Ten Acorns Grew Upon an Oak
rhyming counting poem119 total reviews
Comment from Drew Delaney
Very nice Brooke. I'm sure youngsters would enjoy this poem.
I was wondering about the last line. A squirrel snatched and buried him,
where soon a tree will grow.
snatched, buried are in past tense and it seems to me will should be past tense because it is in the same sentence. I think it should be 'would grow." Just my thinking. If I'm wrong, be explain. Thanks Drew xx
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Very nice Brooke. I'm sure youngsters would enjoy this poem.
I was wondering about the last line. A squirrel snatched and buried him,
where soon a tree will grow.
snatched, buried are in past tense and it seems to me will should be past tense because it is in the same sentence. I think it should be 'would grow." Just my thinking. If I'm wrong, be explain. Thanks Drew xx
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Drew, thanks so much. One can change tense if one has a reason to - they buried the acorn, and a tree will grow in its place - you just can't shift tense in a sentence if the events are supposed to be happening in the same time frame :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
I had ten little counting poems
And each one shone so fine;
A toddler came and tore the page
and now there's only nine....
...or perhaps we should go in the other direction for this one since there seem to be more and more.
Steve
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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I had ten little counting poems
And each one shone so fine;
A toddler came and tore the page
and now there's only nine....
...or perhaps we should go in the other direction for this one since there seem to be more and more.
Steve
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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LOL - thanks so much, my clever friend :-) Brooke
Comment from GWHARGIS
I liked the cycle of life feel to this. The story of the acorns took this reader through the many and varied states of the acorns life. Then you returned it to the ground to the basis of the mighty oak and its start. Great job. Gretchen
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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I liked the cycle of life feel to this. The story of the acorns took this reader through the many and varied states of the acorns life. Then you returned it to the ground to the basis of the mighty oak and its start. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Gretchen, thank you so much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Glasstruth
What a wonderful children's story. This would really be great with pictures to show. Also, reminds me of 'The Living Tree' There's a lesson here. Not to take anything for granted. The cycle of life and how everything's connected is what this is all about. Great story telling! Les
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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What a wonderful children's story. This would really be great with pictures to show. Also, reminds me of 'The Living Tree' There's a lesson here. Not to take anything for granted. The cycle of life and how everything's connected is what this is all about. Great story telling! Les
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Les, thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
There must be a storehouse of brilliant kiddie's poems one can go to where, if you have a key, like you obviously do Brooke, where you just pluck one out for presentation! Well done again with this never ending flow of creative poems, I'm truly amazed! Beautifully written nice abcb rhyming, even tempo on the meter, like this one, blessings. Roy.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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There must be a storehouse of brilliant kiddie's poems one can go to where, if you have a key, like you obviously do Brooke, where you just pluck one out for presentation! Well done again with this never ending flow of creative poems, I'm truly amazed! Beautifully written nice abcb rhyming, even tempo on the meter, like this one, blessings. Roy.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you so very much, Roy :-) I'm pleased you enjoyed my counting poem :-) Brooke
Comment from rod007
A captivating poem of ten acorns and all gone. But at least they enjoyed their time in this world, but the tree will grow strong soon and bear more acorns peretuating their lives. Well done, Brooke.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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A captivating poem of ten acorns and all gone. But at least they enjoyed their time in this world, but the tree will grow strong soon and bear more acorns peretuating their lives. Well done, Brooke.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
Okay, i believe Sawyer has taught you how to count to ten. (LOL) This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Okay, i believe Sawyer has taught you how to count to ten. (LOL) This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Charlie, thank you so much. I'm so bad at math that it won't be many years before he really is teaching me new stuff LOL :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Domino 2
Your fun first stanza had me smiling straight away, Brooke.
'swing/ping' - LOL
Great imaginative fun imagery throughout this very cute (if not an acorn) write.
I'd hate to be anything numbering ten that caught your attention, as I'd know my days were numbered. LOL
Excellent.
Cheers, Ray xx
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Your fun first stanza had me smiling straight away, Brooke.
'swing/ping' - LOL
Great imaginative fun imagery throughout this very cute (if not an acorn) write.
I'd hate to be anything numbering ten that caught your attention, as I'd know my days were numbered. LOL
Excellent.
Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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LOL - thank you, Ray - yep, good thing there is only one of you!! :-) Brooke
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HAHAHA! XX
Comment from Sasha
I always enjoy your counting poems. This one is no exceptions. Delightful, fun to read and considering I cannot count, w3as quite helpful too.
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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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I always enjoy your counting poems. This one is no exceptions. Delightful, fun to read and considering I cannot count, w3as quite helpful too.
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Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Valerie, thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke