.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, Maureen, that's a wonderful compliment. But you underestimate your own amazing talent, I'm afraid. Your poems sing quite beautifully themselves.
Thanks so much again!
Comment from barleygirl
I love your poem about crows. Influenced by Native American totems/spirituality for years, I never knew some see crows as a symbol of death (notes). Your writing always has many creative touches (too numerous to mention), but this personification really stands out for me: "bird spoke with candid caw" . . . all in all, I most admire the way your message presents parallel interpretations of life & death, without judgment, just observations. Good job! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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I love your poem about crows. Influenced by Native American totems/spirituality for years, I never knew some see crows as a symbol of death (notes). Your writing always has many creative touches (too numerous to mention), but this personification really stands out for me: "bird spoke with candid caw" . . . all in all, I most admire the way your message presents parallel interpretations of life & death, without judgment, just observations. Good job! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thanks for reading it and sharing your thoughts with me about it, barleygirl. I truly apprecite your wonderful review!
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming couplets and excellent use of internal rhyme that adds a stronger beat to the poem's cadence
swan's song lulled low softly sweet - excellent alliteration
strong action verbs add to the drama of the scene
spirit stripped/tucked in the trees - more good alliteration
a fascinating story line
Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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solid rhyming couplets and excellent use of internal rhyme that adds a stronger beat to the poem's cadence
swan's song lulled low softly sweet - excellent alliteration
strong action verbs add to the drama of the scene
spirit stripped/tucked in the trees - more good alliteration
a fascinating story line
Brooke
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, Brooke. I truly appreciate it, and am very pleased that you liked the story behind the verse.
Comment from emrpoems
loved the suspense of her falling yet finding relief in the end when in reality it is a mere dream.
Well chosen words as usual and a pleasure to read.
Awesome presentation
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loved the suspense of her falling yet finding relief in the end when in reality it is a mere dream.
Well chosen words as usual and a pleasure to read.
Awesome presentation
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, Dean, as always, your story in this poem is so enchanting it stands on its own! But then there is the wonderful phrasing, the lovely rhyme and internal rhyme, the magnificent presentation - truly a marvelous work.
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Ah, Dean, as always, your story in this poem is so enchanting it stands on its own! But then there is the wonderful phrasing, the lovely rhyme and internal rhyme, the magnificent presentation - truly a marvelous work.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very good in every way, Dean. Love the choice of words as well as the story in it. I'm glad I finally have more sixes so I can award one here. :)
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Very good in every way, Dean. Love the choice of words as well as the story in it. I'm glad I finally have more sixes so I can award one here. :)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014