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Willing Hearts

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Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?

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Comment from Sankey
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This was such a lovely read from all angles. I look forward to more on Amber and Jesse. Just a couple of spags. I(t) took that long for her to get it.

"I'm doing everything i(n)[s] my power to make sure we are. How about you?"

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Thank you for finding these mistakes. I can't believe as often as I edit I didn't see them, but I didn't. That's frustrating. I appreciate you and the help.
Comment from Jacob1395
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You do a brilliant job of exploring Sami and Noah's relationship and I love how you're developing it over the coarse of the book. Another exciting chapter in your novel, Barbara, I'm really enjoying it.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Wendy G
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Sami and Noah's relationship seems to be developing well, although I don't think it will be easy for him to change after so many years of suppressing his feelings. They've still only known each other for less than a month, so it's early days in their commitment to each other. It will be interesting to see what they discover about Amber and Jesse.
Wendy

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
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I am curious about the Amber-Jesse connection, especially since Sami came across the information about them in the letter. I think I'm beginning to see daylight, but I'll wait for the information. This is great. You have done an excellent job of building up the Sami and Noah relationship. We're finding out about what happened to Amber. This is an intriguing story, and it's a coincidence Sami was led to the attic to discover this information. judi

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Thank you for the encouragement.
reply by judiverse on 16-Sep-2024
    You're very welcome. Sounds like you're on your way to ending another successful novel. judi
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    I hope so. I'm supposed to get the first 10 chapter to my publisher today.
Comment from BethShelby
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This was an interesting chapter. I figured you were spending time on Amber because she was going to turn out to be Noah's grandmother but if that is that is the case I don't know why Amber's daughter would have given him up for adoption. I guess I'll have to wait and find out. I enjoyed this chapter.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Hey, I like your thinking. I may need to do a rewrite. LOl Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
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Such a sad story about Jesse and Amber, but there must have been a lot of relationships like that particularly in wartime, but I guess we'll find out more about Amber and Jesse in due time. And one detects the relationship between Noah and Sami developing quickly, perhaps marriage is imminent, beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by royowen on 16-Sep-2024
    Well done
Comment from jim vecchio
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Yo didn't have to break that fourth wall at the bottom. It's clear you always have a reason for what you write. I'm anxious to know more about Amber's situation. Please keep'em coming.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
    People have still asked me if it is relevant. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
reply by jim vecchio on 15-Sep-2024
    Well, I'm enjoying every minute of it!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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You are sneaky you are. Another puzzle you added to the mix. How's it going with That rich guy who is in love with her and helped him out? I look forward to reading more of the story. good writing. Karen

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
    LOL Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 15-Sep-2024
    :-)
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 18-Sep-2024
    Now the contest is over I can tell you, I wrote a reversal poem called Xavier. It has points! :-)
Comment from GWHARGIS
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I liked the diversion of Amber and Jesse. I love a little story within a story. As gifted a writer as you are, I knew there was a purpose for this sub story. It wasn't a random anecdote. Really good. Gretchen

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
    Thank you for the kind review. Some people are still questioning it. I would never put something in a story without a reason.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Yes, I'm wondering about the importance of this relationship. But it's certainly stirred up Sami and made her very emotional, even broody. And Noah is disclosing a lot more than usual. We'll wait and see. An excellent chapter. Take care Debbie
Amber Mills wrote it to her (fiance)

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
    Oh my!! I can't believe I missed that over and over again. I appreciate the catch. I immediately changed it.