Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan

Exceptional

Now that you took time and pain to write to me about the earlier chapter, I am able to follow it better. The story drew me into the scene because of the way you write the dialogues. There is a twist. Sad to see that Faith is dying.I will await your next twist!:0

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2021

Wow...How awesome is this, Seshadri! I am honored by your support.

I don't know how you manage to keep up with life and everything on Fanstory...writing, reviewing, replying, reading.... I am drowning. I hate when I get so far behind. My apologies and thank yous.

Smiles, Carol

reply by Seshadri_Sreenivasan on 11-Aug-2021

:):) I follow the 'time-management' theory that I learnt in college. Things get organized in that way and you don't neglect other duties. No thanks to Covid, I remained confined to the home and am able to devote more time to Fanstorians. But my artwork (fanArtreview) is suffering.

Comment from Ric Myworld

Exceptional

Alright, alright, now you've got me all gushy and had me repeatedly telling myself throughout the story that it's fiction, it's not real. And it still didn't work. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. Keep cool, if you can! :-)

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2021

I was sure I read and replied to this days ago...but I assume I never hit send. Don't worry...I won't tell anyone you got "gushy" unless I can think of a whopper of a story to post with it. Just kidding! I am so far behind I might never get caught up to be able to write again.

Smiles, Carol

Comment from BethShelby

Exceptional

This is beautiful and heartbreaking at the same time to realize you've been taking care of your own child but she is dying. I assume Liz is the sister who survived after all. You had dropped a hint earlier about Mary having given away her babies, so I was a bit prepared for this. I love the part about Allie being such a spit-fire and being the one with the solution. Great writing.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021

I hope my hints didn't ruin it for you. I like to set things up..sometimes people catch on and other times they don't. I get admonished for springing something out of the blue, but I think the story needs surprises too.

Thanks for the awesome review. Your kindness is always beyond what I expect. I appreciate it very much.

Smiles, Carol

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Another powerful and interesting chapter. I just wondered why Mary didn't realize earlier that Faith could be her daughter, (name, age, and adoption status). There is one part of the letter that is not in blue like the rest, and also just near the end it needs to read "you're Annie's grandmother" not "your". Well written though,and looking forward to the next part.
Wendy

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021

I did some research in my ancestry program and found stories about people sister/sister, mother/son etc who had worked or lived right by each other and never knew. They saw similarities but didn't put two and two together.

As for the blue...I tried for thirty minutes to fix it. It shows blue in the post (the editing part) but when it comes up to read it's not there.

Glad you enjoyed. Smiles, Carol

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Gripping--stunning plot twist--now I'm guessing Hope will turn up! Heartbreaking that they find out as Faith is dying. The pow-wow scene is also a stunner!

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021

Yes, it is, but awesome that they had the time together when they didn't know. They have a bond that was made without knowing they were related.

Thanks for the review and comments. Smiles, Carol

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

But "Hope" is alive! Isn't she Liz? Great moving scene here, Carol!
Great job with the Allie scene. She sure knows how to get things done!

Comments:
She assumed they were either Faith or Annie's. (Faith's)

Should the paragraph starting with ""I want you to know ..." be in blue, too?

Your Annie's grandmother." (You're)

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 Comment Written 08-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021

As for the blue...I tried for thirty minutes to fix it. It shows blue in the post (the editing part) but when it comes up to read it's not there.

Thanks for reading and reviewing. Smiles, Carol

Fixed...

Comment from lancellot

Exceptional

Hmm, a big chapter, length and font size. It does make reading easy though. Allie is a force of nature, maybe a bit too much so. Good chapter.
notes:

"Yes, sir. I'll have everyone there. See you when you get here{.}"

- change

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021

Wow... I am blessed this morning. First review, I read, and it's filled with stars and kind words. Thank you so much.

The editor is fighting with me. On the editing site I get one thing and when I post it's another as far as color, size, etc. Though I do post larger so these old eyes and anyone else's can read it better. I'm not sure what the problem is but I will look at it again today.

Thanks again for stopping by and leavig me such a generous review.
Smiles, Carol