Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

You always do a great job giving us satisfaction in these court cases where the bad guy has to pay up! I would hope that Pat Rogers was able to see his resemblance in his son and feel some remorse for his actions.

One punctuation nit:
May, I approach the bench?" (no comma)

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

I have deleted that extra comma. Thank you for the catch. I have no clue what I was thinking when I put it there. I guess I wasn't thinking. LOL

reply by lyenochka on 01-Feb-2023

I think we were taught that commas showed a pause and maybe you heard Ali pause at that moment? Now I have to unlearn that tendency. Turtle helped me a lot with commas.

Comment from jacquelyn popp

Excellent

Great chapter to read. I enjoyed reading your chapter. I found Alexandra to be a pretty sharp lawyer. I like her character. The thing that I found interesting, and sadly at times true, is that connected individuals can believe all they have to do is state their own version of the truth over and over again until people actually believe them. Very well written and well told. This had an awesome courtroom scene, and I was happy with the outcome in the story. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

Alexandra is a sharp lawyer. If she has proof, she is better yet. I enjoy reading your story. It's about Texas and being you live near that area you know how the cowboys work daily. Do you publish your own novel and market, too?

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

I do have a publisher, but it's sort of publish my own. A combination of both. I'm struggling with the marketing part. Trying to get handle on it. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

Alexandra is a sharp lawyer. If she has proof, she is better yet. I enjoy reading your story. It's about Texas and being you live near that area you know how the cowboy's work daily. Do you publish your own your own novel, market, too?

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

I think I've answered this one. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from amahra

Exceptional

I really liked this chapter, Barbara. You do courtroom drama well. I actually felt like I was there.

However, I'm having problems again with my eyes and won't be able to spot grammatical mistakes because I'll be using a 'program reader' from time to time.

Pat stood. "Ortiz was her date. He couldn't get the flower right. I helped." [Wow, even though this may be a lie, it was clever to add this as his response to the photo.]

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

The infuriating thing about this scenario is that it exists - connected individuals who believe all they have to do is continually state their own version of the truth over and over until people believe them. Our courts seem to be one of the last places where evidence speaks the truth and not some self-serving individual.

Last week romance, this week justice! Good work, Barbara, and an enjoyable read:-)

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Brilliant courtroom scene! Thrilled by the outcome as to the financial aspect. Point taken as to prison time waived for practical reasons, though it surely galls them to know he evades punishment. Well done!



the [brats'=>brat's] dad.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

Thank you for the kind review and the catch. I appreciate both.

Comment from Ben Colder

Exceptional

For the first time, I think I got hooked on this story. Mrs. Black is a good lawyer. I would use her in a heartbeat. LOL. Good one Barb. Let the good times roll.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

Another very interesting chapter. You did a great job of reporting the trial and proving that Ali is a great lawyer, and could back up all she said with proof. Glad that Amy is going to get what she deserves.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

reply by Anne Johnston on 31-Jan-2023

You are welcome

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

I enjoyed your court scene. It has the ring of authenticity, though I don't have any legal or court experience.

She knows I'm not the brats' dad." [... the brat's dad. If there was only one.]

"There's no doubt the child in question is Mr. Rogers. [... is Mr. Rogers']

When Judge Picket frown their direction, [When Judge Picket frown[ed] IN their direction.]

who will intern mail a check to Ms. Harding. ["who will, in turn, mail a check ..." LOL, you're not having a good day, Barbara.]

you'll find a 10â?"11-digit code. [Some HTML garbage]

I'm sure some of these corrections had been made before I reviewed my download of your chapter.

Jay

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023

I have already made those corrections. Thank you for the kind review.