My Closet
a sonnet15 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
My goodness me! It seems that we have a closet poet here! A nicely formed sonnet, with a subtle shift in the third stanza from the horrific to the sublime, and a closing couplet of smelly socks. Bizarre enough to be in with a chance of winning the contest.
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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My goodness me! It seems that we have a closet poet here! A nicely formed sonnet, with a subtle shift in the third stanza from the horrific to the sublime, and a closing couplet of smelly socks. Bizarre enough to be in with a chance of winning the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thanks, Tony
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your sonnet reminded me of the story: "The Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe" as there was a new land behind the closet full of animals in winter. A fun post and I have a suggestion for this line for the sake of metre:
"but Joe and Johnson both require some air."
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Your sonnet reminded me of the story: "The Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe" as there was a new land behind the closet full of animals in winter. A fun post and I have a suggestion for this line for the sake of metre:
"but Joe and Johnson both require some air."
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thanks, Dolly. Looks like a good revision.
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Well, it is certainly an unexpected theme for a sonnet! Silly, but vaguely threatening and disturbing as well. Great imagination, and fun poem to read!
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Well, it is certainly an unexpected theme for a sonnet! Silly, but vaguely threatening and disturbing as well. Great imagination, and fun poem to read!
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thank you, Sam
Comment from moongirlwriter
Interesting writing. It flows well but I'm not so sure I would be interested in viewing your closet in person. . it all just sounds a bit creepy. . .but each to his own taste. You did a nice job of writing about your closet so I do wish you well in the contest. Best of luck.
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reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Interesting writing. It flows well but I'm not so sure I would be interested in viewing your closet in person. . it all just sounds a bit creepy. . .but each to his own taste. You did a nice job of writing about your closet so I do wish you well in the contest. Best of luck.
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Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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The prompt asked for some un-sonnet-esque subject matter, so ---
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well, in that case BRAVO! Well-done. :)
Comment from leather
Now, sock puppets that require air--that's a scary thought. I don't want to linger in your closet, and I thought mine was bad. A good image to go with the poem. The poem was fun to read. Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Now, sock puppets that require air--that's a scary thought. I don't want to linger in your closet, and I thought mine was bad. A good image to go with the poem. The poem was fun to read. Best wishes.
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Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thanks, Leather