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Now that is real FLASH fiction!28 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hahaha, maybe you have a warped sense of humour as well. It absolutely served him right. Put him in his place l would say. All the best of luck
In the contest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Hahaha, maybe you have a warped sense of humour as well. It absolutely served him right. Put him in his place l would say. All the best of luck
In the contest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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This came out funny!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, I love this unexpected turn of events here Douglas, great sense of humour and I arrested a guy once for this very offence! He was flashing in the park and I couldn't stop giggling, I loved your funny story, love Dolly x x x x
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Ha ha ha, I love this unexpected turn of events here Douglas, great sense of humour and I arrested a guy once for this very offence! He was flashing in the park and I couldn't stop giggling, I loved your funny story, love Dolly x x x x
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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I arrested a completely naked man once. Ha! I think we all have a story!
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Ha ha ha x x x
Comment from Spitfire
A fun twist although I found the opening sentence awkward. Maybe: He quickened his pace, excitement building below his waist. The woman in front of him quickened her steps.
You can make a couple other changes for the word count. For example delete 'Hey'.
Aside from that I love the twist at the end. Also the expression 'raging manhood'. Six inches isn't very big. So wonder the transgender could show off their jewels and win. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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A fun twist although I found the opening sentence awkward. Maybe: He quickened his pace, excitement building below his waist. The woman in front of him quickened her steps.
You can make a couple other changes for the word count. For example delete 'Hey'.
Aside from that I love the twist at the end. Also the expression 'raging manhood'. Six inches isn't very big. So wonder the transgender could show off their jewels and win. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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I never liked that first sentence. Never I say! I shall revisit it and doodle it.
By the way, you just made half the men on this site grimace when you said "six inches isn?t very big". Supposedly that is average so I went with that so the perv could be properly shamed! Okay, as you can see, I am having way to much fun with this one.
Douglas
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Glad you made the changes. Next time I have a lover I'll take out my tape measure LOL
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Ha! Let?s hope you do not need to! 😜
Comment from Liz O'Neill
That certainly was a twist of a plot. He may have learned something that he's been going to decide he's not even going to do that stuff again. How is one good way to knock a pervert down.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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That certainly was a twist of a plot. He may have learned something that he's been going to decide he's not even going to do that stuff again. How is one good way to knock a pervert down.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Liz. It is nice to have the pervert get his for once!
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***Sigh***
Comment from Faith Williams
Oh my, Douglas, I couldn't stop laughing! Your word choices are hilarious, and the twist even more so. Excellent entry for the contest! Hopefully the judges have a sense of humor.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Oh my, Douglas, I couldn't stop laughing! Your word choices are hilarious, and the twist even more so. Excellent entry for the contest! Hopefully the judges have a sense of humor.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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I can tell you that I still laugh every time. Read this. Ha!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction contest.
LoL she showed him. LoL I like your good humor about a transvestite and a pervert.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Excellent entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction contest.
LoL she showed him. LoL I like your good humor about a transvestite and a pervert.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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She learnt him good! Ha!
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, dang it! Don't you just hate it when that happens? That may be enough for the trench coat to go back in the closet forever. But in the real world, the guy would sue the woman/man for disillusionment, trauma, and mental anguish. He would probably win a million-dollar lawsuit. Then, he would buy a cashmere trench coat and annoy ladies of high society in Boston. Well done, Terry.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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LOL, dang it! Don't you just hate it when that happens? That may be enough for the trench coat to go back in the closet forever. But in the real world, the guy would sue the woman/man for disillusionment, trauma, and mental anguish. He would probably win a million-dollar lawsuit. Then, he would buy a cashmere trench coat and annoy ladies of high society in Boston. Well done, Terry.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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If you didn?t laugh at this one your funny bone is broken. Cracked me up, hard. 😉
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Douglas, you do know how much I hate to correct you. But the last word of your comment is...too frigging funny, given the context!! Terry.
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I knew you would get it.
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LOL, you use "bone, cracked, hard" about a flasher!!!
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There is just way too much to work with here?..
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LOL
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well, you never cease to shock and delight, Doug, that's for sure! And this one doesn't disappoint and crafted so succinctly. Humorous and cathartic for all those who like to see the flasher get his comeuppance (if you'll excuse the expression!) Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Well, you never cease to shock and delight, Doug, that's for sure! And this one doesn't disappoint and crafted so succinctly. Humorous and cathartic for all those who like to see the flasher get his comeuppance (if you'll excuse the expression!) Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Ha! This one really made me laugh. Probably a bit inappropriate, but still so funny.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this very creative contest entry with us. I never expected the twist at the end. OH MY!!! You have all the required elements of a story, character, setting, plot, and solution. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for sharing this very creative contest entry with us. I never expected the twist at the end. OH MY!!! You have all the required elements of a story, character, setting, plot, and solution. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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I pushed the envelope here a tad. Ha!
Comment from Madeleine Mardis
D., I love, love, love this!!! So succinct, so funny, and so respectful, it seems to me! What a brilliant writer you are! I must read this to my husband when he gets home from work! Maddy
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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D., I love, love, love this!!! So succinct, so funny, and so respectful, it seems to me! What a brilliant writer you are! I must read this to my husband when he gets home from work! Maddy
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks you. You are a kind, warm person. Appreciate you!