Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

ooh a new site - poets collective - must check it out!

this was a great brevette suite

though "the undead" is 2 words -- so you may want to put in your notes that you're extending the noun lines
personally i think it's okay, cause sometimes you need that extra word with a noun lol

anyway, just thought i'd mention it in case you get a rule stickler LOL!

so you're a zombie fan, eh? the walking dead? my daughter loves that show - darryl is her fave. has a shirt with him on it lol.

good suite with good imagery and smooth flow
cool pics, too

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023

I am a horror genre lover zombies apocalypse is one of my favorites. I followed the walking dead series and the first seasons were better than the last. Maybe they should have stopped earlier.

28 days and World War Z are two of the better ones. But there are so many I tried.

I changed "the undead" to "undead" I had it that way but I thought it's supposed to be balanced, equal syllables top and bottom. I thought "The undead" was one unit.

Thank you for your help and review.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Hope the FAST people avoid getting eaten. We saw the play where our grandson was doing the tech support and it was Ten Ways to Survive the Zombie Apocalypse. The first way was to "sacrifice the vulnerable."

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 Comment Written 29-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023

Oh no.... that would be effective but cruel. But in the apocalypse is hard to survive. I'm glad your grandson is involved in theater....it's so much fun. My exhusband taught tech and set building in high-school so my kids were exposed to all of that.

Thank you, big sister. I hope Dean likes it. If there's an after life for ghosts he would hang around fanstory.... specially in Halloween. (*<>*)

Love

Marival

reply by lyenochka on 29-Oct-2023

Yes, I am sure that Dean is checking here. 😊💞

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

Not my cup of tea. But, I like it, because I like you. That's a pretty excellent zombie apocalypse poem, in my opinion. Your Author Note is helpful too. I hope all is well.

Alexan

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 Comment Written 29-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs