Willing Hearts
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Chapter 13 A"Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?
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Comment from T B Botts
Hello Barbara,
that was an unexpected turn of events with Sami's mom. Things like that make a story interesting, a little side bar so to speak. Sometimes I wonder if Noah doesn't overdue his role a bit as a protector. I wonder if he's ever found himself in love before. I'm curious what is happening with the bad guys, and if the good guys are going to be able to recover any of the girls who have been basically sold into the sex trade. Another interesting chapter gal. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Hello Barbara,
that was an unexpected turn of events with Sami's mom. Things like that make a story interesting, a little side bar so to speak. Sometimes I wonder if Noah doesn't overdue his role a bit as a protector. I wonder if he's ever found himself in love before. I'm curious what is happening with the bad guys, and if the good guys are going to be able to recover any of the girls who have been basically sold into the sex trade. Another interesting chapter gal. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. More about Noah's background will become known when he's ready to talk.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Risky business.
. "I think it's blackberry cobbler time. Anybody agree?"
Is this an offer cause I'm ready for some cobbler. Just saying.
The line about hospitals are so true. On my watches they wake these felons up all night long.
Great read!
D
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Risky business.
. "I think it's blackberry cobbler time. Anybody agree?"
Is this an offer cause I'm ready for some cobbler. Just saying.
The line about hospitals are so true. On my watches they wake these felons up all night long.
Great read!
D
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. While on vacation, by son, Jeff, he's a chef, made blackberry cobbler and served it with homemade vanilla ice cream. Either by themselves would have been great, but together. Needless to say I have a couple pounds to take off. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
A very well written chapter as always, and I am glad Sami had a chance to see her mother. I hope the visit wasn't observed by others who would do her harm!
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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A very well written chapter as always, and I am glad Sami had a chance to see her mother. I hope the visit wasn't observed by others who would do her harm!
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a great chapter with a lot of heart as Noah breaks the rules to let Sami see her injured mother. Sami's father has a special place for her in his heart and their closeness is realistically portrayed. Pulling open the door and setting off the alarm sounds about par for a middle of the night return.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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This is a great chapter with a lot of heart as Noah breaks the rules to let Sami see her injured mother. Sami's father has a special place for her in his heart and their closeness is realistically portrayed. Pulling open the door and setting off the alarm sounds about par for a middle of the night return.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Barbara
It must take so much discipline to write a novel. I can see the discipline it took just to write this chapter. I normally write poetry and it's a little bit easier.
This chapter gave me a better feel of interaction between the characters. I don't think I got the impression before this chapter that Sami was being guarded by all these people. So you did a good job bringing that out in this chapter
I'm curious to see where this budding romance is going to go between Sami and Noah
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Hi, Barbara
It must take so much discipline to write a novel. I can see the discipline it took just to write this chapter. I normally write poetry and it's a little bit easier.
This chapter gave me a better feel of interaction between the characters. I don't think I got the impression before this chapter that Sami was being guarded by all these people. So you did a good job bringing that out in this chapter
I'm curious to see where this budding romance is going to go between Sami and Noah
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. With research and everything, it takes a couple of years to actually complete a novel.
Comment from Paul McFarland
That was a good idea, Barb, to have a change of pace. This adds a new dimension to the story, and gives the reader something new to think about.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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That was a good idea, Barb, to have a change of pace. This adds a new dimension to the story, and gives the reader something new to think about.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well this is action-packed from the start! I like the way you maintain that sense of mystery and tension so that the reader is anxious to know how poorly Sami's mother is. With some relief when her condition isn't life-threatening. The attention to detail with the escort is also well done. Once back in the house, Noah returns to his more professional self, refusing to get drawn into any discussion with Sami about their intimacy. Then the alarm going off at the end is a great artistic device not to allow the tension of the chapter to dissipate. Nicely done, Barbara! Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Well this is action-packed from the start! I like the way you maintain that sense of mystery and tension so that the reader is anxious to know how poorly Sami's mother is. With some relief when her condition isn't life-threatening. The attention to detail with the escort is also well done. Once back in the house, Noah returns to his more professional self, refusing to get drawn into any discussion with Sami about their intimacy. Then the alarm going off at the end is a great artistic device not to allow the tension of the chapter to dissipate. Nicely done, Barbara! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from patcelaw
This is beautifully written and I enjoyed listening to it very much. You have presented it in a lovely manner you have used good paragraphing good sentence structure and your overall presentation is very good. Patricia .
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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This is beautifully written and I enjoyed listening to it very much. You have presented it in a lovely manner you have used good paragraphing good sentence structure and your overall presentation is very good. Patricia .
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
The story is doing a fine job of showing the crew's humanity. As tough as Noah is, he showed a tender and compassionate side in allowing Sami to visit with her mom and to see her dad at the hospital. This story has the feel of authenticity that a great story has to have in order to be successful.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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The story is doing a fine job of showing the crew's humanity. As tough as Noah is, he showed a tender and compassionate side in allowing Sami to visit with her mom and to see her dad at the hospital. This story has the feel of authenticity that a great story has to have in order to be successful.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Sami inadvertently trips the alarm and all hell, and all their weapons are out. Earlier an accident has happened to Sami's mum, and in a rare show of emotion Noah is caught out by Sarah, realising that he may not be as tough as he appears, well done Barbara blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Sami inadvertently trips the alarm and all hell, and all their weapons are out. Earlier an accident has happened to Sami's mum, and in a rare show of emotion Noah is caught out by Sarah, realising that he may not be as tough as he appears, well done Barbara blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome