Writings From the Heart
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Comment from volunteer angel
Hi Deepwater! You've given us some deep thoughts with this poem. That moonlit night alone doesn't sound like fun.
But there's something to be said for the single guy or lady anyway. They live life as only they want to and don't need to please a partner. I'd rather do the other and be married. Hugs, Mary Ann
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Hi Deepwater! You've given us some deep thoughts with this poem. That moonlit night alone doesn't sound like fun.
But there's something to be said for the single guy or lady anyway. They live life as only they want to and don't need to please a partner. I'd rather do the other and be married. Hugs, Mary Ann
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
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Thanks Mary Ann
Comment from smileycloud
hey
a very strong message of making the right choices as best we can know them at the time
would it not be a wonderous thing if hind-sight was fore-knowledge
good poetry
have a smiley day
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hey
a very strong message of making the right choices as best we can know them at the time
would it not be a wonderous thing if hind-sight was fore-knowledge
good poetry
have a smiley day
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you
Comment from jmyron
"I did it my way!" Well written, with a nice flow to it. An insight into a slice of the pie of you philosophy on life.
John
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"I did it my way!" Well written, with a nice flow to it. An insight into a slice of the pie of you philosophy on life.
John
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
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Thanks John for reading
Comment from Bryana
A very interesting poem. You took a retrospective look at your life. All the experiences the author has had in his life, the good, the bad and in between and at the end that{s the life he had chosen.
Very well written I don not see anything I would change.
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A very interesting poem. You took a retrospective look at your life. All the experiences the author has had in his life, the good, the bad and in between and at the end that{s the life he had chosen.
Very well written I don not see anything I would change.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
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Thanks for reading Bryana
Comment from Alison Williams
This is a lovely piece of work GW. I thoroughly enjoyed it's introspective nature and the tranquility it gives a reader.
YOu have to experience life to enjoy it, with all it's ups and down. And to come through, thinking, it was a good one. Journeying into the unknown, taking chances, surviving, and living with all the consequences, enjoying the simple company of friends. I think my favourite line would be,
Only to bet your soul against the human unknown,
Seeking intimate wealth in the company of friends,
Very nicely written. Thank you for sharing.
Alison :)
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This is a lovely piece of work GW. I thoroughly enjoyed it's introspective nature and the tranquility it gives a reader.
YOu have to experience life to enjoy it, with all it's ups and down. And to come through, thinking, it was a good one. Journeying into the unknown, taking chances, surviving, and living with all the consequences, enjoying the simple company of friends. I think my favourite line would be,
Only to bet your soul against the human unknown,
Seeking intimate wealth in the company of friends,
Very nicely written. Thank you for sharing.
Alison :)
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thanks for reading Alison
Comment from words
An interesting verse on our journey through life.
I especially liked:Only to bet your soul against the human unknown,
Seeking intimate wealth in the company of friends,
To experience lust, love, anger, tears and pain
Only to survive to see another moonlit night alone,
Then will you be at peace with yourself
Well done.
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An interesting verse on our journey through life.
I especially liked:Only to bet your soul against the human unknown,
Seeking intimate wealth in the company of friends,
To experience lust, love, anger, tears and pain
Only to survive to see another moonlit night alone,
Then will you be at peace with yourself
Well done.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
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thank you for reading Words
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'The Quest' is a well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's fortunate enough to have come to terms with the way he lives. I very much wish that I was in the same situation. It was a pleasure to both read and review a poem of this quality.
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'The Quest' is a well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's fortunate enough to have come to terms with the way he lives. I very much wish that I was in the same situation. It was a pleasure to both read and review a poem of this quality.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
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thank you for reading
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You're welcome.
Kind regards,
The Duchess
Comment from Hitcher
Reading your poem brings Sinatra and My Way to the mind Deepwater. It seems to have a touch of contented loneliness to it, happy with how the cards have been dealt, it is a thought provoking free verse offering, well done.
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Reading your poem brings Sinatra and My Way to the mind Deepwater. It seems to have a touch of contented loneliness to it, happy with how the cards have been dealt, it is a thought provoking free verse offering, well done.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
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thank you Hitcher
Comment from Shirley McLain
You have written a very nice poem. It flowed well and was easy to read. The only area I questioned was the last line. I feel the "that was" is not necessary. "To have lived a life of my own choice." Good job
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You have written a very nice poem. It flowed well and was easy to read. The only area I questioned was the last line. I feel the "that was" is not necessary. "To have lived a life of my own choice." Good job
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
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thank you Texasgal
Comment from Jay Squires
Indeed, this is the heroic quest you describe, one I could imagine a Nietzsche launching out on. Hemingway was purported to have said to the new writer, "if you want to be a writer, first of all try to hang yourself. If you fail, at least you will have something to write about." Of course I'm paraphrasing, but the net result of his words seem to reflect on your poem's meaning.
I would have to say in that regard that you may be more of a Romantic to believe that "To experience lust, love, anger, tears and pain
"Only to survive to see another moonlit night alone,
"Then will you be at peace with yourself,"
You might instead be fulfilling the first part of Hemingway's premise out of sheer bitterness.
Still and all, this is an excellent poem. Congratulations.
Jay
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Indeed, this is the heroic quest you describe, one I could imagine a Nietzsche launching out on. Hemingway was purported to have said to the new writer, "if you want to be a writer, first of all try to hang yourself. If you fail, at least you will have something to write about." Of course I'm paraphrasing, but the net result of his words seem to reflect on your poem's meaning.
I would have to say in that regard that you may be more of a Romantic to believe that "To experience lust, love, anger, tears and pain
"Only to survive to see another moonlit night alone,
"Then will you be at peace with yourself,"
You might instead be fulfilling the first part of Hemingway's premise out of sheer bitterness.
Still and all, this is an excellent poem. Congratulations.
Jay
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you for reading Jay