Guided by Faith
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Comment from Ric Myworld
It's always nice to read about what seem like real people from a real world, nice and decent people. It seems like most things I read or watch on television these days are all hard core. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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It's always nice to read about what seem like real people from a real world, nice and decent people. It seems like most things I read or watch on television these days are all hard core. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the support and encouragement.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I am curious as to why Emma can't eat, and why the boys got drunk on a week morning. Niether makes sense. I like your stories and will keep reading. Karen
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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I am curious as to why Emma can't eat, and why the boys got drunk on a week morning. Niether makes sense. I like your stories and will keep reading. Karen
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Emma's too heartbroken to eat. Many people handle grief that way. As for the boys, we'll find out soon. Thank you for the kind review.
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Okay, that makes sense. His death was an out of the blue shock. Karen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a sensitive time for both Susan and Emma following Keith's death and Seth seems to be walking on egg shells to do the best he can for her in the circumstances. A new development with these teenagers which could prove fruitful. Small edit: I haven't asked how your gunshot's healing ( no apostrophe 's' after 'how'); God give me the words (ease to) - reverse.
Another excellent chapter, Barbara. Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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This is a sensitive time for both Susan and Emma following Keith's death and Seth seems to be walking on egg shells to do the best he can for her in the circumstances. A new development with these teenagers which could prove fruitful. Small edit: I haven't asked how your gunshot's healing ( no apostrophe 's' after 'how'); God give me the words (ease to) - reverse.
Another excellent chapter, Barbara. Debbie
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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I have made those corrections. Thank you for the help and the kind review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Emma is very much like her mother - just an observation, as I assume you meant for this to be.
God, give me the words ease to her pain. Switch "to" and "ease".
You okay with every happening tomorrow? Do you mean "everything" happening?
Everybody sure eats a lot round here. Maybe "around" or " 'round"
outback should be "out back" in this case
Are you going too? "to"
Now I'm wondering more about the boys in the abandoned house than I am about what will happen to Seth and Emma! You threw a curve ball at us, Barbara.
We'll find out next week. Until then . . .
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Emma is very much like her mother - just an observation, as I assume you meant for this to be.
God, give me the words ease to her pain. Switch "to" and "ease".
You okay with every happening tomorrow? Do you mean "everything" happening?
Everybody sure eats a lot round here. Maybe "around" or " 'round"
outback should be "out back" in this case
Are you going too? "to"
Now I'm wondering more about the boys in the abandoned house than I am about what will happen to Seth and Emma! You threw a curve ball at us, Barbara.
We'll find out next week. Until then . . .
xo
Pam
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the help, again. I honestly hate those little words. When I edit, I read, in my mind, as if those words are there. I really appreciate the help.
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We all appreciate the help:-)
Comment from Jim Wile
Very sweet chapter, Barbara. I love Seth's transformation from bossy instruction-giver to patient listener, which both of them realize he has become. He has become much more sensitive as their relationship has developed. Emma, however, has not really grown that much, and still has a way to go to achieve the maturity of adulthood. She has a quiet inner strength to her, but I'd like to see a fiery side to her at some point. It would be cool if she were the one to initiate their first kiss.
Throughout, I'd love to hear more of the characters' inner thoughts. For example, if Pastor Pat was starting to bug her with his hovering, it would be nice to hear her think this thought and be torn by it because she loves him so, but he's bugging her. We have to guess so much about what she's thinking, but perhaps we could understand her a little better if we could hear her thoughts. That's why I love writing in first person--because there are many opportunities to do just that, but it can also be effectively done in third person stories. I believe it gives more depth to a character and doesn't leave so much guesswork to the reader who may form wrong opinions.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Very sweet chapter, Barbara. I love Seth's transformation from bossy instruction-giver to patient listener, which both of them realize he has become. He has become much more sensitive as their relationship has developed. Emma, however, has not really grown that much, and still has a way to go to achieve the maturity of adulthood. She has a quiet inner strength to her, but I'd like to see a fiery side to her at some point. It would be cool if she were the one to initiate their first kiss.
Throughout, I'd love to hear more of the characters' inner thoughts. For example, if Pastor Pat was starting to bug her with his hovering, it would be nice to hear her think this thought and be torn by it because she loves him so, but he's bugging her. We have to guess so much about what she's thinking, but perhaps we could understand her a little better if we could hear her thoughts. That's why I love writing in first person--because there are many opportunities to do just that, but it can also be effectively done in third person stories. I believe it gives more depth to a character and doesn't leave so much guesswork to the reader who may form wrong opinions.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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I will consider your suggestions. Some readers have felt Emma is growing. We'll wait and see. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a very good chapter about the aftermath of Keith's death. Grief is very personal and I like that both Susan and Emma are handling it differently. Two spags. A misplaced quotation mark before Before long ...
Also missing comma in front of Are you going , too? Anyway, great chapter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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This was a very good chapter about the aftermath of Keith's death. Grief is very personal and I like that both Susan and Emma are handling it differently. Two spags. A misplaced quotation mark before Before long ...
Also missing comma in front of Are you going , too? Anyway, great chapter. Gretchen
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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I will search those places out. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Another good read. Still sadness around and maybe for a while, yet. A few spags this time for some strange reason.the words (to)ease [to] her
with every(thing) happening tomorrow?"
"Are you going (to,) too?"
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Another good read. Still sadness around and maybe for a while, yet. A few spags this time for some strange reason.the words (to)ease [to] her
with every(thing) happening tomorrow?"
"Are you going (to,) too?"
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jmdg1954
Barbara.
A solid chapter, now with another twist with these 5 teenage boys and 2 girls. It could be nothing with the story other then Seth doing his job a chief of police.
I felt signs f Emma growing a bit, but now I'm not sure.
Solid, with many questions to be answered in the next few chapters.
John
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Barbara.
A solid chapter, now with another twist with these 5 teenage boys and 2 girls. It could be nothing with the story other then Seth doing his job a chief of police.
I felt signs f Emma growing a bit, but now I'm not sure.
Solid, with many questions to be answered in the next few chapters.
John
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Death doesn't happen in a vacuum. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
A well-developed chapter. It seems they have known each other much longer - so much has happened during the time frame! They are certainly well-suited to each other.
Wendy
Edits: God, give me the words ease to her pain. (to ease)
"Are you going too?" (to?)
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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A well-developed chapter. It seems they have known each other much longer - so much has happened during the time frame! They are certainly well-suited to each other.
Wendy
Edits: God, give me the words ease to her pain. (to ease)
"Are you going too?" (to?)
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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I have made those corrections. Thank you for the help and the kind review.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very nice chapter, Barb. I hope Emma doesn't end up with an eating disorder. Looks like we are going to have an interesting situation with the teenagers.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Very nice chapter, Barb. I hope Emma doesn't end up with an eating disorder. Looks like we are going to have an interesting situation with the teenagers.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thank you for kind review. Yes, death doesn't happen in a vacuum.