2023 Gypsy's Free Verse
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Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
I had a chuckle to myself as I read down through the verses... here I was, being taken in by the ethereal feel as if in a dream state of sounds and senses... but then those creepy tree shadows came in and woke me up and I started to think... what if, just what if, that's how you travel and transverse the night?
A couple of times now I have thought someone had been touching me while I was sleeping... hmmmmmmm?
You painted this scene with the craft of the wordsmith that you are.
Windows' open, welcome anytime:)
With our thoughts we create...
the soft touch of darkness.
Warm regards,
James.
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Hi MariVal,
I had a chuckle to myself as I read down through the verses... here I was, being taken in by the ethereal feel as if in a dream state of sounds and senses... but then those creepy tree shadows came in and woke me up and I started to think... what if, just what if, that's how you travel and transverse the night?
A couple of times now I have thought someone had been touching me while I was sleeping... hmmmmmmm?
You painted this scene with the craft of the wordsmith that you are.
Windows' open, welcome anytime:)
With our thoughts we create...
the soft touch of darkness.
Warm regards,
James.
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Hahaha... Tonight I wrote two poems from the man's pov ... I don't know why. I try not to take myself too seriously, when you least expect it my silliness will get you, so watch out. I guess it could be from a woman's pov too, in that case...
It's so good to hear from you, James. It makes me happy for two reasons, one more selfish than the other. I enjoy your reviews.. your exceptional insightful reviews; the other reason because you must feel better.
Good night ... or good morning in your neck of the woods :)
Gypsy
"We are not meant to be perfect, we are meant to be whole." - Oprah Winfrey
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I wait with bated breath for your silliness... I also have my moments and it makes me laugh inside at knowing I'm acting the goat, but I love to evoke and provoke laughter, or at very least, put a smile on someone's face.
So now I am creeped out, a male you say? And here I was resigned to the fact it was a female touching me while I sleep... yes, I could accept that!
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LoL sorry about that. For you, it's a woman. Are you less creeped out?
I like the Twilight movies. It's a vampire love story. The vampire watches his lover while she sleeps. I thought it was romantic but my daughter said it was creepy. I guess all is in the eye of the beholder.
MariVal
?Smile, breathe and go slowly.? ? Thich Nhat Hanh
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Ahhh, yes! More so it feels like a females touch, and then to think it's actually a man... thanks for changing the narrative for me:)
Yes, I loved that series... I love vampires. Hmmmm, well I don't actually love vampires, more so the stories and movie element of the blood sucking creatures.
I'm smiling, breathing and no worries about me going slowly, if I was any slower, I'd be going backwards.
Jumbo Hugs!
James.
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"I have crossed oceans of time to find you" -Bram Stoker's Dracula
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?I knew I was a little different from most demons but nothing says freak of nature like a one-eyed gypsy saying I had a rainbow glow. It just didn't sound complimentary.?
― Mary Abshire, Claiming the Evil Dead
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hahaha... hey! I have two eyes, thank you :) cool quote, is that from the 'evil dead' movie?
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Comment from GWHARGIS
This had the supernatural feel to it. You might not have intended it to but it's how I felt reading it. You creeping in with the moonbeam. While one sleeps, vulnerable and unawares, you could do most anything. Great poem. Gretchen
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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This had the supernatural feel to it. You might not have intended it to but it's how I felt reading it. You creeping in with the moonbeam. While one sleeps, vulnerable and unawares, you could do most anything. Great poem. Gretchen
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Gretchen, I added the creepy trees for a laugh, sometimes I am silly like that. But I do love horror. I appreciate your insightful review. Take care, my friend.
Gypsy