What We See
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Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You move the story along nicely. David definitely could not keep working at that school. I am looking forward to the next chapter to see what David decides. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. You move the story along nicely. David definitely could not keep working at that school. I am looking forward to the next chapter to see what David decides. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much. Is your name Elizabeth? Eliza? Something else? I like to call people by their names if they care to share them.
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I have been called Lee since before I could talk. Thanks for asking.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Daviid had a hard visit, I know when I visited my dad it was. You did a good job describing it. It rang very true. You expressed the love and the frustration. This is a good write.
where we sat down to talk. (you can omit 'down' it's understood)
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Daviid had a hard visit, I know when I visited my dad it was. You did a good job describing it. It rang very true. You expressed the love and the frustration. This is a good write.
where we sat down to talk. (you can omit 'down' it's understood)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Barbara. Although my mother spent the last few months of her life in a memory care unit, it wasn't due to memory problems, but she needed the level of care they provided. I did, however, witness several of the behaviors I wrote about, including his dad standing with the group of administrators. I saw one old guy, who was a retired admiral, doing just that. It was humorous, but sad in a way. I also saw the former mayor of Lansing, Michigan there too. He was pretty far gone.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well, I'm now wondering what the plan is and this is intriguing me. This is an excellent chapter, Jim. I like the way you tie up the loose ends and drive your story forward with David's methodical approach to his current position. Clearly devastated by events, he's got strength of character, not simply to collapse under the weight of this. The interlude with the father might be a way of extending this theme of mental confusion, perhaps a worry for David that his dyslexia might progress unless properly challenged. Love it now we're back on track. All expressed in your prose style which I enjoy so much. Thanks, Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Well, I'm now wondering what the plan is and this is intriguing me. This is an excellent chapter, Jim. I like the way you tie up the loose ends and drive your story forward with David's methodical approach to his current position. Clearly devastated by events, he's got strength of character, not simply to collapse under the weight of this. The interlude with the father might be a way of extending this theme of mental confusion, perhaps a worry for David that his dyslexia might progress unless properly challenged. Love it now we're back on track. All expressed in your prose style which I enjoy so much. Thanks, Debbie
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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What a wonderful review, Debbie. Thank you so much. I think you are getting a feel for the title of the book with your comments.
I think there will be a few surprises in store as the story progresses. I've written about 20,000 words already, of which I've only posted 9,000 so far, and I think it's maybe only 25% done. Long way to go still.
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Excellent. I'll enjoy. You're so prolific, Jim:)
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We'll see how this compares to Saving Mr. Calvin. That one was 93,000 words--about the length of a 325 page hardcover book.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
This is an interesting sidebar, and more than likely will play into the story eventually. In the meantime, what is it that David will be doing? Maybe he'll construct a miniature golf course?
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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This is an interesting sidebar, and more than likely will play into the story eventually. In the meantime, what is it that David will be doing? Maybe he'll construct a miniature golf course?
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Ah-ha, you've nailed it, Tom. Not only that, but he'll become a putting coach and teach a number of PGA tour players eventually. See? He won't be giving up teaching after all!
Comment from jmdg1954
I found the interaction of David and his dad very realistic. My wife and I went through this with her mother. She lived with us for 13 years after her husband died and we watched her diminish over the years, until we had to put her in a nursing home.
Back to your book... this was a good chapter which for the most part took us away from the crux of the story allowing us to see more of David.
Good deal! Looking forward to the next chapter and development.
John
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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I found the interaction of David and his dad very realistic. My wife and I went through this with her mother. She lived with us for 13 years after her husband died and we watched her diminish over the years, until we had to put her in a nursing home.
Back to your book... this was a good chapter which for the most part took us away from the crux of the story allowing us to see more of David.
Good deal! Looking forward to the next chapter and development.
John
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Hopefully it's justified why David feels compelled to stay as least close to where his dad is. You'll soon see the effect of this on his plan for the future.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Okay, then. David has a plan. We just don't know it yet.
I remember '85. A tornado blew our house away with us in it. We got our first home computer, a Tandy from Radio Shack. Everything was MS-DOS, and PC compatibility was an issue.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Okay, then. David has a plan. We just don't know it yet.
I remember '85. A tornado blew our house away with us in it. We got our first home computer, a Tandy from Radio Shack. Everything was MS-DOS, and PC compatibility was an issue.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Oh, no! Did your house go flying up into the tornado like in The Wizard of Oz?
I got my first home computer right about then too. It was a Tandy too. I was a programmer then and wrote a lot of programs on it. We had Microsoft Word also in its very rudimentary form and used it for word processing quite early on. Beat typing on a typewriter. What did you use your computer for?
Home computers will play a significant part in this story.
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I don't remember the first word processor, but i liked Word Perfect best.
We used it for writing and for the kids school projects. (Very few games)
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Same here. Never bought any games until much later when I purchased an Arnold Palmer golf game, a bridge game, a flight simulator, and a rollercoaster designer game for my son. A few simple games came with some of the computes we've had over the years, though, like a gorilla bombarding buildings with bananas.
Comment from Navada
There is so much to love about David and such a crappy situation he finds himself in. I really hope he's able to pivot to something else he can do in the meantime, but I really, really hope teaching isn't done with him yet. He may not be able to afford a PI, but something may intervene? I'm keen to keep reading! :)
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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There is so much to love about David and such a crappy situation he finds himself in. I really hope he's able to pivot to something else he can do in the meantime, but I really, really hope teaching isn't done with him yet. He may not be able to afford a PI, but something may intervene? I'm keen to keep reading! :)
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Navada. Yeah, he's been screwed over for sure. But you know the old saying, "When one door closes, another opens." We'll see what happens when he goes through.
Comment from Wendy G
Dementia is such a sad situation - I think the relatives suffer the most. It's hard to watch a loved parent going downhill like that. The way you portray David and his feelings, confusion re what to do next, and self-esteem issues is very authentic. Great story. Well done.
Wendy
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Dementia is such a sad situation - I think the relatives suffer the most. It's hard to watch a loved parent going downhill like that. The way you portray David and his feelings, confusion re what to do next, and self-esteem issues is very authentic. Great story. Well done.
Wendy
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much, Wendy, for your kind remarks. In many cases, I think you're right. David's dad seems happy enough, though confused. Many Alzheimer's patients are that way, but there are some who go through a personality change and become mean and ornery, where in life they weren't that way. Those folks may be suffering.