Guided by Faith
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Comment from Wendy G
An excellent chapter and it goes a long way to explaining Emma's insecurities. Peggy B seems to have the attitude that she gets whatever she wants. Realistic dialogue too. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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An excellent chapter and it goes a long way to explaining Emma's insecurities. Peggy B seems to have the attitude that she gets whatever she wants. Realistic dialogue too. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Teri7
Barbara, This is a really great chapter and it deserves these six stars! I am so happy I had them to give you. I am so glad they were talking a little more this time. There is hope for them. Maybe something will happen Ms. Barton. I really don't trust her. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Barbara, This is a really great chapter and it deserves these six stars! I am so happy I had them to give you. I am so glad they were talking a little more this time. There is hope for them. Maybe something will happen Ms. Barton. I really don't trust her. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 16-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from MissMerri
I am so impressed with your ability to create natural, totally believable dialogue. Young people talk like young people and it feels like watching a drama. I also like the way you move the story along through the ongoing interaction of the principle characters. You don't have to give a lot of description or explanation, because the characters seem to be telling the story themselves. I am really enjoying this story, so far. There are nice people and not so nice, which makes us, the readers, want to root for the nice ones.
One suggestion: When Seth changed his mind about where they would go, and "headed in a different direction," I think you should say something about parking near the lake, so that it won't be a surprise when Emma looks at it and says how gorgeous it is.
Typo:
They walked closer to the lake and stared at the distance (distant) mesas as the sun continued lowering.
A fun story to follow... keep going. MM
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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I am so impressed with your ability to create natural, totally believable dialogue. Young people talk like young people and it feels like watching a drama. I also like the way you move the story along through the ongoing interaction of the principle characters. You don't have to give a lot of description or explanation, because the characters seem to be telling the story themselves. I am really enjoying this story, so far. There are nice people and not so nice, which makes us, the readers, want to root for the nice ones.
One suggestion: When Seth changed his mind about where they would go, and "headed in a different direction," I think you should say something about parking near the lake, so that it won't be a surprise when Emma looks at it and says how gorgeous it is.
Typo:
They walked closer to the lake and stared at the distance (distant) mesas as the sun continued lowering.
A fun story to follow... keep going. MM
Comment Written 16-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate the catch.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Rivalry unintended. What Peggy doesn't seem to understand is that the more you made the guy to run away. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Rivalry unintended. What Peggy doesn't seem to understand is that the more you made the guy to run away. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Amen. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Your chapters always seem shorter than the numbers because you write so fluently. Everything is well-linked so that I don't have to go back and see if I missed something. You have made Emma come across in all ways as very innocent and I'm not surprised she hasn't really been kissed. Seth is the perfect man for her as he isn't demanding but goes with the flow. It is so cute that Ace takes Molly out to potty.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Your chapters always seem shorter than the numbers because you write so fluently. Everything is well-linked so that I don't have to go back and see if I missed something. You have made Emma come across in all ways as very innocent and I'm not surprised she hasn't really been kissed. Seth is the perfect man for her as he isn't demanding but goes with the flow. It is so cute that Ace takes Molly out to potty.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Realist101
I am always impressed with your skills. Dialogue especially ! I think this is a great script too. Could be a daytime soap for sure! :D I'm sorry I can't keep up. I'm trying to do more. Very best to you with this really interesting storyline Barb! :)
ps...I despise gossip, but it's kinda human nature I guess. Some people tho take it too far!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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I am always impressed with your skills. Dialogue especially ! I think this is a great script too. Could be a daytime soap for sure! :D I'm sorry I can't keep up. I'm trying to do more. Very best to you with this really interesting storyline Barb! :)
ps...I despise gossip, but it's kinda human nature I guess. Some people tho take it too far!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement. I'm praying for you.
Comment from Jim Wile
It seems as though they've managed to patch things up between them, although Seth never really revealed what made him say what he did that she took offense to. I would like to have seen that resolved. I guess you're waiting on that a while.
They've hinted around at kissing, now maybe it will happen soon. Good chapter. - Jim
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"Or have you feel you needed to come to my rescue." (Perhaps "did you feel")?
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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It seems as though they've managed to patch things up between them, although Seth never really revealed what made him say what he did that she took offense to. I would like to have seen that resolved. I guess you're waiting on that a while.
They've hinted around at kissing, now maybe it will happen soon. Good chapter. - Jim
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"Or have you feel you needed to come to my rescue." (Perhaps "did you feel")?
Comment Written 16-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Seth's reasoning will come out slowly. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
I would think if Peggy know Emma adopted she would find a way to bring that to her attention since she wants to her her. It is hard to imagine her being so naive after attending college. Little towns where everone knows everone does mean there will be a lot of gossip.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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I would think if Peggy know Emma adopted she would find a way to bring that to her attention since she wants to her her. It is hard to imagine her being so naive after attending college. Little towns where everone knows everone does mean there will be a lot of gossip.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Emma went to a very strict, small, religious college.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Emma is so sweet and innocent, no wonder Seth wants to take care of her. I hate Peggy and I can't believe she gets away with abusing Emma. Peggy is a toxic person. I hope she'll get the message.
Another wonderful chapter. Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Emma is so sweet and innocent, no wonder Seth wants to take care of her. I hate Peggy and I can't believe she gets away with abusing Emma. Peggy is a toxic person. I hope she'll get the message.
Another wonderful chapter. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Peggy will get the message. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jmdg1954
I didn't see any needed changes. Everything seemed in order and with a logical flow. Good, honest to goodness dialogue and Emma coming out from her shell, if only for a bit.
Good chapter and we'll see to where it leads.
Have a good rest of your Sunday.
John
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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I didn't see any needed changes. Everything seemed in order and with a logical flow. Good, honest to goodness dialogue and Emma coming out from her shell, if only for a bit.
Good chapter and we'll see to where it leads.
Have a good rest of your Sunday.
John
Comment Written 16-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.