Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The soul of a soldier"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from kleblanc
Excellent poem. It is like an entry that you would see in a text book. I enjoyed reading it. Your poems tend to have a lot of emotion. thanks, kristy
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Excellent poem. It is like an entry that you would see in a text book. I enjoyed reading it. Your poems tend to have a lot of emotion. thanks, kristy
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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thank you for reading
Comment from aprilmreign
I enjoyed your work. I especially enjoyed your line "Here we sleep in death, unbetrayed but honored in name."
Death is a from of sleeping and when a soldier has died he leaves behind his name in which we honor. I don't find anything to give you which is in the form of critiquing and just wanted to thank you for sharing the piece.
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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I enjoyed your work. I especially enjoyed your line "Here we sleep in death, unbetrayed but honored in name."
Death is a from of sleeping and when a soldier has died he leaves behind his name in which we honor. I don't find anything to give you which is in the form of critiquing and just wanted to thank you for sharing the piece.
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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thank you for reading
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good poem you have penned. It is so full of the truth. If you are a soldier I want to thank you for what you do for us. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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This is a very good poem you have penned. It is so full of the truth. If you are a soldier I want to thank you for what you do for us. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Yes and Thanks for reading Teri
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God bless you
Comment from Mary Faucheux
Your words ring with a resounding bitter reality. History has proven man tends to repeat the same mistakes over and over again. Great read.
Mary
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Your words ring with a resounding bitter reality. History has proven man tends to repeat the same mistakes over and over again. Great read.
Mary
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you Mary
Comment from bkrighter
deepwater, I like the message of this piece and respect for the passion with which it is written. As I read it, however, I did not find that the sound of the words did justice to the substance they spoke about. I think that this could be reworked into something quite powerful.
zone otherAnother note. Line 2: so for you of little faith and governing powers can keep that peace
Would you not prefer 'that' to 'and'?
Steve
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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deepwater, I like the message of this piece and respect for the passion with which it is written. As I read it, however, I did not find that the sound of the words did justice to the substance they spoke about. I think that this could be reworked into something quite powerful.
zone otherAnother note. Line 2: so for you of little faith and governing powers can keep that peace
Would you not prefer 'that' to 'and'?
Steve
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks Steve
Comment from patmedium
Welcome to fanstoryland, deepwater. This is the unending cry of those still here, for those now gone, to be ignored into the future by those who are politically deaf. Good work. Pat.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Welcome to fanstoryland, deepwater. This is the unending cry of those still here, for those now gone, to be ignored into the future by those who are politically deaf. Good work. Pat.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks Pat
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Memorable piece. Pat.
Comment from Marathonwriter
Hi deepwater,
Your poem carries a haunting message from the grave that needs to be heeded. I love the tone and the words you've chosen. The only nit I see is your spacing after the commas. I've been having lots of spacing issues in my story too.
:0)Chris
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Hi deepwater,
Your poem carries a haunting message from the grave that needs to be heeded. I love the tone and the words you've chosen. The only nit I see is your spacing after the commas. I've been having lots of spacing issues in my story too.
:0)Chris
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks for the comments
Comment from sweet_elay
Soldiers are heroes, I have great respect for those people who give up their life in exchange for saving others and for having peace in mother earth. Will recommend this to someone ;)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Soldiers are heroes, I have great respect for those people who give up their life in exchange for saving others and for having peace in mother earth. Will recommend this to someone ;)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you Lanzky
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You are welcome,,ahmm may I ask something? I am new here. Do I really have to upgrade so that I can join contest?,,that is so sad because I can't pay :)..I really wanted to participate. Thank you
Comment from skye
Your poem points out how much we owe these brave men and women, sacrificing everything for our freedom.
We, as a nation, must do everything we can to keep those sacrifices from being a waste.
Honor our laws, keep our freedoms, and don't let idiots try to take them away. Our nation must be kept strong, so these brave ones can fully be honored.
Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Your poem points out how much we owe these brave men and women, sacrificing everything for our freedom.
We, as a nation, must do everything we can to keep those sacrifices from being a waste.
Honor our laws, keep our freedoms, and don't let idiots try to take them away. Our nation must be kept strong, so these brave ones can fully be honored.
Well done.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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thank you
Comment from RADIO
He was an only child. I was a young
kid delivering newspapers to his mom
and dad. They gave me all his baseball
games and cards along with other treasures
he played with as a kid. His plane was shot
down. They never stopped crying. Your heart
touching soul of a soldier made me remember.
Radio
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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He was an only child. I was a young
kid delivering newspapers to his mom
and dad. They gave me all his baseball
games and cards along with other treasures
he played with as a kid. His plane was shot
down. They never stopped crying. Your heart
touching soul of a soldier made me remember.
Radio
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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thank you