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Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Stranger Danger"Two very real women in not so real situation.
25 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
Interesting reading, again. I was not sure if you were still in Amish territory or had moved on. Is Rachelle going home with you? No spags and keep it all coming.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Interesting reading, again. I was not sure if you were still in Amish territory or had moved on. Is Rachelle going home with you? No spags and keep it all coming.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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We are still headed to the convention. Jane has joined along. Thank you fir this exceptional review and rating. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
Lol. Oh boy, this was such a good chapter. Honest, very honest, and written with wonderful humour! Jane flying through the windscreen, YOU being the one to buy the clothes - that was a noble sacrifice on Rachelle's part - she obviously greatly values your friendship, and a great sacrifice on your part as well as you dislike malls. Maybe it would have been simpler if Jane had gone through the windscreen. Yes, a long, long trip.
Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Lol. Oh boy, this was such a good chapter. Honest, very honest, and written with wonderful humour! Jane flying through the windscreen, YOU being the one to buy the clothes - that was a noble sacrifice on Rachelle's part - she obviously greatly values your friendship, and a great sacrifice on your part as well as you dislike malls. Maybe it would have been simpler if Jane had gone through the windscreen. Yes, a long, long trip.
Well done!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Wendy. I retaliate more in my head than in reality. I guess that's a good thing. I really appreciate the six and the exceptional review. Gretchen
Comment from Samantha Wymer
I don't blame you about hating malls. I do my shopping online and sent right to my door. What an honor to add Fanstory into your story. It's never good to see a butt crack, some folks don't know what a belt is. You figure that feel a breeze lol. Great writing.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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I don't blame you about hating malls. I do my shopping online and sent right to my door. What an honor to add Fanstory into your story. It's never good to see a butt crack, some folks don't know what a belt is. You figure that feel a breeze lol. Great writing.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Some people seem to enjoy the fresh air on their butt's. LOL. Thank you so much for this. Gretchen
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I guess they need to air it all out lol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
All your choices sound logical to me. It would be very hard for me to resist dumping her out in the country and racing away. Rebekah is so opposite Jane she would be someone to take home and coddle.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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All your choices sound logical to me. It would be very hard for me to resist dumping her out in the country and racing away. Rebekah is so opposite Jane she would be someone to take home and coddle.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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I agree. Jane should be left on the roadside. She still might be. Thank you so much for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Amish Porn - a girl milking a cow and smiling at the camera. HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! You are THE funniest woman I will ever know. I have a "Porn for Women" calendar that includes such sexy offerings as a muscle-y guy beneath a sink, saying, "Let's get a PROFESSIONAL to fix this" and another, clad in lavender rubber gloves, holding a spray bottle and scrubby, saying, "I'm gonna make this bathroom SHINE!" The best one, though, is the handsome guy, who looks all kinds of remorseful, whose speech bubble reads, "I was wrong." Still, your Amish porn beats all three of those times a million zillion.
I also love your fantasy of slamming on the brakes and watching our girl Jane crash through the windshield. If it has to come to that, so be it. I've taken one for the team; why shouldn't my car!
This was an exceptional chapter. You took the baton and carried us to big-time victory, Miss Talent. xoxox
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Amish Porn - a girl milking a cow and smiling at the camera. HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! You are THE funniest woman I will ever know. I have a "Porn for Women" calendar that includes such sexy offerings as a muscle-y guy beneath a sink, saying, "Let's get a PROFESSIONAL to fix this" and another, clad in lavender rubber gloves, holding a spray bottle and scrubby, saying, "I'm gonna make this bathroom SHINE!" The best one, though, is the handsome guy, who looks all kinds of remorseful, whose speech bubble reads, "I was wrong." Still, your Amish porn beats all three of those times a million zillion.
I also love your fantasy of slamming on the brakes and watching our girl Jane crash through the windshield. If it has to come to that, so be it. I've taken one for the team; why shouldn't my car!
This was an exceptional chapter. You took the baton and carried us to big-time victory, Miss Talent. xoxox
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Sorry this is so late. I just want to thank you for this awesome and uplifting review. I can't wait to go over what will happen next week. I'll be thinking about it tomorrow. This has just been an absolute blast to write with you. On to next week. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Yes, People like Jane will never understand why the rest of He world don't think like them, and I suppose they have a point, but there is a strong resistance in me. Trapped in a car is not pleasant. Your fictional adventures are very interesting, as if Miranda is with you, well done Gretchen, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Yes, People like Jane will never understand why the rest of He world don't think like them, and I suppose they have a point, but there is a strong resistance in me. Trapped in a car is not pleasant. Your fictional adventures are very interesting, as if Miranda is with you, well done Gretchen, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Miranda is very much with me. Lol. But Jane, she is a burr under the saddle of everyone she encounters. I appreciate your kind review. Gretchen
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Well done
Comment from patcelaw
You two ladies are Writing such a very delightful story and it has been very pleasant to listen to. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a very good week ahead. Patricia.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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You two ladies are Writing such a very delightful story and it has been very pleasant to listen to. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a very good week ahead. Patricia.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much, Patricia. I'm pleased you are enjoying this. Gretchen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Fantasizing about how to shut up an obnoxious person and sidelining a bad trucker (road rage) are close cousins. (smiley face here)
Well done. Well written.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Fantasizing about how to shut up an obnoxious person and sidelining a bad trucker (road rage) are close cousins. (smiley face here)
Well done. Well written.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Ah, but I was only fantasizing. I may or may not tap the brakes on this trip. Lol. Thank you so much, Wayne. Gretchen
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
"She giggles, clears her throat, and starts reading." That sounds like a 7-year-old granddaughter! Good, descriptive line.
I had hoped if I gave Rachelle a good review for her story, she'd give me her credit card and tell me, "No limit," but, so far, crickets.
We got to see what was going on inside the mall, as opposed to outside, with your narrative. Nicely coordinated and written. I enjoyed it.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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"She giggles, clears her throat, and starts reading." That sounds like a 7-year-old granddaughter! Good, descriptive line.
I had hoped if I gave Rachelle a good review for her story, she'd give me her credit card and tell me, "No limit," but, so far, crickets.
We got to see what was going on inside the mall, as opposed to outside, with your narrative. Nicely coordinated and written. I enjoyed it.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Pam. I'll be honest, if I had been thinking, I might have used her card for my own wardrobe. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from pome lover
well, your fantasizing about hitting the brakes had me laughing and thinking, "atta girl!" I also had a little pop up thought, does Rebekah even know who Snoopy and Woodstock are?
I can tell shopping is not your thing as you didn't describe the other outfit Rebekah got, which, to this shopper, was a bit negligent, I must say. You sent a picture to Rachelle, which was a kind of a lame excuse for not having to describe it, IMHO. However, more Jane stuff will more than make up for it, I'm sure.
I really love this crazy story.
Katharine
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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well, your fantasizing about hitting the brakes had me laughing and thinking, "atta girl!" I also had a little pop up thought, does Rebekah even know who Snoopy and Woodstock are?
I can tell shopping is not your thing as you didn't describe the other outfit Rebekah got, which, to this shopper, was a bit negligent, I must say. You sent a picture to Rachelle, which was a kind of a lame excuse for not having to describe it, IMHO. However, more Jane stuff will more than make up for it, I'm sure.
I really love this crazy story.
Katharine
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Honestly, Rachelle had posted a detailed description of the outfit so I didn't want to repeat. And when it comes to shopping or Jane, shopping will win out every time. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen