Guided by Faith
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Comment from royowen
It seems that the relationship has made its first stumble, but I'm sure it will be redeemed, I love the way Emma thinks because Seth is treating her to a meal that she reveals independent she is, with that edge of feistiness, it's not going to be easy, beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Typo : He pointed to (the) couch
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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It seems that the relationship has made its first stumble, but I'm sure it will be redeemed, I love the way Emma thinks because Seth is treating her to a meal that she reveals independent she is, with that edge of feistiness, it's not going to be easy, beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Typo : He pointed to (the) couch
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Those little words get me every time. Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help.
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Comment from Wendy G
Most young women would have simply laughed off his smart remark. She seems a bit "precious". Why would she want to go home to her parents? She should just tell him to behave himself and get his act together. Otherwise, I am still enjoying the story, and hope that they can talk things over properly and hope too that Peggy will realise that forcing herself on him will never work. Well done. Looking forward to more.
Wendy
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Most young women would have simply laughed off his smart remark. She seems a bit "precious". Why would she want to go home to her parents? She should just tell him to behave himself and get his act together. Otherwise, I am still enjoying the story, and hope that they can talk things over properly and hope too that Peggy will realise that forcing herself on him will never work. Well done. Looking forward to more.
Wendy
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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More about Emma's background will come out next Sunday. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, another one of your very remarkable books with a little bit of romance and mastery. And of course there are some lose wires that needs to be solved. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Wow, another one of your very remarkable books with a little bit of romance and mastery. And of course there are some lose wires that needs to be solved. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Read this earlier today and forgot to fill in the review. Good work, as usual Always a great read.Can't wait to see where this is all heading. No spags, today.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Read this earlier today and forgot to fill in the review. Good work, as usual Always a great read.Can't wait to see where this is all heading. No spags, today.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow. A excellent chapter filled with emotion, outrage and friendship. Lots to digest including Emma's continued immaturity.
Unfortunately this part is a stretch...
Surprised, she jerked around, became off balance, and fell. Seth caught her.
Caught her? To make that more believable, I think somehow it's got to be written how many rungs she's climbed or how many feet in the air she was. Otherwise, it seems unrealistic in my opinion.
John
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Wow. A excellent chapter filled with emotion, outrage and friendship. Lots to digest including Emma's continued immaturity.
Unfortunately this part is a stretch...
Surprised, she jerked around, became off balance, and fell. Seth caught her.
Caught her? To make that more believable, I think somehow it's got to be written how many rungs she's climbed or how many feet in the air she was. Otherwise, it seems unrealistic in my opinion.
John
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I'll work on that area.
Comment from Teri7
This is another great chapter you have penned Barbara. I didn't see anything wrong with the writing. I just get upset at Emma! It seems that Seth if real and she does not really want to pursue anything further. He keeps trying to do the right thing by her. I can't wait til the next chapter! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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This is another great chapter you have penned Barbara. I didn't see anything wrong with the writing. I just get upset at Emma! It seems that Seth if real and she does not really want to pursue anything further. He keeps trying to do the right thing by her. I can't wait til the next chapter! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from JT traveller
Well written and a great finish with the promise of riding pillion on a motorbike. I can feel the build up of tension and attraction between Seth and Emma.
Lots of things happening in this chapter, I enjoyed the pace and the involvement of other members of the community which were introduced in conversation.
Jacqueline
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Well written and a great finish with the promise of riding pillion on a motorbike. I can feel the build up of tension and attraction between Seth and Emma.
Lots of things happening in this chapter, I enjoyed the pace and the involvement of other members of the community which were introduced in conversation.
Jacqueline
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, the writing and editing are good, and yes, I realize I will be the only one making these sorts of comments. But, they are not insults or against you. Feel free to completely ignore them.
notes:
Emma: She dances with old ladies, works in you dad bakery, virginal, creates a reading program for little kids, has a dog, top of her college class, now she rescues stray cats from trees. Do you see?
She removed her phone from her back pocket. "I'll move in with my parents. I'll be out of here tomorrow."
Seth took her phone and laid it on the counter. "Don't."
"I won't stay where I'm not wanted."
-There is no context for these statements from Emma. (yes, there may be trauma, but it hasn't been revealed yet, to us or Seth.)
"Even Ace is upset with me." Seth started to sit in the chair across
- This seems anti-male. He didn't do anything. Do you want Seth to appear as a SIMP? Seth just accepts 'without question' that he did something wrong (No male pride, or normal innocence reaction). You could do this, but, perhaps actually have him do something bad. It comes off as a normal joke, most men would make to break the tension. If it wasn't a joke, then it was clear flirting, also nothing wrong between adults. If it was somehow malicious (not sure how), that must be better shown by the author.
- No way, a college grad, beautiful young woman, never heard such a joke. Her reaction should have immediately set off warning signals to Seth (a man his age and profession).
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Hmm, the writing and editing are good, and yes, I realize I will be the only one making these sorts of comments. But, they are not insults or against you. Feel free to completely ignore them.
notes:
Emma: She dances with old ladies, works in you dad bakery, virginal, creates a reading program for little kids, has a dog, top of her college class, now she rescues stray cats from trees. Do you see?
She removed her phone from her back pocket. "I'll move in with my parents. I'll be out of here tomorrow."
Seth took her phone and laid it on the counter. "Don't."
"I won't stay where I'm not wanted."
-There is no context for these statements from Emma. (yes, there may be trauma, but it hasn't been revealed yet, to us or Seth.)
"Even Ace is upset with me." Seth started to sit in the chair across
- This seems anti-male. He didn't do anything. Do you want Seth to appear as a SIMP? Seth just accepts 'without question' that he did something wrong (No male pride, or normal innocence reaction). You could do this, but, perhaps actually have him do something bad. It comes off as a normal joke, most men would make to break the tension. If it wasn't a joke, then it was clear flirting, also nothing wrong between adults. If it was somehow malicious (not sure how), that must be better shown by the author.
- No way, a college grad, beautiful young woman, never heard such a joke. Her reaction should have immediately set off warning signals to Seth (a man his age and profession).
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Emma will come to realize she over reacted. More about Emma's background will come out next Sunday. Also she went to a very conservative college. They do still exist.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
It's getting raunchier and then, sadly, Emma puts the brakes on:( But she's definitely controlling things here and determined there should be no suspicion that she's manipulating situations to involve Seth. Your story, Barbara has good pace and dialogue which keeps the reader engaged. Seth's work is proving stressful as he is feeling that 'old money' is dictating who he can and cannot arrest. He desperately I think needs the support and companionship that Emma is still wary to give him. Small edit : para starting It did... He took (a) drink of tea. Another excellent write, thank you. Debbie x
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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It's getting raunchier and then, sadly, Emma puts the brakes on:( But she's definitely controlling things here and determined there should be no suspicion that she's manipulating situations to involve Seth. Your story, Barbara has good pace and dialogue which keeps the reader engaged. Seth's work is proving stressful as he is feeling that 'old money' is dictating who he can and cannot arrest. He desperately I think needs the support and companionship that Emma is still wary to give him. Small edit : para starting It did... He took (a) drink of tea. Another excellent write, thank you. Debbie x
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Those little words get me every time. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Although these two have finally got together, I am not sure they were on the same page and perhaps this union got off to a shaky start, but I reckon they will work things out and as it sounds like she will say yes to the ride. Much enjoyed Barbara, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Although these two have finally got together, I am not sure they were on the same page and perhaps this union got off to a shaky start, but I reckon they will work things out and as it sounds like she will say yes to the ride. Much enjoyed Barbara, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.