Dazzling darkness
A free Verse Poem44 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
Happy New Year, my friend! Great to see you writing. I loved your poem of the seafaring man in contemplative thought. I think deeply, it's something I have always done. I'm especially drawn to it at night and by the sea.
Beautifully written and illustrated poem. .
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal xo
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2024
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Happy New Year, my friend! Great to see you writing. I loved your poem of the seafaring man in contemplative thought. I think deeply, it's something I have always done. I'm especially drawn to it at night and by the sea.
Beautifully written and illustrated poem. .
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal xo
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2024
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Thank you Sal. I took a sabbatical from writing and had a new knee put in.
Comment from Julie Helms
Your words are evocative and effective. I felt like I was floating down the river between the rivers in the deep blue indigo with you. The last half, with the mention of the presence of God, almost felt like a near death experience, except In the indigo darkness not the bright light! Really beautiful imagery and strong emotion shines through. Thanks for sharing! Julie.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Your words are evocative and effective. I felt like I was floating down the river between the rivers in the deep blue indigo with you. The last half, with the mention of the presence of God, almost felt like a near death experience, except In the indigo darkness not the bright light! Really beautiful imagery and strong emotion shines through. Thanks for sharing! Julie.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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My sincere thank you!
Comment from John Ciarmello
Goodness, JLR!
I had no choice be to give you a six. This piece is far from the rewards of an extra star.
"Dazzling Darkness" is written with passion and a flare that can only be described as internally and externally elegant.
The notes did help with the opening lines. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Goodness, JLR!
I had no choice be to give you a six. This piece is far from the rewards of an extra star.
"Dazzling Darkness" is written with passion and a flare that can only be described as internally and externally elegant.
The notes did help with the opening lines. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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John,my gracious! My deepest thank you!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Good choice for the great revelation for the almighty: "Bringing me to my knees in adoration,
understanding that I am at one with God,
awash in the sea of dark indigo darkness." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Good choice for the great revelation for the almighty: "Bringing me to my knees in adoration,
understanding that I am at one with God,
awash in the sea of dark indigo darkness." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Iza, my sincere thank you for the good wishes!
Comment from Sanku
the endless darkness during the past midnight hours and occasional flashes of mild light takes you through a spiritual experience that is unique The realisation that there is a power above and we are nothing before him is humbling
You have very powerfully expressed that communion with well chosen words..All the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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the endless darkness during the past midnight hours and occasional flashes of mild light takes you through a spiritual experience that is unique The realisation that there is a power above and we are nothing before him is humbling
You have very powerfully expressed that communion with well chosen words..All the best for the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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Sanku, I am most humbled by your kindness and validation. thank you.
Comment from Aussie
The moon is a ghostly galleon, washed upon stormy seas. So says the poet. Every night I sit in my wheelchair, watch the heavens and see God. How wonderful is our God who created heaven and earth? In the stillness of night, peace, no sounds, all are sleeping; I speak to our Master of the Universe. Well done! K xx
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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The moon is a ghostly galleon, washed upon stormy seas. So says the poet. Every night I sit in my wheelchair, watch the heavens and see God. How wonderful is our God who created heaven and earth? In the stillness of night, peace, no sounds, all are sleeping; I speak to our Master of the Universe. Well done! K xx
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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K, thank you, I delight that even with restrictions placed before you you Claim your rightfully place as daughter of God and I admire your strength.
Comment from lyenochka
I am glad that what would seem a problem with insomnia turned to be a spiritual realization of the closeness of God and feeling a oneness with all His beautiful creation. Good to see you back!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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I am glad that what would seem a problem with insomnia turned to be a spiritual realization of the closeness of God and feeling a oneness with all His beautiful creation. Good to see you back!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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My friend, thank you. I have missed being at the desk, to write. The total knee replacement three weeks ago went off without a hitch. Now I focus on PT to get range of motion back.
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Great that you got the knee replacement done! Hope your recovery is quick and smooth! 💖🙏
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very good artwork and presentation.
-Thanks for the notes.
-A well written poem with effective
imagery and repeating phrase.
-You do a good job capturing this scene.
-I can picture you sitting, trying to write
very early in the morning, feeling you are
"awash in a sea of deep indigo darkness."
-I like the reference to the canvas awash in indigo.
-A very good transition as you seem to hear a faint whisper,
and then you find the true meaning behind his whole experience.
-A very good entry; good luck!!
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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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-Very good artwork and presentation.
-Thanks for the notes.
-A well written poem with effective
imagery and repeating phrase.
-You do a good job capturing this scene.
-I can picture you sitting, trying to write
very early in the morning, feeling you are
"awash in a sea of deep indigo darkness."
-I like the reference to the canvas awash in indigo.
-A very good transition as you seem to hear a faint whisper,
and then you find the true meaning behind his whole experience.
-A very good entry; good luck!!
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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Hello dear friend and thank you, as always for your supportive comments.
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You are very welcome, good friend.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
"three bells past the midnight hour. My sight is awash in a sea of deep indigo darkness." You shower our senses with beautiful imagery.
Excellent entry for the Free Verse Poem contest.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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"three bells past the midnight hour. My sight is awash in a sea of deep indigo darkness." You shower our senses with beautiful imagery.
Excellent entry for the Free Verse Poem contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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Gypsy Blue Rose, I thank you for your validation.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem for the challenge. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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This is an excellent poem for the challenge. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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Alexandra, as always, I thank you.