Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from BethShelby
If Alan think he'd change Ali's mind about him by beating her up he must be touched in the head. What women would ever marry a man who beat her up before they were married. He is a bad one.This is a excellent story. You don't mind letting your characters get hurt.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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If Alan think he'd change Ali's mind about him by beating her up he must be touched in the head. What women would ever marry a man who beat her up before they were married. He is a bad one.This is a excellent story. You don't mind letting your characters get hurt.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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I've known many women who married a man who hit her before marriage. Alan will get what he deserves, eventually. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
When is Alan going to learn that Ali wants nothing to do with him? I'm glad the dogs were on hand to teach him a lesson. She has grounds now to have him arrested, as he hit her and tried to kidnap her. I hope he gets what's coming to him. Cord surely won't resort to violence toward Alan, but it sounds like he wants to. Ali should have dealt with him instead of running to Texas. Great atmosphere in this with the storm. That always adds to the intensity. judi
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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When is Alan going to learn that Ali wants nothing to do with him? I'm glad the dogs were on hand to teach him a lesson. She has grounds now to have him arrested, as he hit her and tried to kidnap her. I hope he gets what's coming to him. Cord surely won't resort to violence toward Alan, but it sounds like he wants to. Ali should have dealt with him instead of running to Texas. Great atmosphere in this with the storm. That always adds to the intensity. judi
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. Alan will get what's coming to him. Many abused women run, it's part of the feeling they have no power. Ali needs to learn she does.
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You're welcome. There seem to be two sides to Ali. She seems so confident when dealing with her clients and her legal opponents. but she's all emotion and uncertainty when it comes to men. judi
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You're right. We need to get them both in sync.
Comment from Ricky1024
This Chapter #238 was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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This Chapter #238 was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the kind review,
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Brilliant writing as always Barbara. I mean you really are so talented. I love your work and always remember why I should read more when I return to the site after a hiatus. Fabulous as ever you are one of my very favourite writers for good reason love and best wishes Meia xxx
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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Brilliant writing as always Barbara. I mean you really are so talented. I love your work and always remember why I should read more when I return to the site after a hiatus. Fabulous as ever you are one of my very favourite writers for good reason love and best wishes Meia xxx
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Barbara,
Wonderful and interesting chapter. Good character development and plot. I wasn't expecting Allan to come back. The picture really matches the story well. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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Hello, Barbara,
Wonderful and interesting chapter. Good character development and plot. I wasn't expecting Allan to come back. The picture really matches the story well. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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Alan will return and cause even more trouble. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Is "slugged" too strong a word? That would suggest she got a fist, which might have kept her down. Slapped might work better?
What a coward Alan is; I'm hoping that Cord takes care of him for Ali.
This chapter has a knight-in-shining-armor feel to it. Really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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Is "slugged" too strong a word? That would suggest she got a fist, which might have kept her down. Slapped might work better?
What a coward Alan is; I'm hoping that Cord takes care of him for Ali.
This chapter has a knight-in-shining-armor feel to it. Really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2022
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Alan did slug her. He's an evil man. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Next to child abuse, beating someone, or bullying them to manipulate them to Ben to one's will is the meanest thing anyone can do, too many men use this method, there are a number of deaths because of this. There is no excuse, a modern sickness. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Typo : Between the (lightening) lightning? One lightens a load, lightning strikes.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Next to child abuse, beating someone, or bullying them to manipulate them to Ben to one's will is the meanest thing anyone can do, too many men use this method, there are a number of deaths because of this. There is no excuse, a modern sickness. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Typo : Between the (lightening) lightning? One lightens a load, lightning strikes.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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I always mess that one up. I'm not sure why. I know the difference. Thank you for the catch and the kind review.
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It?s more common than you think dear Barbara, great episode
Comment from amahra
OMG! The balls on that guy, beating her like that. You really shocked me with this one. I didn't expect that butt-hole to do that. Another interesting installment, Barbara.
The closer they got, they snarled. [As the dogs drew closer, they snarled.] or something of that nature?
"Thank you. Did you get a piece of him?..." [Ah, this line touched me. I really felt for her.]
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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OMG! The balls on that guy, beating her like that. You really shocked me with this one. I didn't expect that butt-hole to do that. Another interesting installment, Barbara.
The closer they got, they snarled. [As the dogs drew closer, they snarled.] or something of that nature?
"Thank you. Did you get a piece of him?..." [Ah, this line touched me. I really felt for her.]
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the help. I've fixed that sentence. I appreciate the kind kind review.
Comment from Zue65
I will no longer write reactions on how good you are as a writer and how exceptional your prose pieces are because there is really nothing more I can say. No doubt you are already made as a writer one of the best here at Fan Story. I enjoyed reading the story of Alexandra and Cordero. Six stars won't be enough, I guess.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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I will no longer write reactions on how good you are as a writer and how exceptional your prose pieces are because there is really nothing more I can say. No doubt you are already made as a writer one of the best here at Fan Story. I enjoyed reading the story of Alexandra and Cordero. Six stars won't be enough, I guess.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement. I do appreciate. I have people on FanStory who actually hate my writing.
Comment from Sankey
I guess we have been expecting this for a long time. This guy is a real A-hole for sure. You wonder if he ever really loved Alex, or she was a pawn in his plans to get rich?? Very strong language for an equally strong encounter. I thought they were not leaving her unattended.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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I guess we have been expecting this for a long time. This guy is a real A-hole for sure. You wonder if he ever really loved Alex, or she was a pawn in his plans to get rich?? Very strong language for an equally strong encounter. I thought they were not leaving her unattended.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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They felt she was safe on the ranch. No, Alan never loved her, he just used Ali hoping to be a partner on the firm. Thank you for the kind review.