Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Over the Top 1914 Eastern Front"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from rivki1111
Hello, you write about war very effectively, and it feels like it comes from experience ... I can't imagine!!
I think the rhythm could be improved by deleting the words in brackets below.
'...(We are) ready to make our stand ...' Just leaving it at 'ready to make a stand'.
Just a suggestion. Thanks for sharing your poetry, which was a pleasure to read and review, cheers, rebekah
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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Hello, you write about war very effectively, and it feels like it comes from experience ... I can't imagine!!
I think the rhythm could be improved by deleting the words in brackets below.
'...(We are) ready to make our stand ...' Just leaving it at 'ready to make a stand'.
Just a suggestion. Thanks for sharing your poetry, which was a pleasure to read and review, cheers, rebekah
Comment Written 31-May-2010
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thanks for reading rebekah
Comment from mermaids
I came across a book of British WWI poetry years ago. Not much poetry around about WWI so this is a treat to come across. Excellent rhyming and the message of the difficulty of war comes through.
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I came across a book of British WWI poetry years ago. Not much poetry around about WWI so this is a treat to come across. Excellent rhyming and the message of the difficulty of war comes through.
Comment Written 31-May-2010
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thank you mermaids
Comment from wierdgrace
this is truly a great letter of writting home in the time of world war two, and the shortness written smoothly in the structure,and say so much well done, and loved it, I see why it is a all time best. no errors
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this is truly a great letter of writting home in the time of world war two, and the shortness written smoothly in the structure,and say so much well done, and loved it, I see why it is a all time best. no errors
Comment Written 31-May-2010
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thank you wierdgrace for reading
Comment from MikiB
Excellent writing on this poem here. The picture of the old church or whatever goes with it very good. I think you are talking about England? The church just reminds me of some I saw there.
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Excellent writing on this poem here. The picture of the old church or whatever goes with it very good. I think you are talking about England? The church just reminds me of some I saw there.
Comment Written 31-May-2010
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thanks mikiB
Comment from lola29
You write with such passion and clarity, drawing your readers into the moment. I think war is awful and the price is paid with human lives.
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You write with such passion and clarity, drawing your readers into the moment. I think war is awful and the price is paid with human lives.
Comment Written 31-May-2010
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thanks for reading Lola
Comment from P1
this is such a powerful
and strong piece of writing
short but nothing needs to
be added or removed to get
your point across. you handled
this very well and thanks for
sharing
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this is such a powerful
and strong piece of writing
short but nothing needs to
be added or removed to get
your point across. you handled
this very well and thanks for
sharing
Comment Written 31-May-2010
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thanks paige
Comment from Penpal
A very powerful piece with great imagery. I especially liked these lines: Our dead will mock the searing heat
My wounds will blister black...very well put.
And also:With scorn and tears we greet him here
Well done,
Pen
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A very powerful piece with great imagery. I especially liked these lines: Our dead will mock the searing heat
My wounds will blister black...very well put.
And also:With scorn and tears we greet him here
Well done,
Pen
Comment Written 31-May-2010
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thank you pen
Comment from misscookie
I like the artwork
itis fiting for your poem
you express each word with strong emotions.i like the movement of the poem this is a good write
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I like the artwork
itis fiting for your poem
you express each word with strong emotions.i like the movement of the poem this is a good write
Comment Written 31-May-2010
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thank you miss
Comment from workout14
I THINK THIS IS EXELLENT WRITING! I LOVE READING EMOTIONAL POEMS ABOUT WAR. IT IS FULLED WITH EMOTION AND PASSION. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!
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I THINK THIS IS EXELLENT WRITING! I LOVE READING EMOTIONAL POEMS ABOUT WAR. IT IS FULLED WITH EMOTION AND PASSION. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!
Comment Written 31-May-2010
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your most welcome and thank you for the 6 stars GW
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Hugs, Teri
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This is a very interesting poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 31-May-2010
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thank you Teri