Guided by Faith
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Comment from lyenochka
Great post and I hope the young women out there know they can wait for the godly men who will honor them.
It's good that even that annoying Ronnie could help Seth and Emma realize that they have been dating as good friends and growing deeper in love.
Hope you and your family have a wonderful Christmas!! ð???ð???ð???ð??µð???
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Great post and I hope the young women out there know they can wait for the godly men who will honor them.
It's good that even that annoying Ronnie could help Seth and Emma realize that they have been dating as good friends and growing deeper in love.
Hope you and your family have a wonderful Christmas!! ð???ð???ð???ð??µð???
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
It's good as it is. A good ending, leading us to the edge of the cliff. They finally seem to be discussing their relationship more, although Emma needs ti speak up about her concerns rather than just going quiet and Seth having to guess. I guess it's all part of growing up. Would she really be offered a teaching position without official and accepted credentials? It must be very different in the US. Anyway it's a fine chapter.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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It's good as it is. A good ending, leading us to the edge of the cliff. They finally seem to be discussing their relationship more, although Emma needs ti speak up about her concerns rather than just going quiet and Seth having to guess. I guess it's all part of growing up. Would she really be offered a teaching position without official and accepted credentials? It must be very different in the US. Anyway it's a fine chapter.
Wendy
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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She has official credential, she just graded college with a teaching degree. It was at the beginning of the story.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Very interesting chapter! Poor Seth with his wound and who's the guy following? Very well written! I quite enjoyed it. Hopefully the scrabble playing isn't too hard on the guy lol. I see no issues with grammar subject matter sentence structure punctuation another fine entry by a fine writer! Have a great evening!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Very interesting chapter! Poor Seth with his wound and who's the guy following? Very well written! I quite enjoyed it. Hopefully the scrabble playing isn't too hard on the guy lol. I see no issues with grammar subject matter sentence structure punctuation another fine entry by a fine writer! Have a great evening!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from w.j.debi
Seth and Emma are finally calling it a date and admitting it might lead to more. Seth is starting to read Emma's moods quite well and learning to know when he needs to ask for details. They are developing into a couple who respect and appreciate each other.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Seth and Emma are finally calling it a date and admitting it might lead to more. Seth is starting to read Emma's moods quite well and learning to know when he needs to ask for details. They are developing into a couple who respect and appreciate each other.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I believe respect and appreciation are necessary for a lasting relationship.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You left us with a cliff hangar at the end of this story. I like your story so much. I feel like Emma's faith will get her through the year of teaching. I have to rethink . . . was Emma always a teacher aide or a teacher?
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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You left us with a cliff hangar at the end of this story. I like your story so much. I feel like Emma's faith will get her through the year of teaching. I have to rethink . . . was Emma always a teacher aide or a teacher?
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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She just graduated from college with a teaching and a social working degree. She was offered jobs but turned them down because they didn't feel right. Thank you for the kind reveiw.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I liked this chapter from start to finish. I like that they are getting more comfortable with each other in public. The cliff hanger at the end now has me waiting with baited breath. Another stellar chapter here. Gretchen
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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I liked this chapter from start to finish. I like that they are getting more comfortable with each other in public. The cliff hanger at the end now has me waiting with baited breath. Another stellar chapter here. Gretchen
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. If you remember a few posts back to that Monday, you'll know what Seth has to tell her.
Comment from Ric Myworld
So many times in life we'd love for things to remain the same, but that just isn't realistic. Everything changes and as time moved forward, we just have to do whatever it takes to make things better. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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So many times in life we'd love for things to remain the same, but that just isn't realistic. Everything changes and as time moved forward, we just have to do whatever it takes to make things better. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the understanding.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Another great relational development chapter. I was wondering if they'd go on a real date.
Couple of structural suggestions. I do read a lot ( few books a week) and am just pointing out where I got tripped up or had to stop to reread:
Seth's phone rang and he exhaled as he answered.
(Used exhaled twice in short period. Was Noticeable)
"That makes sense. I've dated but a little but nothing serious. I'm new at this relationship thing."
(Change a 'but'. Made the sentence read odd)
Emma ordered and then Seth ordered.
(Wordy. They ordered or ordered first or something like that)
Just my two cents.
Great chapter. I enjoyed the back and forth banter. Realistic.
D
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Another great relational development chapter. I was wondering if they'd go on a real date.
Couple of structural suggestions. I do read a lot ( few books a week) and am just pointing out where I got tripped up or had to stop to reread:
Seth's phone rang and he exhaled as he answered.
(Used exhaled twice in short period. Was Noticeable)
"That makes sense. I've dated but a little but nothing serious. I'm new at this relationship thing."
(Change a 'but'. Made the sentence read odd)
Emma ordered and then Seth ordered.
(Wordy. They ordered or ordered first or something like that)
Just my two cents.
Great chapter. I enjoyed the back and forth banter. Realistic.
D
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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I appreciate the help. I made the changes. That exactly why I post, I want the help. No matter how much I edit, I still miss things. Thank you so much!!!
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Yeah!!! Glad I could help. My grammar sucks but I can key in on structural Hiccups. Happy Holudays!
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I need that.
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a great chapter, Barbara. This first "official" date has been building for a long time, and it's nice to see both of them acknowledge it for what it was. We got to see some real emotion and some good interaction between the two without any apparent awkwardness. Both seemed willing to discuss their age difference now in a calm, rational manner. Heck, even Ace and Molly had some alone time together!
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The editing was very good. I only noticed a few places where commas were either unnecessary or missing:
Emma started to walk toward Seth, but paused and went to Mr. Matthews - no comma needed
She started to say something, but the waitress, Sally yelled, "Emma! I'd heard you're back." - comma needed after Sally.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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This was a great chapter, Barbara. This first "official" date has been building for a long time, and it's nice to see both of them acknowledge it for what it was. We got to see some real emotion and some good interaction between the two without any apparent awkwardness. Both seemed willing to discuss their age difference now in a calm, rational manner. Heck, even Ace and Molly had some alone time together!
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The editing was very good. I only noticed a few places where commas were either unnecessary or missing:
Emma started to walk toward Seth, but paused and went to Mr. Matthews - no comma needed
She started to say something, but the waitress, Sally yelled, "Emma! I'd heard you're back." - comma needed after Sally.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the comma corrections. I struggle with commas. I do the most comma areas, but the others, I mess up. I appreciate the help.
Comment from tfawcus
As always, a carefully edited and proofread chapter. The dialogue is natural. The plot progresses smoothly.
Please don't take offence, but I find your constant references to food and descriptions of what your characters are eating tends to draw me out of the plot. It's your story, of course, but it's something you might like to consider.
One other small thing. I think that, although Guinea pig is capitalised for the rodent, I don't think it is when used to describe someone being experimented upon.
Rest assured I have the greatest respect for your writing skill. I hope you don't mind me making the observation about the food. I'm just calling it as I see it.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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As always, a carefully edited and proofread chapter. The dialogue is natural. The plot progresses smoothly.
Please don't take offence, but I find your constant references to food and descriptions of what your characters are eating tends to draw me out of the plot. It's your story, of course, but it's something you might like to consider.
One other small thing. I think that, although Guinea pig is capitalised for the rodent, I don't think it is when used to describe someone being experimented upon.
Rest assured I have the greatest respect for your writing skill. I hope you don't mind me making the observation about the food. I'm just calling it as I see it.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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I try to make the relationship common so eating on a date is common. I will rethink and see if I can come up with something else. I didn't go into any detail, other than dipping a chip. I'll think about it.