Guided by Faith
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Comment from w.j.debi
Good for Emma for standing up for herself, but also good that Seth showed up and handcuffed the drunk guy.
Natural dialog and excellent descriptions keep this flowing well and interesting to read.
You keep building the mystery with that Crown Victoria.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Good for Emma for standing up for herself, but also good that Seth showed up and handcuffed the drunk guy.
Natural dialog and excellent descriptions keep this flowing well and interesting to read.
You keep building the mystery with that Crown Victoria.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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We will discover the mystery behind the Crown Vic, I promise. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
You created some great tension in that scene with the guy groping Emma, and we also got to see Seth riding to the rescue again. I thought you ended this on a suspenseful note as well, that mysterious crown victoria keeps circling around and we have to see who is after Emma in it. I liked the dialogue between Emma and Seth, as always there is plenty of the personality, the humor and emotions of the characters coming through it, and we see Seth definitely edging closer to Emma and he is running out of excuses to make it seem happenstance. Humor, wit, romance, tension, intrigue; the story has it all. estory
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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You created some great tension in that scene with the guy groping Emma, and we also got to see Seth riding to the rescue again. I thought you ended this on a suspenseful note as well, that mysterious crown victoria keeps circling around and we have to see who is after Emma in it. I liked the dialogue between Emma and Seth, as always there is plenty of the personality, the humor and emotions of the characters coming through it, and we see Seth definitely edging closer to Emma and he is running out of excuses to make it seem happenstance. Humor, wit, romance, tension, intrigue; the story has it all. estory
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Teri7
Barbara, Thank you for this great six star chapter you have penned. There is some mystery with this guy in the Crown Vic. I loved every word of this. And Emma and Seth is looking interesting too. Wow - maybe those two woman that seem to like Seth could be working on a plan to move Emma out of the way for good or who knows. Great chapter my friend. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Barbara, Thank you for this great six star chapter you have penned. There is some mystery with this guy in the Crown Vic. I loved every word of this. And Emma and Seth is looking interesting too. Wow - maybe those two woman that seem to like Seth could be working on a plan to move Emma out of the way for good or who knows. Great chapter my friend. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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you are so welcome!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
First sentence: When Seth walked out OF the Police . . .
"Only if you'll you eat with me?" Get rid of "you"
The sentence that begins, "You get to keep your reading program . . ." I would add a comma after program
Barbara, did you sample a sandwich like this to see for yourself if it deserved to be on a menu? Writer's research, you know:-)
I didn't watch the video, but I assume you took a real story and weaved it into your story. I love doing that - coming across interesting characters that can find a place in a fiction you're writing.
Did I miss something on the Crown Vic? Or is this a new story line that we'll learn more about in the future.
Thank you, Barbara. You're telling an interesting story here, and - as I've said - I admire your ability to keep it going chapter after chapter.
Have a great holiday.
Pam
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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First sentence: When Seth walked out OF the Police . . .
"Only if you'll you eat with me?" Get rid of "you"
The sentence that begins, "You get to keep your reading program . . ." I would add a comma after program
Barbara, did you sample a sandwich like this to see for yourself if it deserved to be on a menu? Writer's research, you know:-)
I didn't watch the video, but I assume you took a real story and weaved it into your story. I love doing that - coming across interesting characters that can find a place in a fiction you're writing.
Did I miss something on the Crown Vic? Or is this a new story line that we'll learn more about in the future.
Thank you, Barbara. You're telling an interesting story here, and - as I've said - I admire your ability to keep it going chapter after chapter.
Have a great holiday.
Pam
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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I happen to really like salmon and have eaten this sandwich before. The Crown Vic has been in the story, almost since the beginning. Thank you for the catches. I changed both of those sentences as I posted and still didn't get them right. Grr. I do appreciate the help.
Comment from JSD
This is an excellent piece of writing. The dialogue stands out as authentic and utterly convincing and this is what most engages the reader. The 'drunken slurs' are perfect and make every bit of sense. You subtly, without preaching, deal with the nastiness of this situation which is regrettably still too common in our society.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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This is an excellent piece of writing. The dialogue stands out as authentic and utterly convincing and this is what most engages the reader. The 'drunken slurs' are perfect and make every bit of sense. You subtly, without preaching, deal with the nastiness of this situation which is regrettably still too common in our society.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
Seth knows exactly what to do and it's clear he's doing more than a police chief or a landlord would do, well, the protective feelings go beyond, anyway. I liked how Seth got involved with sampling the future Friday entree. Sounds yummy!!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Seth knows exactly what to do and it's clear he's doing more than a police chief or a landlord would do, well, the protective feelings go beyond, anyway. I liked how Seth got involved with sampling the future Friday entree. Sounds yummy!!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Seth messes up the next day. LOL
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I can't believe it has only been two weeks, seth and Emma met! Their relationship is moving along nicely.
Seth is so protective of Emma, it's cute and romantic.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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I can't believe it has only been two weeks, seth and Emma met! Their relationship is moving along nicely.
Seth is so protective of Emma, it's cute and romantic.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. That's why I post the number of days. It takes so long to post the stories on FanStory, people get confused.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is well-written and quite believable. Someone is watching Emma and that is dangerous. The drunk is something waitresses have to put up with, unfortunately. Most find a way to deal with them. Emma will get good at that after awhile. Pouring from the opposite side of the table helps and sometimes a little hot coffee splashed on a hand cools them off.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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This is well-written and quite believable. Someone is watching Emma and that is dangerous. The drunk is something waitresses have to put up with, unfortunately. Most find a way to deal with them. Emma will get good at that after awhile. Pouring from the opposite side of the table helps and sometimes a little hot coffee splashed on a hand cools them off.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
Thank you for the kind review
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A close connection becoming even closer over making a salmon sandwich here Barbara and these approaches are fine when they are welcomed. It is when attention like this is unwelcome that it becomes a problem as in the video you attached. Natural dialogue here as your story progressed, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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A close connection becoming even closer over making a salmon sandwich here Barbara and these approaches are fine when they are welcomed. It is when attention like this is unwelcome that it becomes a problem as in the video you attached. Natural dialogue here as your story progressed, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from forestport12
My goodness Barb. I forgot how tight your writing and dialogue usually is. I know you consistently put out above grade work. I have to envy your ability to keep up such a pace with quality. And I appreciate your Christian world view. Blessings... And I like the realism of your characters in a Christ centered story. Too many times the cheesy stuff in Christian literature is so unrealistic it turns me off.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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My goodness Barb. I forgot how tight your writing and dialogue usually is. I know you consistently put out above grade work. I have to envy your ability to keep up such a pace with quality. And I appreciate your Christian world view. Blessings... And I like the realism of your characters in a Christ centered story. Too many times the cheesy stuff in Christian literature is so unrealistic it turns me off.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and WOW!! It has been a while since I've heard from you. I hope you stick around for a while. I can't wait to read your posts.