Those Flying Men
Admiring those flying men at the Olympic Games151 total reviews
Comment from knowledge
Your poem captures the Olympic Game skiing jump free-style perfectly. But I think that they were twisting and flipping higher than a measly five feet. Good job.
Luck on the contest.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2010
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Your poem captures the Olympic Game skiing jump free-style perfectly. But I think that they were twisting and flipping higher than a measly five feet. Good job.
Luck on the contest.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 24-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2010
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You are right. I raise to six feet hig in the meantime I do some research. Thank you for writing and reviewing.
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I was just watching it and the woman are doing skiing aerials at heights of 35+ft.!
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
Hey that is a wonderful description of those nutty people who love to fly upside down. Interesting to hear how they have had a dream to do that for so many years. Reminds meof the scripture; "without a vision the people perish." I'm watching the olympics as write this.
Dave
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2010
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Hey that is a wonderful description of those nutty people who love to fly upside down. Interesting to hear how they have had a dream to do that for so many years. Reminds meof the scripture; "without a vision the people perish." I'm watching the olympics as write this.
Dave
Comment Written 24-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2010
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So i am Dave, so I am. Absolutely breathtaking! Thank you for multi-tasking.
Comment from Dustman6180
This is a very nice well written poem, but I'm afraid it will need to be tweaked to make it fulfill the requirements of a rictameter. The line, "White grace" should be four syllables. There's still time to fix it before the voting starts. It's a good poem. Good luck.
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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2010
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This is a very nice well written poem, but I'm afraid it will need to be tweaked to make it fulfill the requirements of a rictameter. The line, "White grace" should be four syllables. There's still time to fix it before the voting starts. It's a good poem. Good luck.
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Comment Written 24-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2010
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Thank you for reading and reviewing this work.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi the author,
You've certainly captured the spirit of the skier in your poem. The images you have invoked in your lines spell out the speed, grace and dexterity needed for this sport.
Patrick
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Hi the author,
You've certainly captured the spirit of the skier in your poem. The images you have invoked in your lines spell out the speed, grace and dexterity needed for this sport.
Patrick
Comment Written 24-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Thank you Patrick for reading and reviewing this Olympic Games rictameter.
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My pleasure it was a fun read. Patrick
Comment from jason456
What a beautifully written poem with an awesome photo for this season of winter olympics. What a great job you have done with this. Patti :)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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What a beautifully written poem with an awesome photo for this season of winter olympics. What a great job you have done with this. Patti :)
Comment Written 24-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Thank you Patti for this great review!
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It was my pleasure. Patti :)
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It was my pleasure. Patti :)
Comment from JeffreyStone
What a way to start this poem, but with an outstanding photograph. The poem and picture are perfectly mated. I really liked this excellent work of art. JeffreyStone
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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What a way to start this poem, but with an outstanding photograph. The poem and picture are perfectly mated. I really liked this excellent work of art. JeffreyStone
Comment Written 24-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Thank you! It took me a while to find the right one for it was all worthwhile. Thank you for noticing the extra work!
Comment from skye
They fly, twirl, swirl, soar, leap, and smile. These athletes are superb. Your poem captures all the glory, tears, drama of the games.
Very well done.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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They fly, twirl, swirl, soar, leap, and smile. These athletes are superb. Your poem captures all the glory, tears, drama of the games.
Very well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Thank you for your nice adjectives to my work. I love it!
Comment from Kingsland
I am watching the Olympics as I write this review. I found this piece to show the athletic prowess of the athletes you have written about. This was a well written verse that was my pleasure to have written a review for... John
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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I am watching the Olympics as I write this review. I found this piece to show the athletic prowess of the athletes you have written about. This was a well written verse that was my pleasure to have written a review for... John
Comment Written 24-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Same here! I am watchiong the Olympics and answering these timely reviews. Thank you!
Comment from joemass
G'day
The first part of the poem was strong, descvriptive writing but the in the last three lines it turned into pure poetry and took off!
Well done.
Joemass
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2010
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G'day
The first part of the poem was strong, descvriptive writing but the in the last three lines it turned into pure poetry and took off!
Well done.
Joemass
Comment Written 24-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2010
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Thank you joemass for commenting in this rictameter on the Olympics.
Comment from Aby
I know just what your talking babout. me and my uncle richard were at this mexican resteraunt but instead of eating our spicy chimitanga's (excuse me f i spelled that wrong) we were wtaching the winter olimpics. I was absolutly amazed by the people competeing. They moved so powerfully like it was second nature to them. In fact, it probbaly is. haha
I liked this peice probabply beacuse of when you compared the skiers to poets of gravity. It makes you think a bit. Thia is what it made me think myself:
Poets usually own thier piece right? well skiers own their gravity. I know it's a silly thing to say but the way they move, the've got to have some trick up their sleeve.
5 stars all around!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2010
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I know just what your talking babout. me and my uncle richard were at this mexican resteraunt but instead of eating our spicy chimitanga's (excuse me f i spelled that wrong) we were wtaching the winter olimpics. I was absolutly amazed by the people competeing. They moved so powerfully like it was second nature to them. In fact, it probbaly is. haha
I liked this peice probabply beacuse of when you compared the skiers to poets of gravity. It makes you think a bit. Thia is what it made me think myself:
Poets usually own thier piece right? well skiers own their gravity. I know it's a silly thing to say but the way they move, the've got to have some trick up their sleeve.
5 stars all around!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2010
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For me they are like poetry in motion. Boy! I'm sort of jealous of their grace! Thank you for commenting dear Aby
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For me they are like poetry in motion. Boy! I'm sort of jealous of their grace! Thank you for commenting dear Aby