Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Winds of Change"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Thilophian
Dear Deepwater,
I liked the following expressions
"Winds of Change", "Like ripples betraying still waters, will you stay with me?" The theme is very good. But I disliked the appearance of the poem. It didn't tempt me to read. Although it contains a lot of meaning, I think some revisions are required. It is my feeling.
Regards,
Thilophian
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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Dear Deepwater,
I liked the following expressions
"Winds of Change", "Like ripples betraying still waters, will you stay with me?" The theme is very good. But I disliked the appearance of the poem. It didn't tempt me to read. Although it contains a lot of meaning, I think some revisions are required. It is my feeling.
Regards,
Thilophian
Comment Written 05-May-2010
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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thanks thilophian but i will leave it the way it is for now some you like and some you don't remember that
Gary
Comment from Fate-destiny
I felt your anguish over if you should open your heart at the risk of being hurt, it seems like you have been hurt before from the description of if things go wrong. It flowed very well, and was easy reading. I like it.
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I felt your anguish over if you should open your heart at the risk of being hurt, it seems like you have been hurt before from the description of if things go wrong. It flowed very well, and was easy reading. I like it.
Comment Written 05-May-2010
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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but only average.....each to his or her owen thanks
Comment from smileycloud
hey
a beautiful picture and poetry
the uncertainty of life and love is well portaryed in this piece
the answers are written in the true desire for a deep relationship
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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hey
a beautiful picture and poetry
the uncertainty of life and love is well portaryed in this piece
the answers are written in the true desire for a deep relationship
have a smiley day
Comment Written 05-May-2010
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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thank you again for reading
Gary
Comment from ~Dovey
It is a beatiful photo and very thought provoking words. You have some wonderful word choices throughout this piece. I especially liked the alliteration in this line, in all it's sincerity... Or do I dare to dream,
This is very nice work. :)
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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It is a beatiful photo and very thought provoking words. You have some wonderful word choices throughout this piece. I especially liked the alliteration in this line, in all it's sincerity... Or do I dare to dream,
This is very nice work. :)
Comment Written 05-May-2010
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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Thank you Dovey
Comment from mrsmajor
I enjoyed this write, and I see in it the makings of a good poet, (although you sound like one already,to me).
Don't let reviews discourage you, I have been on the site for more than 5 years, and don't get many reads at all.
I write because it is my pleasure. I have learned that what may be in my heart, others may not be able to see. I appreciated your thoughts, I felt your heart speaking to me.
Enjoy what you are writing, if it has value to you, then you have achieved success, at least that is the way I look at it. I saw no spag, so 5 stars it is!
I wish you the best of luck here on this site..
My Very Best Regards
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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I enjoyed this write, and I see in it the makings of a good poet, (although you sound like one already,to me).
Don't let reviews discourage you, I have been on the site for more than 5 years, and don't get many reads at all.
I write because it is my pleasure. I have learned that what may be in my heart, others may not be able to see. I appreciated your thoughts, I felt your heart speaking to me.
Enjoy what you are writing, if it has value to you, then you have achieved success, at least that is the way I look at it. I saw no spag, so 5 stars it is!
I wish you the best of luck here on this site..
My Very Best Regards
Comment Written 05-May-2010
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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Thank you for your nice comments Mrsmajor yes i write for me thanks again Gary
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You're quite welcome Gary, Enjoy!
Comment from InHisownwrite
My friend.... I remember reviewing something you wrote a few days ago that touched me... And this has as well....
You can tell that this just pours out from your heart, and the way you word things is so unique....(like ripples betraying still waters, will you stay with me?)(only to replenish yourself with the next winds of change)...
Great job! Bryan
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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My friend.... I remember reviewing something you wrote a few days ago that touched me... And this has as well....
You can tell that this just pours out from your heart, and the way you word things is so unique....(like ripples betraying still waters, will you stay with me?)(only to replenish yourself with the next winds of change)...
Great job! Bryan
Comment Written 05-May-2010
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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Thank you Bryan
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You're welcome.... Keep at it... You have so much to share... Bryan
Comment from volunteer angel
People do change and it's sad when the other one is hurt in a relationship. Sometimes there's no going back. That's the feelings I get in this poem. There's so much that isn't said, but is found between the lines here. Great poem! V.A.
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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People do change and it's sad when the other one is hurt in a relationship. Sometimes there's no going back. That's the feelings I get in this poem. There's so much that isn't said, but is found between the lines here. Great poem! V.A.
Comment Written 05-May-2010
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Thanks VA
Comment from c_lucas
When we open our hearts to love, we take the chance for the pain of rejection. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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When we open our hearts to love, we take the chance for the pain of rejection. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 05-May-2010
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thanks again C
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You are welcome, Gary. Charlie
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thanks Charlie
Comment from Carol D Parker
This is a very touching poem. The age-old heart break pain. But yours is unique. You chose perfect words. Lovely words and beautiful metaphors. I found it sad but creative. It's universal in that we've all been there. Excellent reader identification. Very good work.
Delora
reply by the author on 05-May-2010
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This is a very touching poem. The age-old heart break pain. But yours is unique. You chose perfect words. Lovely words and beautiful metaphors. I found it sad but creative. It's universal in that we've all been there. Excellent reader identification. Very good work.
Delora
Comment Written 05-May-2010
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thank you Delora
Comment from LavenderRiverWriter
Great job on this! Very sensitive and romantic..I am impressed with your soft touch to your writing! Keep up the good work.. Love Lavender
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Great job on this! Very sensitive and romantic..I am impressed with your soft touch to your writing! Keep up the good work.. Love Lavender
Comment Written 05-May-2010
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thanks again Lavender