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Quiet Lawyer

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Can a broken heart be mended?

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Comment from Sanku
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Alan is arrested and is on bail and continues to be a threat to Alexandra and Cord's family .Ali is right to feel uneasy .Another great chapter from you .Looking forward to the conclusion.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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Ali is lucky to have such a loyal group of friends surrounding her - I'm thinking she's going to need them soon.

And I'm glad you've written in a strong female here with Rosa. That old lady is prepared to kick ass and take names!

Merry Christmas to you, and we'll see you, Ali, and Cord after the holiday:-)

Cordero sat beside her and held her hand. "You okay." Add a question mark.

The line that begins "I am, but I understand assault and battery laws . . ." I'm not sure OF the law here.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
    I've questioned your last suggestion many times as I wrote. I just changed it again. Thank you for the help. I appreciate it.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Great buildup of suspense. Also amusing that no one trusts Ali on crutches. Alan's attack on Ali was very violent so I can see why she is worried about him attacking again. Hopefully, he has not gotten together with Pat for a two-pronged attack.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
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Alan is a loose cannon. I can see why Ali would be worred even if Cord was nearby. I think she's suffering from PTSD. Here's something I ran across, though someone's probably already mentioned it:

but you can get done more work than me. [... get more work done than me. ...]

Of course a good chapter. Have a blessed Cristmas Holiday, Barbara.

Jay


 Comment Written 18-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
    I've taken the word 'can' in and out so many times. LOL I will leave it out. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jmdg1954
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Good clean chapter. A lot was accomplished, with the doctor, sheriff and the face time fall with her parents.

I'm going to try to go back a few chapters to read and get a little more background info.

Well composed.
Cheers, John

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
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So Alan's arrested, but it doesn't take long for him to make bail. I think the bail should have been higher, something for Alan to think about. Excellent details about what he's being charged with and Ali's visit to the doctor. Who know what might have happened to Ali if the dogs hadn't been there to protect her! Now Ali has a feeling that something else bad is going to happen. Those feelings can usually be trusted. I'm glad Ali has been able to explain to her parents what happened with Alan. Great chapter. judi

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
    The bail was as high as legally allowed. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by judiverse on 18-Dec-2022
    You're very welcome. Some places they've done away with bail entirely. judi
Comment from Shirley McLain
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Merry Christmas to you and yours, my friend. I hope it is wonderful for you. As usual, you did a great job, and as always I want more right away. Have a great Sunday afternoon. Shirley

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sankey
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This was a great read. All very descriptive and dramatic. JUst a couple of suggestions for changes. "I feel Griffin comm(i)[en](t)ted third degree

but you can get (more work)done [more work] than me.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the catches. The first one, I can't believe I did. The second one, yes, my brain works faster than my fingers. LOL I appreciate the help.
Comment from royowen
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Sometimes premonitions can happen, although fear can precipitate all sorts of deceptive visions, although prophets can certainly tell, God has told me a number of future happenings which came to pass, although I don't hold that particular office. God has truly guided, although I have been "near" true, about my own future, but not exact in my own, like Sarah when she "helped" God, and we got Ishmael, and then we got Mohammed. Beautifully written. Blessings Roy

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the kind review. We'll have to wait and see.
reply by royowen on 18-Dec-2022
    Well done
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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That was an excellent chapter, Barbara. I think it's all going to plan and that jerk will soon be locked away for a long, long time! Ali has her own family, and Cord's family watching over her, and I'm sure the ending will be as it is supposed to be. Have a lovely Christmas, my friend, and the best New Year. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx

I'm not posting until 1st January. Once nit below.

The doctor faced Alexandra. "Would you do me a favor?(") After she nodded, he said....



I'm not sure (of) the law here."

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
    Thank you for catching the missing quotation mark and the kind review. I appreciate the help.