Four Horse Island
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Horse Number One"Marooned on an island with 4 horses and a goat
33 total reviews
Comment from estory
I thought you did a great job orchestrating this tense scene of the woman rescuing the nervous horse. The details in the descriptions of the nervous movements and neighing of the horse, as well as the surroundings, dark and dangerous, really set the mood. With just a girl and a horse, you created a riveting scene. And there is suspense too. We have to see if she gets the rest of them out. estory
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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I thought you did a great job orchestrating this tense scene of the woman rescuing the nervous horse. The details in the descriptions of the nervous movements and neighing of the horse, as well as the surroundings, dark and dangerous, really set the mood. With just a girl and a horse, you created a riveting scene. And there is suspense too. We have to see if she gets the rest of them out. estory
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Hi estory,
Thank you for the six stars and the encouraging comments about the writing. I appreciate the detailed analysis.
Debi
Comment from Loren .
As someone who has been blessed to be around these magnificent animals , you have done an excellent job of describing their behavior and how important it is for them to see you as their confident leader. Regardless of how you might feel. Trouble is, and a blessing, too, is that they quickly pick up on our emotions. Your descriptions are top drawer and it was easy to identify and sense the scene. Loren
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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As someone who has been blessed to be around these magnificent animals , you have done an excellent job of describing their behavior and how important it is for them to see you as their confident leader. Regardless of how you might feel. Trouble is, and a blessing, too, is that they quickly pick up on our emotions. Your descriptions are top drawer and it was easy to identify and sense the scene. Loren
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Hi Loren,
Thank you for the six stars and the gracious comments about the writing to go with them. I appreciate your comments about horses, too. They are wonderful animals. By the way, I love the hat.
Debi
Comment from JT traveller
I adore horses and this is a wonderful story. Well composed and engaging. The language and dialogue are very realistic. A thoroughly enjoyable read. Jacqueline xx
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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I adore horses and this is a wonderful story. Well composed and engaging. The language and dialogue are very realistic. A thoroughly enjoyable read. Jacqueline xx
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Hi Jacqueline,
Thank you for the kind comments about the writing. It means a lot coming from a horse lover.
Debi
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I love the way you teach us about horses, while weaving your story. How did you learn so much about them?
You made a great plan to get the horse out, and, literally walked us through the first rescue.
I can't wait to see your plans for getting the others. I have a feeling you won't find them all as easy to free.
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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I love the way you teach us about horses, while weaving your story. How did you learn so much about them?
You made a great plan to get the horse out, and, literally walked us through the first rescue.
I can't wait to see your plans for getting the others. I have a feeling you won't find them all as easy to free.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Hi Rhonda,
Thank you for the six stars and the encouraging comments.
I grew up with horses. I also worked on a horse breeding farm during summers while I attended college. We went to a lot of horse shows and competitions.
Thank you for saying you want to read more. You have me smileing.
Have a great day.
Debi
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You are quite welcome for the stars. They are richly deserved on all your work!
Comment from GWHARGIS
This is a really fascinating story you have here. I like that you aren't just regurgitating facts about horses. You really know them and that comes through loud and clear. I am wondering where the people went. I know her first priority is taking care of the animals but I'm getting nervous for her. Great job. Gretchen
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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This is a really fascinating story you have here. I like that you aren't just regurgitating facts about horses. You really know them and that comes through loud and clear. I am wondering where the people went. I know her first priority is taking care of the animals but I'm getting nervous for her. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Hi Gretchen,
Thank you so much for the six stars. I appreciate your reaction to the story and your kind comments about the writing. Thank you for your concern about Ava. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review. Thank you for the encouragement.
Debi
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No problem
Comment from Spitfire
Excellent blow-by-blow description of Ava's struggle to move Horse Number One off the ship and to safety. I also enjoy reading the reaction of the horse.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Excellent blow-by-blow description of Ava's struggle to move Horse Number One off the ship and to safety. I also enjoy reading the reaction of the horse.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Hi Shari,
Thank you for letting me know what you enjoyed about the story. It helps to know what works. I appreciate you following the story.
Debi
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is very interesting. I missed the beginning, but your writing is clear enough to not confuse the reader. Ava was fortunately brave enough to take on the rescue of the four horses. Not everyone could do that. With a goat for a companion to at least one of the horses, Ave should be able to keep them close to her as goats aren't great wanderers and one of the horses is probably attached to the goat.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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This is very interesting. I missed the beginning, but your writing is clear enough to not confuse the reader. Ava was fortunately brave enough to take on the rescue of the four horses. Not everyone could do that. With a goat for a companion to at least one of the horses, Ave should be able to keep them close to her as goats aren't great wanderers and one of the horses is probably attached to the goat.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Hi Carol Hillebrenner,
I'm happy to hear you enjoyed this chapter and appreciate the kind comments about the writing. Yes, the horses are lucky they have someone to rescue them. Thank you for stopping by to read and review.
Debi
Comment from Jim Wile
Ava definitely has experience and a good way with horses, and they seem to sense that as well. She planned their escape route well and the first one is up without a hitch. She may have even guessed his name correctly!
This is very interesting, as I know very little about horses except for the few things my daughter taught me when she was a young teen and taking riding lessons. That was quite a while ago, though. I'm enjoying this story a great deal, debi.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Ava definitely has experience and a good way with horses, and they seem to sense that as well. She planned their escape route well and the first one is up without a hitch. She may have even guessed his name correctly!
This is very interesting, as I know very little about horses except for the few things my daughter taught me when she was a young teen and taking riding lessons. That was quite a while ago, though. I'm enjoying this story a great deal, debi.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Hi Jim Wile,
Thank you for the kind comments about the writing. Thank you for letting me know about your daughter. I bet she loved her riding lessons. Most kids do. I'm glad you are enjoying the story so far. I appreciate the encouragement.
Debi
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Yes, she did. She started with western, then switched to English with all the necessary clothes, then took dressage for a couple of seasons. Until she was about 13, she wanted to be a vet, but then she started playing the clarinet, and that soon became her passion, surpassing even horses.
I can remember her quizzing me on things she had learned and taught me, like, "What's the name of the type of knot commonly used in horseback riding?" I even remembered the answer: a latigo knot.
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Great memory.
Funny, I played the clarinet but in my case, the horse won.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. I couldn't find any way to improve this post. It's very well written and I can't wait to see if the other horses behave as well. I'm pretty sure the goat will be the problem. LOL
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Thank you for sharing this with us. I couldn't find any way to improve this post. It's very well written and I can't wait to see if the other horses behave as well. I'm pretty sure the goat will be the problem. LOL
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Hi Barbara Wilkey,
Thank you for the analysis and encouraging comments. Love your thoughts about the goat.
Have a wonderful day.
Debi
Comment from Sally Law
Lovely story and inspiration for the horse's name, Apollo. I'm glad number one disembarked without a hitch. Wonderfully told and illustrated, Debi!
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Lovely story and inspiration for the horse's name, Apollo. I'm glad number one disembarked without a hitch. Wonderfully told and illustrated, Debi!
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Hi Sal,
Thank you for the kind comments about the story. I'm glad you liked the naming of Apollo. Thank you for your best wishes.
Thank you for stopping by to read and review. Have a wonderful day.
Debi