Seaworthy Dhow
Petrarchan Sonnet.24 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Excellent poetry, Jim. Not sure but I believe this is free verse, is it not?
My fave lines are in how you ended it:
"Those who sail with fair winds and sure calm seas
their nets raised full, the seas seem still, becalmed,
the mates and skippers knew the fishers won!"
Good job, Sailor. Bob
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Excellent poetry, Jim. Not sure but I believe this is free verse, is it not?
My fave lines are in how you ended it:
"Those who sail with fair winds and sure calm seas
their nets raised full, the seas seem still, becalmed,
the mates and skippers knew the fishers won!"
Good job, Sailor. Bob
"
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Hi Bob , no this from my writing class in learning the process of doing sonnets. This is just of a myriad of sonnet styles called Petrarchan.
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Oh. Okay. Bob
Comment from equestrik
This is a lovely and well written piece in praise of the dhow. I is interesting and the sails billowing in the picture make it seem so much more than a fishing boat.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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This is a lovely and well written piece in praise of the dhow. I is interesting and the sails billowing in the picture make it seem so much more than a fishing boat.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Thanks for your time taken to read and comment.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Petrarchan Sonnet about the fishers are ready to fish as soon as the sun rise above the horizon. As soon as their nets are filled they turning home.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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A very well-written Petrarchan Sonnet about the fishers are ready to fish as soon as the sun rise above the horizon. As soon as their nets are filled they turning home.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Hi Sandra, thank you for reading and commenting, J
Comment from DonandVicki
I am an avid reader and I will have to read that book soon. Your poem has peaked my interest on the subject. Not to mention, I am a sailor. Don and Vicki.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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I am an avid reader and I will have to read that book soon. Your poem has peaked my interest on the subject. Not to mention, I am a sailor. Don and Vicki.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Don and Vicki thanks much, let me know how you like it.
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for teaching me this new word, "dhow." You show your knowledge of sailing and of boats in this petrarchan sonnet! It seems to be a successful voyage!
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Thanks for teaching me this new word, "dhow." You show your knowledge of sailing and of boats in this petrarchan sonnet! It seems to be a successful voyage!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Your welcome, enjoy the weekend!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Another sonnet to delight our ears and I just found these lines a little out of metre so I have some suggestions for you:
"Waves swamped their wood(en) decks (to aid) their glide."
"The best of crews need luck, and this is plain."
"(And) rigs were cleared, nets cast, the hunt began."
On the whole I thought your metre and rhymes were very good, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Another sonnet to delight our ears and I just found these lines a little out of metre so I have some suggestions for you:
"Waves swamped their wood(en) decks (to aid) their glide."
"The best of crews need luck, and this is plain."
"(And) rigs were cleared, nets cast, the hunt began."
On the whole I thought your metre and rhymes were very good, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Great input and thank you.
Comment from Ann Market
This poem was unique and fun to read! I must admit, I enjoy topics pertaining to the sea or ships, so this one was quite enjoyable! The rhythm was nice and the rhyme lovely. Thanks for sharing this!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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This poem was unique and fun to read! I must admit, I enjoy topics pertaining to the sea or ships, so this one was quite enjoyable! The rhythm was nice and the rhyme lovely. Thanks for sharing this!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Thank you Ann.
Comment from Leann DS
Well written poem that had an easy rhythm and flow. The rhyme sounded good with this style. I like the Petrarchan Sonnet. for this topic also. Well done! Hugs and blessings to you.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Well written poem that had an easy rhythm and flow. The rhyme sounded good with this style. I like the Petrarchan Sonnet. for this topic also. Well done! Hugs and blessings to you.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Leann, thank you very much!
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Very nice! I love poetry. I'm somewhat new to the site. Feel free to come see the handful of work I've posted so far. I look forward to reading more of your listings.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Very nice! I love poetry. I'm somewhat new to the site. Feel free to come see the handful of work I've posted so far. I look forward to reading more of your listings.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Erika, welcome and rest assured I will read your submissions. That is the bonus of this website.
Comment from greyson ernst
is this a modified sonnet because im pretty sure its abab cdcd efef gg but any ways nice sonnet and as always keep writing and stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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is this a modified sonnet because im pretty sure its abab cdcd efef gg but any ways nice sonnet and as always keep writing and stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Hi Greyson in the Petrarchan sonnet the format is most often
ABBA/ABBA/ CDE/CDE or it could be
ABBA/ABBA/ CDE/EDC or it could be
ABBA/ABBA/CDE/CED
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oh a petrarchan sonnet
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but may i suggest spacing between the abba abba cde cde
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Again my friend this is the uniqueness that separates Shakespearian Sonnets and Others here is a good website to read about this
https://www.masterclass.com/articles/poetry-101-what-is-a-petrarchan-sonnet-learn-about-petrarchan-sonnets-with-examples