Guided by Faith
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Comment from lancellot
The slow boil of romance seems to be going well. The two main characters are careful but they do make good use of their alone time learning about each other. It is clear (as with the Sheriff) that they may have some relationship experience and now move with caution. Now, that may conflict with their stated ages. That's still something I would recommend reconsidering considering their displayed level of maturity. A 29 year old Sheriff is rare be itself.
The writing and editing are good. The characters stick to who they are with no surprises. I would also suggest raising the stakes on the "supposed" threat, as so far, it doesn't seem to correspond to the level of concern given at one point, but not given at others. It doesn't seem all that important at all.
But, overall this works very well with this genre of romance for its target audience.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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The slow boil of romance seems to be going well. The two main characters are careful but they do make good use of their alone time learning about each other. It is clear (as with the Sheriff) that they may have some relationship experience and now move with caution. Now, that may conflict with their stated ages. That's still something I would recommend reconsidering considering their displayed level of maturity. A 29 year old Sheriff is rare be itself.
The writing and editing are good. The characters stick to who they are with no surprises. I would also suggest raising the stakes on the "supposed" threat, as so far, it doesn't seem to correspond to the level of concern given at one point, but not given at others. It doesn't seem all that important at all.
But, overall this works very well with this genre of romance for its target audience.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. This threat will be raised shorty. I read through the novel at the hospital. My husband had total knee replacement. I can't remember exactly when by chapters, but it's really close.
Comment from estory
I think this is my favorite chapter in the story so far. You created a great romantic scene there around the fire with the smores between Emma and Seth. As always, the dialogue carried the day and it had great emotional undertones. We see these two dancing around each other, checking each other out, through small talk. She seems to be still holding him at arms length, he seems determined to win her good graces. They both seem to be dropping into the small town way of life where everybody knows everybody else and you are never far from home. An idyllic life. estory
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I think this is my favorite chapter in the story so far. You created a great romantic scene there around the fire with the smores between Emma and Seth. As always, the dialogue carried the day and it had great emotional undertones. We see these two dancing around each other, checking each other out, through small talk. She seems to be still holding him at arms length, he seems determined to win her good graces. They both seem to be dropping into the small town way of life where everybody knows everybody else and you are never far from home. An idyllic life. estory
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Another great chapter in your book. Sounds like these two are getting to know each other slowly, and enjoying simple things like a bonfire and enjoying music together.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Another great chapter in your book. Sounds like these two are getting to know each other slowly, and enjoying simple things like a bonfire and enjoying music together.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome, Barbara
Comment from Teri7
Barbara, This is another great chapter you have penned. I get excited when I read about Seth and Emma. I hope they end up together. You used very good descriptive words and lovely song! Thanks for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Barbara, This is another great chapter you have penned. I get excited when I read about Seth and Emma. I hope they end up together. You used very good descriptive words and lovely song! Thanks for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was an excellent chapter. You gave us another look at both Seth and Emma. Plus, the bonus perspective of Carl on Seth. You kept it going with the bonfire and the intimacy of that setting. This is really coming around. I feel like I know them enough to root for both of them. Gretchen
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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This was an excellent chapter. You gave us another look at both Seth and Emma. Plus, the bonus perspective of Carl on Seth. You kept it going with the bonfire and the intimacy of that setting. This is really coming around. I feel like I know them enough to root for both of them. Gretchen
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Standing on the Promosis is one of my favorite songs, and I love Alan Jackson. I have a first cousin that looked like him when he was younger. Wonderful chapter that I enjoyed reading. Have a great day. Shirley
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Standing on the Promosis is one of my favorite songs, and I love Alan Jackson. I have a first cousin that looked like him when he was younger. Wonderful chapter that I enjoyed reading. Have a great day. Shirley
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Alan Jackson is my favorite country singer.
Comment from jmdg1954
Barbara,
Your writing skills are excellent at giving little morsels at a time on the brewing romance between these two. At many intervals I expect them to embrace and kiss but it doesn't get that far.
Maybe at some point?
Thank you for posting...
John
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Barbara,
Your writing skills are excellent at giving little morsels at a time on the brewing romance between these two. At many intervals I expect them to embrace and kiss but it doesn't get that far.
Maybe at some point?
Thank you for posting...
John
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I can promise at some point they will embrace and kiss. Just at exactly the right point. LOL Thank you for the kind review. I like building a strong relationship first.
Comment from Wendy G
They are getting to know each other better, and becoming friends first, a good basis for further developments as they are not rushing things. She is still finding her life path, I think, which might proveto be a hiccup soon. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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They are getting to know each other better, and becoming friends first, a good basis for further developments as they are not rushing things. She is still finding her life path, I think, which might proveto be a hiccup soon. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
Comment from lyenochka
I keep thinking any of these times together are like real dates and Seth and Emma are getting to know each other and care for each other more and more. It's interesting that Carl told her that Seth is "guarding himself." I guess Seth doesn't want to reveal his feelings too soon!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I keep thinking any of these times together are like real dates and Seth and Emma are getting to know each other and care for each other more and more. It's interesting that Carl told her that Seth is "guarding himself." I guess Seth doesn't want to reveal his feelings too soon!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Seth had been hurt. He' discuss when he fully trusts Emma. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Yardier
I hesitate to even approach you with correction for you truly have been a careful constructive mentor. I have learned much about punctuation and dialogue reading your work. I come from a period where popular authors wrote descriptively and let the editors clean up the mess. So, I'm learning to be somewhere in between. Many thanks to you my tea drinking friend.
Now, please correct me, if I have misunderstood the text I think is lacking or incorrect.
"I'm an adult. I don't somebody staying with me. (Need)?
He set folding chair close... (a) or (the)?
"Have seat." (a)?
So, there you have it.
BTW Allen Jackson is my wife's favorite Christian singer. She will tear up every time she hears his daughters sing chorus.
Life is good in Christ.
It is such a pleasure to know you.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I hesitate to even approach you with correction for you truly have been a careful constructive mentor. I have learned much about punctuation and dialogue reading your work. I come from a period where popular authors wrote descriptively and let the editors clean up the mess. So, I'm learning to be somewhere in between. Many thanks to you my tea drinking friend.
Now, please correct me, if I have misunderstood the text I think is lacking or incorrect.
"I'm an adult. I don't somebody staying with me. (Need)?
He set folding chair close... (a) or (the)?
"Have seat." (a)?
So, there you have it.
BTW Allen Jackson is my wife's favorite Christian singer. She will tear up every time she hears his daughters sing chorus.
Life is good in Christ.
It is such a pleasure to know you.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the help. I made changes in those areas as I posted and still didn't get them right. I really appreciate the help. That's why I post on FanStory. Then I pass it off to another editor.